Friday, 25 February 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #153 Cool Water.....

The water was cool and pleasant.

Sunlight dancing on the surface.

People sitting on the bank, lazily reading, eating and drinking.

What's that dangling in the water?

He made a grab for it,

only to be hauled out of the water

into a keep net, with a hook in his mouth!

Who'd be a fish?

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Maggie May said...

With a bit of luck.... he might be thrown back in!

Love the jewellery in the post below. You are very lucky to have a friend like that! Turquoise is one of my favourite colours.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Valerie said...

A totally unexpected ending. Yes, I'd hate to be a fish.

A Daft Scots Lass said...

What a twist.

Beach Bum said...

Personally I'd like to be shark sometimes. They are beautiful, sleek creatures that cruise the oceans. But the get a raw deal and are very overfished.

Beach Bum said...

Great story by the way!

Akelamalu said...

Hopefully he will Maggie. I agree with you about the jewellery and yes I am very lucky. :)

I'm glad the ending was a surprise to you as I intended Valerie. :)

Thanks Scots Lass :)

Oooh no Beach Bum sharks have such DEAD eyes! Glad you liked the 55. :)

Ellie Garratt said...

What a clever twist. I never saw it coming!

Empress Bee (of the high sea) said...

oh i hope they throw him back!

smiles, bee

Brian Miller said...

you know i hope to catch a few of those as soon as it warms up...

MorningAJ said...

Oh poor thing!

Ron said...

Your endings ALWAYS blow me away!

They're BRILLIANT, m'dear!

Thank you for sharing your clever talent!

Have a wonderful weekend!


G-Man said...

Who's doing the fishing?
You Rocked another one Pearlie Mae!
Loved your 55.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Finding Pam said...

Brillant once again. You never cease to amaze me when your clever use of words.

Have a great weekend.

anthonynorth said...

Who indeed. Nice one.

Shrinky said...

You completely got me on that one! I love how you view things from a totally unexpected angle.

Bubba said...

I've known lots of people who were just like that fish. LOL!

Nice 55, Akelamalu! (Aloha!)

Maude Lynn said...

I sure wasn't expecting that!

Akelamalu said...

Glad you liked it Ellie

I'm sure they did Bee x

Ah, you're a fisherman Brian

I know, it's a shame AJ :(

So pleased you enjoyed it Ron x

Captain Birdseye G-man? ;)

Why thankyou Pam, you're very kind.

Not me Anthony!

Cheers Shrinky, glad you liked it.

Me too Eric!

Ah got you then Mama Zen! LOL

Spiky Zora Jones said...

how very clever. i've never seen it from under the surface of the's wonderfully written. akelamalu, you impress me more and more each time I read you.

and I can only say...more please. :)

tony said...

And I was reading your post eating Fish & Chips..........!

Jannie Funster said...

Right in keeping with mine, as I was fishing this week.

AWESOME reversal here!! :)

You had me hook, line and er, um, groan, sinker with that end switcheroo. :)


Jannie Funster said...

P.S. I will make YOUR sidebar button next. Look for it in the next day or two!!


Dominic de Mattos said...

Oh very good Akelamalu!

Thanks for dropping by and commenting. The answer is yes I can, and I have posted a video to prove it! lol


Travis Cody said...

Stay away from the shiny!

Akelamalu said...

I'm so pleased you enjoyed my 55s Spiky x

Oh, I hope it didn't put you off your fish and chips tony!

Haha, great minds think alike eh Jannie?

Well that's some feat Dominic! I'll look out for the video.:0

You're right Trav - all that glitters is not gold! ;)

Lorraine said...

I'd love to be able to write a short story. I'm useless though. I might have written books, but never did learn the art of brevity. If one word will do you can guarantee I'll use 20!

Akelamalu said...

Trying to write in 55 words or 140 characters is a great challenge Lorraine and a lot easier than you might expect. After the first few one does it definitely becomes easier. :)

mrsnesbitt said...

Hilarious! Always makes me smile.

Jannie Funster said...

YOUR button is up on my sidebar now, and I think it's really cute!


Along These Lines ... said...

Flash Fiction - is he anything like Flash Gordon?

Evalinn said...

Great piece! :-) Hope you´ve had a nice weekend.

secret agent woman said...
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secret agent woman said...

Oops! That comment was for the post before!

Poor fishie.

Cloudia said...

I love your tasty gems, Lucky Gal!

Aloha from Honolulu,

Comfort Spiral


Akelamalu said...

I'm always happy to make you smile Denise x

Thanks Jannie I love the button. :)

Possibly Nick!

Cheers Evalinn x

It's easy to mix them up SAW. LOL

Thanks Cloudia xx