Friday, 20 January 2012

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #186 Stage Door...

She stood waiting patiently with the crowd at the stage door.

He was a marvelous singer, she had all his records.

It was understandable why he had so many fans.

She loved him.  She hoped he would notice her.

As he came through the door he spotted her.

"What you doing here Mum?" he asked.

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Beach Bum said...

Yeah, moms are their kids biggest fans.

Cloudia said...


You have the TOUCH-

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de engineur said...

A case of non appreciating son?

Valerie said...

Aww, I do like this one, Pearl. Written like a Mum too.

Daryl Edelstein said...

HA! I didnt expect that .. good job.

Akelamalu said...

Indeed they are Beach :)

Thanks Cloudia x

He's not a mummy's boy de engineur ;)

Glad you liked it Valerie :)

Ah the little twist worked then Daryl. :)

Empress Bee (of the high sea) said...

oh THAT was a good one!!!

smiles, bee

Ron said...

"What you doing here Mum?" he asked."


Oh, how SWEET!

I ALWAYS love your twists.

Clever lady you are!

Have a great weekend, m'dear!


anthonynorth said...

Now that's a hip mum.

Shrinky said...

OMG, this totally floored me, I really DID NOT see that punch line coming - haaaaaaaaaaa!

(And I have to blushingly admit it reminds me of me, when I snuck into a gig the eldest and his band performed - with my tripod and flash and all the paraphinallia - he wanted to throttle me..but boy, did I get some great stills - hehe!)

G-Man said...

Patendly Pearl...
You always come thru!
Wonderfully written Ake.
Loved your 55
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

cheshire wife said...

Was he pleased to see her or not?

MorningAJ said...

Probably the only way to get to see him! Nice one.

Akelamalu said...

Thankyou Bee x

So pleased you enjoyed it Ron x

Indeed she is Anthony :)

Ah glad to hear the twist was a surprise Shrinky. I can imagine you doing that, you're a good mum. x

Why thankyou G-man, I aim to please. ;)

Who knows with kids Cheshire Wife? ;)

Brian Miller said...

awww..this is cute and tender for me...glad he noticed her...

Mama Zen said...

I never saw it coming! Great twist, Ake!

secret agent woman said...

Aw, his biggest fan!

Banker Chick said...

He has his mom as his biggest fan. I got the impression he didn't think about her a lot. What you doing here, mum. She should have been back stage.

Anonymous said...

Lesson: Don't ever let your kids get famous!

Linda said...

Of course she's there, I'd be there too if I had a famous child! But I'd like to hope I didn't have to wait outside the stage door with the other groupies!

tony said...

Nice One Akey! Have A Fine Weekend!Rock On!

Dianne said...

Mum should have been in the front row!
I thought it was going to be a stalker with a giant knife

Misty Dawn said...

If you haven't, you really need to put a book together of these. They are so entertaining. I love the twists you put in your writing.

Lorraine said...

You always manage it don't you? So very clever with words. x

Pat said...

This is funny and poignant all at the same time!

Akelamalu said...

So am I Brian :)

Glad you liked the twist Mama Zen :)

She is SAW

Well I don't think he was expecting her BankerChick

You could be right there Silverthoughts2!

Well I would too Linda and like you I'd be on the front row not at the stage door!

Cheers Tony :)

Oooh I never thought of a stalker Dianne, still the twist was a surprise for you wasn't it?

Aw thanks Misty. Maybe when I get to 200 I'll put a little book together.

Why thankyou Lorraine, how kind of you to say that. x

Thanks Pat :)

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