"It's a long way up, he said, but we need water so we have no choice."
"I'll come with you" she said.
They had almost reached the top when he tripped, managing to drag her down and banging his head quite badly.
"Where's the vinegar and brown paper Jill?" said Jack, when they got home.
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26 comments:
Oh I like that! You know I did something similar with Cinderella recently? I didn't do it quite so succinctly though!
Well done.
(I hope the link works this time - excuse the previous deletion.)
WOOT!!! I love this. Very well done :) You are so good at this.
Yes! Brilliant, and for once I got it before the last line. I must try having more early nights!!
An excellent retelling. Enjoyed it.
Great story!
Always wondered about the true nature of that relationship.
ha. nice rewrite...darn busted crowns...
Another crowning glory from you!
Your ability to concentrate must be amazing! Don't know that I could consistantly come up with such nuggets of gold as these yet you come thru everytime!
hugs
Sandi
ps
longing to be there for the wedding!!!
So this was a true story?
Ha! I knew it!
Loved your 55 My Friend.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Easter!!! Galen...;-)
good one!
smiles, bee
xoxoxooxox
Applause...applause....applause!
You're cleverness astounds me!
Brava! I give you 10 big stars for this!
Have a lovely weekend, m'dear!
X
Uh-huh. Trip the woman up and then blame her for their lack of goods. Maybe she doesn't know Jack. ;)
Fun one!
Very well done! As always of course!
Have a lovely Easter weekend enjoying your beautiful garden!
Vinegar and brown paper?
isn't vinegar and brown paper used for cleaning a window? ... or is that newspaper?
Great take on Jack and Jill!
The link doesn't work AJ but I can search through your posts to find it so no worries.
Glad you enjoyed it Thom and thanks. x
You must be getting used to my writing Valerie ;)
Thankyou Anthony :)
Cheers Beach Bum, I think they were just good friends. ;)
Glad you liked it Brian
Haha like the pun and the praise Dumdad ;)
Aw thanks Sandi. I'll be watching the wedding on the TV,don't fancy the crowds in London.
Maybe based on a true story G, you never know. ;)
Thanks Bee x
So pleased you enjoyed it Ron xx
Typical man eh Hope? ;)
Hope you have a lovely weekend too Linda and thanks. x
Yeah, as in the nursery rhyme SAW?
That's newspaper Gleds LOL
Ah you got it Trav :)
This was one occasion when I GUESSED the ending. Yhay!
Happy Easter.
maggie X
Nuts in May
I knew at the first line it would be Jack and Jill
with a twist of course
well done
akelamalu: ahahahaha...hehehe. I do stuff like that without banging my head. :) I love how you tell a story.
Loved the story honey. hehehe.
Hope your Easter is starting wonderfully. HAPPY EASTER. :)
LOL! A fresh spin - you totally had me until the vinegar and brown paper part.
Happy Easter, Akelamalu!
Pearlie Mae...
Happy Easter!!!
Very interesting 55. I am glad I finally had the time to come over and see yours. Cheers.
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I saw this one coming as soon as he tripped. That Jack is so clumsy!
I am never ever ever able to guess what you're going to say. And THAT is what makes it brilliant.
Loved this one.
You are the Queen of 55.
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