Friday, 24 October 2008

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 49 Quick Draw......

Quick Draw

Carlos picked up his gun.

This time he was ready for Marco.

Marco had got the better of him to often.

They faced each other and drew their guns, seemingly at the same time.

Carlos's shot hit Marco clean between the eyes,

before Marco even had time to pull the trigger

of his water pistol.

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.

I won't be doing a 55 next week as I'll be in Poland on a mini break.


ciara said...

hehe nice twist, ake! :) lucky you to be going to poland. wish i could come, too. hehe i'm up.

Flowerpot said...

Poland? How amazing - looking forward to hearing about that Ak!

Dumdad said...

This story makes a bit of a splash!

Have fun in Poland.

cheshire wife said...

Gives a whole new meaning to pistols at dawn.

Enjoy your break in Poland.

g-man said...

Have a few Piorgi's for me!!
Thanks for playing, and have a Great Week-End...G
Have a safe trip x

buffalodick said...

Have a good time in Poland, and don't forget the water pistol!

Sally said...

Oh wow!

Poland. How exciting. Enjoy!!

Julia Smith said...

Have a great mini-excursion. My sister-in-law is from Poland - I'd better not tell her you're going or she'll get homesick.

Sandi McBride said...

Unexpected fun! Loved it...
Marco better watch his back!

James Goodman said...

lol, great 55 and an even better twist. :D

Linda said...

Whew! I was hoping it was going to be something like that!

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

water gun!?! ha ha ha ha ha

smiles, bee

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Ciara, I'll you all about my trip when we get back. :)

I'll take lots of photographs to show you Flowerpot

Very witty Dumdad :)

It does, doesn't it Cheshire Wife? ;)

I don't know what a Piorgi is G-man, but if you say I should have some I will! ;)

Oh Buff I don't think I've got room in my suitcase for the water pistol! ;)

I'm banking on having a good time Sally! :0

I wish I'd known about your sister in law being from Poland earlier Jula, she could have given me some tips on what to see and where to go!

Carlos had better watch his Sandi!

Thanks James, glad you liked it.

They had to be water pistols Linda I hate guns.

A relief eh Bee?

Daryl said...

Poland ... nice .. cant wait to see the pix

enjoy and travel safe


Real Live Lesbian said...

I always love these. You have such a gift!

Queenie said...

Squirt, squirt, speack before you go to Poland...

Cloudia said...

aloha dear;
Loved the twist in your concise little story. your sites music ROCKS!!!!!!
Enjoy Poland; please take some pictures to share with us.
Cheers from Waikiki

acey said...

ake, this is so fun to read! you're really great with stories with unique twists. :D

have a safe and fun trip!!! :D you take care, ok?

Mona said...

Whew! it was a game of water pistols!

You are the queen of twists in the end Akela! :D

Dr.John said...

Well that was one good story in fifty five words. Some Friday I'll have to try that.

Ron said...

OMG...this was TOOO funny!

You had me eagerly anticipating this!!!

Hey...have an AWESOME time in Poland! Can't wait for you to share the photos!!!

Have a great weekend, Akelamalu!

Donnetta Lee said...

Very, very cute, "A." I enjoyed it! Mine's up, too. D

Dianne said...

now that's the kind of gun play I can live with !!!

safe trip

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Daryl, hopefully I'll have lots of photos to show you.

You've very kind to say so RLL thanks. x

Speak Monday Queenie x

It's really time I changed my music Cloudia but it will be more Motown I promise. :)

I'm so pleased you enjoy these 55s Acey. x

What a compliment, thank you Mona :)

I'd love to see what you come up with D. John - it would be something good I bet!

I'm happy I didn't disappoint your anticipation Ron. I'll tell you all about Poland when I get back. x

Cheers Donnetta, I'll be over to read yours shortly.

Me too Dianne, though I really don't like guns at all.

Travis said...

I love a nice mini-holiday. Enjoy!

Akelamalu said...

We love our mini-breaks too Trav :)

storyteller said...

Just when I was thinking you’d gotten a little too violent for me, you dropped the surprise. I should have known ;--)
Hugs and blessings,

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