Friday, 21 November 2008

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 52 Air, I need Air.....

Air, I need Air

"I need fresh air" he gasped "but I'll have to be careful, they'll be watching for us to come out of the tunnels."

He inched his head through the opening, trying to be inconspicuous but
They spotted him.

Next thing the worm knew he was the rope in a tug of war between two ducks!

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Flowerpot said...

what cute little ducklings!

G-Man said...

Ake, you have this little morbid streak in you sometimes...I LOVE IT!
Thanks for visiting, thanks for playing, and have a Great Week-End!

Linda said...

I guess that worm won't be needing air again, will he?!?

Catch said...

ouch...its painful to even think of....

Akelamalu said...

Aren't they Flowerpot?

Mmmm I do G-man, I'm glad you like it. ;)

No he won't Linda :(

Pulled apart, yes painful Catch :0

ciara said...

well i guess he got a lot of air after they tore him open lol cute 55, funny, too

Mona said...

Lol! a worm! That is such a cute 55ve & I love your worms eye view here! :D

Julia Smith said...

In three lines, you still did a twisty ending.

Dave said...

bye bye little worm i hope you got to breathe some fresh air before you were ripped in two.

That was a cute little story.
Thank You

Cloudia said...

Worms eye view, eh?
You are delighful, Ake!
I thought this piece would become a holocaust escape tear-jerker based on your recent visit to hell. But you instinctively knew that we all need a break just now - and provided it wonderfully,
Aloha my friend ;-)

Sandi McBride said...

TOO FUNNY!!! I loved it...I wanted to tell you to see the commercial go to
Just cut and paste it in and if it doesn't work (it should)check Dog Frames Cat

Daryl said...

Clever woman! You have such a way with words


TopChamp said...


Always a twist... love itx

Jo Beaufoix said...

Yay, another fabulous one. :D

buffalodick said...

Didn't see that one coming! Good stuff when you can suprise me!

Lulda Casadaga said...

Ah, I was ready to grab the tissue, but ended up laughing... That's a Good one!

You know there was a movie made in Poland in the '60's B&W and I think it was called the "Tunnel"...about a few people in WWII looking to escape but get trapped. Check it out sometime...enjoy the weekend! :)

Dr.John said...

You do so well with these fifty five word things. I love the illustrations as well.

Jeff B said...

So much for timing.

Loved the gotcha at the end.

Ron said...

BRAVA Akelamalu!!!!

You ALWAYS get me on these and this one ESPECIALLY!!

VERY clever....VERY clever!


Enjoy your weekend, dear lady! SNOWED here today!!!

Mojo said...

Just when you had me expecting something HG Wellsian, your Moorlock turns out to be a worm?

Clever girl.

Sometimes Saintly Nick said...


cheshire wife said...

That is what happens when two early birds get the worm.

Travis said...

HA! Always with the twist!

Akelamalu said...

Yep, more air than he needed Ciara!

Glad you enjoyed it Mona :)

I tried Julia! :)

I feel sorry for the little worm Dave :(

I'm all written out about the holocaust Cloudia :( Glad you enjoyed it.

Oh thanks Sandi, I'll take a look. :)

Cheers Daryl x

Pleased you liked it Topchamp :)

Thanks Jo x

Ah I got you Buff :0

I'll check out that film Lulda, thanks. Glad you enjoyed the 55.

Aw you're very kind Dr. John :)

Cheers Jeff x

You had snow Ron? I hope we don't get any, you know I don't liek the cold. So pleased you enjoyed this week's 55. x

Thanks Mojo :)

Yeah I know Nick :(

Precisely Cheshire Wife :)

I try Trav, I try. :)

Mimi Lenox said...

I was thinking was Nick said!

storyteller said...

Oh … the poor worm!!! I do enjoy your visuals as much as your ‘kewl’ stories. Sorry to be late in visiting. Life’s been crazy but I’m doing what I can to catch up today.
Hugs and blessings,

Akelamalu said...

LOL ouch indeed Mimi ;)

Hey no worries Storyteller it's always a pleasure to see you, late or not. :)

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