Friday, 21 August 2009

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 86 Busy, busy......

Running up the stairs he rapped on the door.

"It's past eight o'clock, he shouted through the lock,
"Are you children in bed?" he asked.

"What on earth are you doing in your pyjamas, running all over the town?" the said.
"No idea" said Wee Willie Winkie, "perhaps it's because I'm a nursery rhyme character!"

Wee Willie Winkie runs through the town,
Upstairs and downstairs in his nightgown,
Tapping at the window and crying through the lock,
Are all the children in their beds, it's past eight o'clock?

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Anonymous said...

You are so clever my friend. I love it. Well done once again. :) Have a great Friday :) xoxoxox

anthonynorth said...

A nice adaptation there :-)
Enjoyed that.

quilly said...

We wouldn't know about Willies wee winkle if he ran a little slower or his gown as a tad bit longer. :p

I loved your adaption.

G-Man said...

Did that come out of Quilly?

Anyway, excellent 55 Ake.
I can't wait till Jack Spratt hits town!
Thanks for this whimsical tale, and have a Wonderful Week-End...G

Hootin' Anni said...

Pretty darned creative if you want my opinion!!

My 55 is posted here. Have a super weekend. See you next week, I hope.

TBM said...

I love Wee Willie Winkie! When my daughter was little, she always wanted to know why WWW was crying at the lock. LOL

snowelf said...

so totally cute!!!!

happy friday--and is it just me, or did this feel like the longest week ever! :P


Dr.John said...

You are still the master.
A nursery rhyme character-priceless.

Empress Bee (of the high sea) said...

i think he was here last night, we went to bed early!

smiles, bee

Wait. What? said...

Very creatively done!!!

buffalodick said...

When I was a kid, we had to be home when the street lights came on!

Alice Audrey said...

Yeah, some of those nursery rhymes have no rhyme or reason.

Maude Lynn said...

That's so cute!

Pam said...

great job w ur version, ake :) tho i think i'd be a bit skerred (slang: scared) if willie's wee winkie was running around town. lol

Linda said...

Clever, clever as always!

Mona said...

O Dear! That was one character our mom used to scare us with, to put us to bed :D

Spiky Zora Jones said...

akelamalu: Ahhhh, yes. I love it. I'm so glad to read this...oh, it reminds me of mother reading to us...I loved Wee Willy Winkle...and the thoughts in my head when mom read it to us. hehehe

have a wonderful weekend sweets.
xxx Ciao honey.

Fandango said...

We dragons have our own nursery rhymes. Willie gets eaten in ours.
Great 55

secret agent woman said...

Finally, I saw the ending coming! I alwys thought Wee Willie Winkie was a bit of a freak.

nitebyrd said...

Excellent! That was my favorite nursery rhyme when I was little! I like yours better now.

Travis Cody said...


bindhiya said...

Excellent! loved it..
WWW can do nothing here our bed time is 9.30 :)

Cloudia said...

I love your clever mind, my Sistah!!

Comfort Spiral

maryt/theteach said...

Wee Willie Winkie an old, but wonderful poem that we all probably know by heart... :)

Unknown said...

I like it! [:-)

Shrinky said...

These days we have a very different name for middle-aged Wee-Willie-Winkies who peek through letterboxes, half-naked, to check up on our kids, don't we? (smile).

Very creative, Akelamalu, as ever.

Akelamalu said...

Cheers Thom :)

Glad you enjoyed it Anthony, thankyou. :)

LOL you're right there Quilly!

Quilly's a hoot isn't she G-man? LOL

Why thank you Anni, how kind you are.

Well most nursery rhymes don't make sense do they JAPRA, so I can understand your daughter's confusion. :)

I think the weeks are flying by Snowelf but then I'm on holiday and that's what happens when you're on holiday isn't it?
Glad you liked it hon. x

Oh you're very kind Dr. John, thankyou. :)


Thankyou Cat :)

We did too Buff!

You're right Alice Audrey :)

Thanks Mama Zen :)

Cheers Ciara, I think he'd be in trouble if he did it now!

Aw thanks Linda x

I'm sorry if it brought back bad memories Mona:(

Oh you naughty girl Spiky, whatever were you thinking? (wink)

Oh crikey Fandango, poor Willie!

Yes SAW strange to say the least. I wonder who the rhyme was written about? :0

I'm pleased you liked it Nitebyrd :)

Cheers Trav x

Ah WWW won't catch you out then Bindi LOL

Thankyou Cloudia my friend. x

Yes I think everyone knows this rhyme Mary :)

I'm glad you do Nick :)

Oh yes we do Shrinky! :0

Julia Phillips Smith said...

I always loved that nursery rhyme. Love how your first picture made it seem so ominous.

Susan at Stony River said...

Oh cute! I had to laugh at the last line!

Lulda Casadaga said...

Today it's the parents that usually hit the bed first! :D
Nice one!!

Ron said...

OUTSTANDING, m'dear!!!!

I had totally forgotten about this nursery rhyme!?!?

Clever lady, you are!!!!

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Julia, glad you enjoyed it.

I'm pleased it made you laugh Susan :)

You are so right Lulda!

Ah, you wouldn't have guessed the ending then Ron x

Anonymous said...