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Friday, 18 March 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #156 The Big Race.......




He'd been looking forward to the big race.

The most important one on the calendar.

He'd practiced daily for months.

Round and round the track,

becoming faster and faster with each lap.

He was fit.

He was keen.

He was ready.

There was only one thing would stop him from winning today....

an overweight jockey.



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28 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Ah, there's many of them nowadays ;-)
Nice one.

You'll find mine here.

A Daft Scots Lass said...

awesome mine in here

Brian Miller said...

oh that will weigh you down...and give you a pain in the back...ha. nice 55.

Valerie said...

Poor horse to be treated so cruelly by a weighty rider.

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

oh no! i hope he gets a skinny one!

smiles, bee
xoxoxoxoxoxo

MorningAJ said...

Cheltenham Festival gets in the blood doesn't it?

Good 55!

G-Man said...

And just how many 'Stones' is too fat?
I just Love Equine 55's.
You Rock Ake!!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Beach Bum said...

Awesome!
I can see the frustration in the horse standing in the starting gate groaning under the weight.

gautami tripathy said...

Good one!

lost in a maze

Jingle said...

love it instantly,

perfect 55 for a laugh,
the last two lines hit home..

cheers,
your 55 rocks.

Daryl said...

Laughter, applause .. envy of your cleverness and brevity

Ron said...

"There was only one thing would stop him from winning today....

an overweight jockey"

Bwhahhahahaahhahahaha! That TOTALLY caught me off-guard!

YOU. ARE. BRILLIANT!

Brava to another Flash 55, m'dear!

Happy weekend!

X

Akelamalu said...

I think you're right Anthony ;)

Cheers Scots Lass

LOL that's true Brian!

Indeed Valerie

I do too Bee ;)

Yes it does AJ :)

Not sure what the limit is G but the poor horse will know.

Me too Beach Bum :0

Thanks Gautami :)

So pleased you liked it Jingle :)

Aw thank you Daryl x

Glad you enjoyed this one Ron x

Linda said...

Oh no, NOT the dreaded overweight jockey crushing the winning horse's dreams under his thighs!

Good one as always, my dear!

Cloudia said...

Love the punch line!




Warm Aloha to you
from Honolulu!


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Belinda Munoz said...

I liked the weighty twist!

Dianne said...

fat jockey!!
brilliant and hilarious

Jannie Funster said...

Ahhhh, love it!!

Brilliant take on a horse ready and rarin' to race.

xo

Travis Cody said...

I've always wondered if a horse has any thoughts about having to race. I'd like to think they are happy about doing it.

Mama Zen said...

Poor guy!

Akelamalu said...

You got it Linda, great analogy!

Cheers Cloudia

Ah thanks Belinda :)

Thanks Dianne glad you like it.


I'm pleased you enjoyed it Jannie :)

That's always crossed my mind too Trav

Hopefully he got a lightweight rider Mama Zen

Maggie May said...

Oh poor thing!
Must admit that I wasn't expecting that ending but might have known that you'd give it a twist! Cos you usually do!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Sharon J said...

Absolutely stupendous :)

Spiky Zora Jones said...

I commented her yesterday and it was eaten up by the blog-monster.
:(

it;s true huh...a horse has to be swift and an overweight jockey with a nick-name like...Big Jim is even worse. hehehe.

fab sweetie, as always. xxx

Sandra said...

At least he had a good excuse! Mine is bad knees!

Lorraine said...

I wish I was a s good as you at doing something like that is so few words. Poor horse. It happens too much too.

Gledwood said...

I like it!

secret agent woman said...

I was close - I was picturing a greyhound!