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Thursday, 25 August 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #174 Raid..



Cindy woke with a start.

Crash, thundering footsteps up the stairs.

The bedroom door flew open, armed police surrounded her.

"What the.....?

"Where is he, where's Jack?" they roared.

"Jack who?" she screamed.

"Jack Smart, you know who, come on where is he?" they demanded.

"Next door I imagine, in his house!"

Oops, wrong house!



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22 comments:

Ron said...

"Oops, wrong house!"

HA!

But, now you've got me curious as to WHY the police wanted Jack? I sure hope he was 'Smart' enough to escape before the police arrived!

GREAT one, m'dear! As usual!

Have an awesome weekend!

X

Empress Bee (of the high sea) said...

yes, why did they want him? ha ha ha

smiles, bee
xoxoxoxooxox

secret agent woman said...

You know, I bet this happens.

cheshire wife said...

The police do make mistakes. They once turned up here, when we were still in bed, at 7am on a Saturday morning and they were at totally the wrong address. Thankfully they knocked on the door. They did not break it down.

Beach Bum said...
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Beach Bum said...

Yeah, I have heard a few stories of police busting down the doors of the wrong house several times.

Valerie said...

Mistakes can happen. I'd hate for them to happen at my house.

Brian Miller said...

haha wrong house...my what a disaster that would be...lost the element of surprise there....

G-Man said...

Ake...
Too bad his last name wasn't Schitz, then the police wouldn't know Jack Schitz!!
Loved your 55
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Mona said...

Poor Cindy! She woke up to a nightmare!

Linda said...

Better that they were looking for Jack and not for Cindy! Now let's just hope Jack didn't catch on to all of the commotion next door and hot foot it out before the police could correct their mistake!

Akelamalu said...

No idea what Jack had been up to Ron, or whether they caught him. ;)

Could have been for anything Bee, you decide. ;)

I'm sure it does SAW!

Crikey that must have been quite scary Cheshire Wife! Glad they didn't break down your door.

Yep I'm sure it happens Beach.

Me too Valerie - I'd be suing for sure!

Indeed they did Brian LOL

Jack Schitz LOL Trust you G!

Yes she did Mona,

Good for Cindy yes Linda and possibly good for Jack next door with all the noise they made! LOL

Nara Malone said...

I bet Jack was out his window and away when the first cop car pulled up.

Mama Zen said...

That is too funny!

Cad said...

Can't be right all the time...

hope said...

I wonder how often that really happens?!

Have a great weekend!

Morning said...

unbeatable humor.

wow.

Donnetta said...

Jack doesn't live HERE anymore.

Have a terrific weekend, "A." D

tony said...

My Next door Neighbours Think They Are Smart Too!!!! :)

Daryl said...

Reminds me of that bad joke .. click here

Cloudia said...

you never disappoint my clever friend!







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Akelamalu said...

I bet he was too Nara!

Glad you liked it Mama Zen

No, I guess they can't they can't Cad LOL

A lot probably Hope ;)

Why thankyou Morning :)

Thanks Donnetta, you too.

LOL Tony

Ah, I see what you mean Daryl ;)

Aw thanks Cloudia x