Her whole being screamed "NO"!
as she watched the rescue team take her husband from the wrecked car.
He was still alive, she heard someone shout.
She hovered as close as she could get, then heard someone say
"Too late, she's gone"
as she turned to see her broken body being lifted into the ambulance.
Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.
35 comments:
I like this 55 a lot. I will write one. I have not done one for a while, so off I go to do it.
You excelled yourself with this one, I love it. You've just decided me on which story to post next, or at least quite soon.
Great twist. Excellent.
That's lovely but very sad.
Very well written.
Sad!!!! But great work.
Artsy-Fartsy is my Friday Post Just scroll down below the 'artsy' part. hehehehehe
Sad Words: Great Writing.
I'm not sure if I got this one - the hubby has been 2 xing her right?
oh no! gotta be a scary moment looking down at your dead self..nice 55.
oooo, spooky!
--snow
Oh good luck Connie, I'll pop by to read it.
I'm glad to be of inspiration to you Valerie, glad you liked it.
Why thankyou Anthony :)
Yes it is a little sad, glad you enjoyed it AJ
Cheers Hootin'Anni :)
Thanks Tony :)
No Grandpa, they were in an accident together and she died he didn't.
I think OOB experiences must be very scary Brian!
Well it is Halloween weekend Snow x
oh no, she's gone? poor little thing...
hugs, bee
xoxoxoxoxoxo
OMG, this totally surprised me at the end!
EXCELLENT twist, m'dear! Never saw it coming!
BRAVA!
Have a great weekend!
X
Something I always dread.
The poor husband.
"I see dead people."
Creepy 55, Akelamalu!
Happy Halloween!
Chilling, Ake!
Aloha from Honolulu
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Google the song DOA by Bloodrock!
Grusomely delicious Ake..
Loved your 55.
Thank you so much for playing today, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
This is really chilling. It would make a great beginning for a longer story.
That was sad but strangely, I guessed the ending. I don't usually manage to do that with your stories.
Maggie X
Nuts in May
Now that's a Halloween story...BOO!!!
I like it a lot...I'm gonna tellit tonight when we're carving jack-o lanterns. :)
honey...I've been trying to get into your blog. but it stops me and locks up. I tried again before leaving for home...and on the second try...I'm in. the NET is wacky lately.
have a great weekend. xxx
oh really clever!
have a great weekend
Yes, she's gone Bee :(
I love it when the twist works Ron, thanks m'dear. x
I dread it too Aims
He's got to live with what happened sadly SAW :(
You got it Eric
Indeed it is Cloudia
Glad you liked it G-man
It could be expanded for sure Pattiken
Sorry the twist didn't work for you this week Maggie but I'm glad you enjoyed it anyway.
I'm sorry you've having problems getting on my blog Spiky. Hope the story goes down well tonight.
Why thankyou Lettuce x
Oh that was a spine chilling one lovely. (Hope you're ok. Sorry it's been a while. x)
Okay, you win the spooky prize! ;0
Very, very well done! Excellent story.
I totally forgot my 55 this week -- not surprising since I had so much trouble keeping the days straight!
Very sad.
Wow, you just never know, do you. Your number could be up any time.
Enjoy life and the ones we love while we have them.
xo
Oh wow -- how excellent! (in a chilling sort of way --) I always love your 55s.
oooo...goosepimples!
Thanks Jo and it's good to see you. :)
Why thankyou Hope :)
LOL I can understand how you forgot your 55 Quilly with the mix up!
Yes it is sad Trav
You got it, exactly Jannie
Aw thanks Susan, how kind. x
It is a goosepimply story isn't it Annie
Perfect for the Halloween season - this one gave me a shiver!
Happy Halloween, m'dear!
smart 55.
keep it up.
Ominous and sinister story--I love it. I like the big spzces between yhe lines--It adds to the suspense!
OOps...Two typos in my comment! The second sentence should say: I like the big spaces between the lines...
Cheers Linda :)
Thanks Jingle :)
I guessed what you meant Pat, glad you enjoyed it.
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