Friday, 7 November 2008

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 50 Proud..


Archie looked at his trophies lining the cabinet.

At 76 he was proud of his achievements.

A startled Archie looked around to see the man standing in his doorway.

"He must be after the trophies" thought Archie.

The blow rendered him unconscious.

"That'll teach you not to try to rob a Karate expert!" said Archie.

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


ciara said...

this totally makes me laugh! i could SO see someone try to protect his trophies. great 55, ake.xo

i'm up.

Flowerpot said...

Great one - I'd love to learn karate!

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

ha ha ha, which trophies?

smiles, bee

Jayme Malvagio said...

Great 55, AK. I like the twist.

buffalodick said...

He can have mine, they just sit in boxes anyway...

James Goodman said...

Another great twist to an equally great 55. Nicely done, AK. :D

snowelf said...

hehe! Must have been quite a blow. ;) Happy Friday Ake!!


Linda said...

I guess Archie had good reason to be proud of all those trophies, didn't he?!?

Pecos Blue said...

That is great idea and neat story.

Cloudia said...

Once again I bow to your dry concise wit!
Aloha from Waikiki-

Dr.John said...

Some day I'll have to try this. Yoo do so well.

Queenie said...

Save time on dusting!!!!!!!

G-Man said...

Excellent job Ake.
That'll teach em eh?
Thanks for playing, and have a Great Week-End....G

Ron said...

You ALWAYS get me on these, Akelamalu!

And this one did too!


Thanks for sharing your wonderful imagination!

It's SOOOOOO enjoyed!

Have a wonderful weekend, dear lady!

Travis said...

Don't be messin' with Archie!

Lu' said...

Opps I forget about this game. Good one. Have a good weekend :)

Akelamalu said...

Archie is very proud of his trophies Ciara he'd do anything to protect them! ;)

Go for it Flowepot! ;)

The gold ones of course Bee! ;)

Welcome Jayme, I'm pleased you enjoyed the read. :)

You don't display your trophies Buff? What did you win them for?

Cheers James :)

Akelamalu said...

It was Snowelf, it was!

Yep, he'd really earned them Linda! :)

Hi nice to meet you pecos blue, thanks for dropping by and I'm happy you liked the story.

Ah, you're too kind Cloudia x

You would do well in it too Dr. John, I'm sure. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Well it would if the thief had gotten away with it Queenie!

Yep that'll teach him G-man!

I love it when you say I got you again Ron, I'm always wary that my readers will start guessing the twist! :)

Definitely don't want to be messin' with Archie Trav!

You'll have to put it in your diary Lu and join in next week. xx

Donnetta Lee said...

Thou shalt not steal. And now we know why. Good one, "A." D

Strumpet said...

Hula Babe,

Sorry it took me a bit to get to your 55!

It SO rocks, so I'm glad I finally made it over.

I dig a man with hands that are lethal weapons.

Go Archie!

Akelamalu said...

LOL Donnetta that man should be observing the commandments shouldn't he?

Thanks for dropping by Strumpet, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

storyteller said...

I love the way you create these stories with a surprise at the end ;--)
Hugs and blessings,

Akelamalu said...

Thankyou Storyteller x

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