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Friday, 10 December 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #144 The perfect gift......



Christmas morning found her tearing at the wrapping paper enclosing her Christmas present.



Tricia gently removed the contents and stared at a beautiful silver framed photo,



a perfect shot of her and Dan in a passionate embrace.



She gasped in shock, dismay clutched at her heart.



No doubt now, her husband knew about her affair.



Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.

32 comments:

Beach Bum said...

Oh boy! The last sentence actually surprised me. Great story!

Grandpa said...

Ooops!

who said...

What a creative husband. This was too funny

Valerie said...

Another surprise ending. You're so good at this. I wouldn't trust the husband any more; he just proved he's capable of ... anything.

HOOTIN' ANNI said...

Whoa...didn't see that coming!!! Excellent.

Here's mine

Hope you can find time to visit.
Happy Friday
Happy weekend.

MorningAJ said...

Ooooo. Merry Christmas! ;)

Dumdad said...

Another good 'un!

Ellie said...

Wow. What a great ending!

Brian Miller said...

dolp! lucy...you got some esplainin to do! nto sure i want to hear what comes next...

tony said...

"It's The Thought That Counts"! :)

Daryl said...

What a clever twist!

Finding Pam said...

You amaze me with you writing. That was really a zinger at the end.

Eric Alder said...

Uh-oh! Looks like somebody's heading for a very NEW year!

What a twist! Nice 55!

Thom said...

Ooops...busted. LOL I'd hate to be in her pumps!!! LOL Very well done my friend. Have a great weekend :)

Spiky Zora Jones said...

akelamalu: Ahahaha...busted!

I guess that's one way a husband can tell his wife that he knows...

I'm sure Christmas day is going to suck.

I loved it and I love how your mind just thinks these things up so effortlessly.

ciao honey. xxx

Mama Zen said...

Oh, this is awesome! I never saw it coming.

Monkey Man said...

That was AWESOME. Love surprise endings.

My 55 is HERE .

Akelamalu said...

I'm happy it surprised you Beach Bum :)

Ooops indeed Grandpa LOL

He made a big effort for sure Who ;)

Oh he definitely can't be trusted Valerie ;)

Thankyou Anni, glad you enjoyed it.

Merry Christmas to you too AJ x

Cheers Dumdad

Thankyou Ellie, I'm pleased you liked it. x

She has got some explaining hasn't she Brian? :0

LOL trust you Tony LOL

Why thankyou Daryl I aim to please. :)

You're very kind Pam, I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

You're right there Eric!

Yes she's definitely busted Thom!

I thought it was very sneaky of him spiky but then she'd been sneaky too hadn't she? ;)

Aw thanks Mama Zen :)

Cheers Monkey Man, glad you liked it.

Quilly said...

I'm learning! I anticipated the ending of this one -- which was perfect as usual!

Linda said...

Oh dear, that can't possibly be good! But I must say that once again I totally loved the twist!

secret agent woman said...

Ouch! I hate it when that happens to me. :-)

G-Man said...

Ake...
Twisty and brilliant as usual!
Loved your 55 My Dear.
Thank you for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Ron said...

Bwhahahahahahahahaha!

OMG, how funny!

What a FLAWLESS way to let someone know you know!

Another brilliant 55 Flash, m'dear!

You ROCK!

Have a wonderful weekend!

X

Stranger said...

Ouch! Powerful piece. I wonder what happened next.

Akelamalu said...

Ah you're getting good Quilly ;)

Thanks Linda

That happened to you SAW???? :0

Cheers G-man x

Dramatic way to do it I thought Ron. ;)

Thanks Stranger. I may do a follow up next week. ;)

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Maggie May said...

Be sure your sins will find you out! As the saying goes.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Alice Audrey said...

OMG what a way to expose her!

Seth said...

Oh my!

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Darwin

A very true saying Maggie!

Sneaky wasn't it Alice!

Oh my indeed Seth ;)

A Lady's Life said...

oh oh!! lol

I usually love to do my Christmas shopping during the whole year so when it comes time for it I don't have to do anything but think of Christmas puddin. lol
Lately however, I have been very lax and leave things to the last minute.Sooo not like me at all.

Travis Cody said...

Oops!