Friday, 18 September 2009

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 90 Driving.....

The wheels on his car were spinning on the icy surface.

He hated driving on ice.

Suddenly it was out of control.

He pushed his foot down hard, the car slowed.

As he ground to a halt he heard his mother's voice....

"Jimmy, time for tea now, you can play in your pedal car later".
Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Flowerpot said...

you were up early Ak! another great flash story and have a good weekend!

quilly said...

LOL! Well done!

mrsnesbitt said...

Well you have me hooked now. I have been reading your Flash 55 contributions for some time now so indeed today I have written my first contribution!

Gloria said...

Brilliant . . Flash Fiction at it's best!!!

I'm hooked and am going to sign up to follow you.

I'm new to blogging so hope you'll pop over sometime. I'm sure you'll find something on my blog that you'll like!!

I'll be back to read some more. See you soon!

Gloria said...

. . . and so good to find a blogger from the UK, the land of my birth!!

snowelf said...

I hope your nerves are feeling better. I cannot believe the gall of that taxi driver! My friend in Canada had almost the exact same thing happen to her when a taxi pulled a u-turn from the curb in front of her as well! ugh!

I hope things get back to normal quick for you. And tell little Jimmy to be careful on that ice! ;)


buffalodick said...

I really thought it was going to be about your accident!

Daryl said...

Ah fun .. I hope Jimmy learns that when driving on ice, one needs to steer into a swerve, pumping the brakes not slamming them or else he'll end up in a crash ...

Sorry. I could help myself, as soon as I read he pushed his foot down hard, I thought OH NO He'll smash the car!

Hey is it my fault you write so well I had no ideas it was a TOY car?

Susan at Stony River said...

What fun! We're so often pulled out of our fun by something stressful---it's brilliant to feel his stress and then wow, discover it's playtime. I really enjoyed that!

Empress Bee (of the high sea) said...

that was a good one!

daughter #1 had one of those when she was little, hers was a red mustang and it got stolen. gosh i had forgotten all about that until now.

smiles, bee

Dumdad said...

Good one!

anthonynorth said...

Nicely done. I do love twisty tales :-)

Ron said...

I don't know HOW you think of these. But m' are the BOMB!

You amaze me with your clever wit!

And thank you for yet another brilliant 55! I so enjoy these!

Have a great weekend!

Lulda Casadaga said...

I can see where you got your inspiration for this 55...I just read your blog below and I'm glad you are ok. And thank god you had some honest witnesses!! Good luck!

Maggie May said...

That was a good, fun story!
I just love your Shy Talks comment that you left over at my place! Hilarious!

g-man said...

Fiction or Non-Fiction...
Ake loves her car tales!
Excellent 55 My Dear...
I just had a spa a tea myself...:-)
Have a Safe Week-End....G

Dr.John said...

I loved it. Yours are always full of misdirection like a magician with words.

Fandango said...

Another sneaky human.
Good 55
Thank you for commenting on ours.

Spiky Zora Jones said...

I love your imagination. I want to get in your head and open all the drawers and doors and see all that is akelamalu.

You are so intriguing as a person and writer.

thanks honey...I loved it.

go ahead...say it. 'GOT YAH!' hehehe...yes you did, again.
ciao honey.

Anonymous said...

How appropriate to do something after that horrid incident you had the other day. You are so clever my friend. I truly don't know how you do it. Just awesome :) Have a wonderful Friday and a great weekend :) Aloha

San said...

You have a way with a turning plot. And in so few words. That's a challenge you manage brilliantly.

Cloudia said...

you got us again!!!!! ;-]


Comfort Spiral

Cloudia said...

oh! hope you & car feel better ;-]

Dianne said...

this one made me smile

hope you're feeling OK, glad you weren't hurt!

Linda said...

At least he's learning at a young age how to handle a car!

How are you doing? Feel okay I hope? Any more news from that idiot cabbie??

Travis Cody said...


I had a Big Wheel when I was a kid. We didn't live where it snowed, but we did get a lot of rain and that would make lots of mud. And skidding about in the mud on a Big Wheel is FUN!

Tall Kay said...

What a darling blog you have here my dear! How could I have missed this before? Excellent witty 55 and I'll be back soon. Have a GREAT weekend! Tall Karen

lettuce said...

this made me smile

(and also made me wonder if we'll get snow again this winter....)

Shrinky said...

Ah, you do this so well - smile. You had me there (again). Bravo!

Akelamalu said...

I was up early Flowerpot, but I had scheduled this to post at 6 a.m. anyway. :)

Thanks Quilly :)

Oh that's great Mrs. N, I look forward to reading yours. :)

Welcome Gloria, nice to meet you. I'm pleased you enjoyed my 55 and look forward to your future visits.

I'm fine thanks Snowelf, just a tad annoyed at the taxi driver but I will let that go. :)

Aha, gotcha Buff! ;)

Got you too eh Daryl? LOL

Thanks Susan, I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

Oh your daughter must have been upset when her car got stolen Bee :(

Cheers Dumdad :)

I like twisty tales too Anthony :)

Aw thanks Ron, you're very kind. x

I actually wrote this 55 a while ago, before my accident Lulda - maybe it was premonition! :0

I'm pleased my comment brought a smile to your face Maggie :)

I hope this is the last of the car tales G-man! ;)

Why thankyou Dr. John, you're very kind. x

Sneaky? Me Fandango? LOL

Haha I got you too Spiky! Glad you like it hon.

As I told Lulda I wrote this a while ago Thom but it seemed appropriate to post it after what happened earlier in the week. :)

Oh thankyou San I'm pleased you enjoyed it. :)

I'm feeling fine thanks Cloudia and the car will be fixed next week. :)

I'm happy to make you smile Dianne and thankyou. x

Yes he's learning young Linda. Not heard from the cabbie but don't expect to, the insurance company are dealing with it. :)

I bet your Mum loved it when you got all muddy Trav - NOT! LOL

Welcome Tall Kay and thanks, I'm so pleased you like it here. :)

Thanks Lettuce. I hope we don't get snow while I still have to drive to work. Come January it can snow all it likes! LOL

Thanks Shrinky I like it when my twists work. :)

Maude Lynn said...

Awww, this is cute!

Anndi said...

I lost control of my ride-on once... it was a giant plastic ketchup bottle with wheels. I wonder what it would have looked like had I injured myself and bled.

Valerie said...


Akelamalu said...

Thanks Mama Zen :)

It would have scared your mother half to death Andi! LOL

Cheers Valerie :)

Caron said...

What a good ending!

Connie T. said...

This is cute.

MarmiteToasty said...

Oneday, I might just guess the end..... but NOT this time... again LOL


Sandi McBride said...

LOVED IT!!! L O V E D I T !!!

secret agent woman said...

This flashed me back to watching my sons drive around the yeard ina tiny electric jeep when they were little boys.

Real Live Lesbian said...

You always rock the socks off of the 55!

A Lady's Life said...

Well this is how you learn. My son is going for his real license now and his friend doesn't know the gas pedal from the brake. So we are taking him to drive the electric cars at the nursery so he gets a chance to learn and maybe try out the gas cars on the go cart car racing strip nearby. The kids used to love it when they went for birthday parties.Life is good. :)

A Lady's Life said...

Well this is how you learn. My son is going for his real license now and his friend doesn't know the gas pedal from the brake. So we are taking him to drive the electric cars at the nursery so he gets a chance to learn and maybe try out the gas cars on the go cart car racing strip nearby. The kids used to love it when they went for birthday parties.Life is good. :)

Akelamalu said...

Thankyou dsmcaron :)

Cheers Connie :)

LOL got you again eh Marmie?

I'm pleased you loved it Sandi x

I'm glad it brought back nice memories for you SAW x

Aw thanks RLL x

That's a great idea with the cars ALL!

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