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Friday, 9 September 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #176 Alone...






The baby clung to his dead mother.   

Surrounded by the mutilated bodies of his family,

hacked, dismembered, bloody.

The gang had come at dawn with guns and machetes, sparing none.

He lay silently, they hadn't seen him, he was spared.

Much later......

the ranger picked up the orphaned gorilla and put him in the truck.




Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.

29 comments:

Valerie said...

Well thought out.
I hate violence of any kind, yet the world seems full of it.

Michelle said...

That was excellent. I started out thinking war (coming from Mimi's via blogblast for Peace too!) and then the twist.

Perfect. :-)

A Daft Scots Lass said...

Very well written!

Kirstin said...

Brilliant mini story (and sad :( )

G-Man said...

A story I'm sure that was repeated MANY times and still goes on.
Excellent 55 Ake...
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

G-Man said...

....Did you forget to stop by?

Daydreamertoo said...

Isn't that dreadful. We humans aren't at all civillised, even now.

Melanie said...

So sad...well written

Linda said...

Indeed well written but definitely very sad.

Akelamalu said...

I agree with you Valerie :(

Thanks Michelle :)

Cheers Scot's Lass x

Thankyou Kirstin

I know and it's so sad G-man. I didn't forget to visit you hon, I'm just late today. x

You're right, there are some humans that shouldn't be allowed to call themselves that Daydreamertoo.

Thanks Melanie

Very sad, but unfortunately it does happen Linda. Thanks hon. x

Ron said...

OMG...this ripped my heart out.

And like you shared...it's sad, but unfortunately it DOES happen.

So, thank you for sharing this, m'dear.

Brilliantly expressed.

Have a wonderful weekend......X

Akelamalu said...

Reports of it happening ripped my heart out too Ron. x

Empress Bee (of the high sea) said...

oh my word! how awful for the poor little thing! what a trauma!

hugs, bee
xoxoxoxoox

Brian Miller said...

dang...thanks for shedding light on this atrocity...ugh. nicely penned...

Travis Cody said...

That's so sad.

secret agent woman said...

So very sad what people will do to to other living creatures, human and non-human.

Morning said...

love it.

glad that the baby survived.

:)

A Daft Scots Lass said...

you have an award!!!

Beach Bum said...

Great job!

Akelamalu said...

The saddest thing is it actually happens Bee :(

Thanks Brian

Yes it is Trav

Unbelievable isn't it SAW. :(

Me too Morning

Thanks Scots Lass

Cheers Beach

gautami tripathy said...

Sad. But glad that the baby survived..

noting it all down

theothersideofparis said...

On top form. Again!

Alice said...

hi, here is a crumb trail to my new 'space'

luv 'alice' (fff)

Mama Zen said...

That is so sad!

snowelf said...

Poor baby monkey, :( But hopefully he is placed somewhere where he is adopted and loved and happy. ;) Excellent 55. Really really good this week! :)

--snow

Akelamalu said...

I'm glad the baby survived too gautami

Why thankyou Dumdad

Thanks Alice

I know Mama Zen, but it happens apparently. :(

Thankyou Snow,I'm sure he was looked after.

Lorraine said...

shocking, heart wrenching and so much said in so few words. The twist at the end makes it no less tragic. Yet another incredible piece of writing.

You should put them all together in a book.

MorningAJ said...

That's really good. So few people think about the great apes and the horrors that they undergo in the wild. (not that I'm suggesting we lock them up in zoos either.)
Great 55.

Akelamalu said...

Thankyou for your kind words Lorraine, it's so sad that this actually happens.

Thanks AJ, the great apes aren't safe anywhere these days.