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Friday, 5 August 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 171 Burglary..



Finding the open window they took advantage.


The men climbed through in search of valuables.


Peering through the bedroom doorway they saw the occupier.


He lay, eyes staring vacantly, unblinking, unmoving.


"Christ, he's dead!" said one.


"Oh well, he won't miss this lot now will he?" said his mate, as he searched the bedroom cupboards.



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27 comments:

MorningAJ said...

And sadly that's probably what would happen. Excellent 55!

Beach Bum said...

Great piece of writing.

Valerie said...

Little did they know he was feigning death in order to catch them in the act....

Akelamalu said...

That's the point I was trying to make AJ, glad you got it. x

Thanks Beach :)

That would be a good scenario Valerie :)

Brian Miller said...

i think that might creep me out enough to not take anything...

tony said...

Sadly ,True To Life.....

A Daft Scots Lass said...

Now this is pretty inspiring.

Empress Bee (of the high sea) said...

i knew it, he wasn't dead! good way not to get hurt though!

smiles, bee
xoxoxoxoxo

anthonynorth said...

I can really believe it. Excellent point.

Akelamalu said...

Me too but they're hardened burglars Brian!

I think it is Tony :(


Thanks Scots Lass

He could have been a good actor Bee

Me too Anthony.

Ron said...

"Oh well, he won't miss this lot now will he?" said his mate, as he searched the bedroom cupboards."

Bwhahahahahahahahaha!

You're endings ALWAYS get me!

Another brilliant and clever Flash 55, m'dear!

Have a wonderful weekend.....X

Banker Chick said...

I thought a little dark, just glad to find out he was playing possum.

cheshire wife said...

Obviously not worried about being done for murder as well burglary.

G-Man said...

For What?
Searching For What?
AKE!!!!!!!!!
Another Gem from the Mind of the Mistress...Hehehehehe
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
(2 days in a row)

Cloudia said...

Hmmmmmmm



Aloha from Waikiki;


Comfort Spiral
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Akelamalu said...

Thanks Ron

It is a dark one BankerChick and I'm not sure he's pretending.

They're not worried about anything except getting something to sell Cheshire Wife :(

Searching for anything they can sell, probably to buy drugs G. I notice you came back twice hon, thanks. x

Indeed Cloudia x

hope said...

Tis a cold world we live in at times. In my head, I saw the person in the room sit up and whisper, "Boo!" ;)

Gledwood said...

Did you see my Malaysian prison video showing a grown man getting spanked on the bare arse 20 times with a broom handle sized cane? That's what I think they ought to do to housebreakers it's the most disgusting crime and I caused great offence in a crackhouse once by glowering at someone who came in bosting about a "drum" as the scum who do it call it. I really hate burglars. BTW I had to take the video down it was so gross. Blood everywhere and the criminal trying not to scream. I thought seeing a grown man get a punishment associated with school would be funny but it really was not funny. Which is why I think they should do it to housebreakers ha ha ha.

Jannie Funster said...

Okay -- this totally sounds like a scene our a movie like "Waking Ned Devine!!!!"

Ah, so funny my dear Alekamalu, you are.

here is my 55.

xoxo

Jannie Funster said...

Whoops, typo -- I meant "out" of a movie...

Oh crap and a BIG typo on your name -- Akelamalu.

slinks quietly off your blog rather embarassed.....

xoxo

gautami tripathy said...

Much to think about...


other shoe

Akelamalu said...

Yes I remember seeing that video on your blog Gleds. I think the punishment for this sort of crime should be more severe than it is but I'm not sure I would recommend that.

Hey don't worry about the typos Jannie, glad you liked my 55.

Indeed Gautami

cathy said...

THat's a sad state for us to be in, I wish it wasn't so believable.

secret agent woman said...

At least he won't be upset about being robbed.

snowelf said...

I hope he comes back and haunts them. ;)

--snow

Misty Dawn said...

I love reading these!

Travis Cody said...

Ghoulish, but clever!