Monday, 10 January 2011

Microfiction Monday #36

Susan at Stony River hosts this fun theme each Monday, so do pop over and read the others who have signed Mr. Linky. The rules are thus:

Every Monday Susan will post a picture for the subject of your story. Microfiction means the shortest of short stories. Think Aesop's fables, comic strips, or even jokes: complete stories that can be told in under a minute. For this game, the limit is a tweetable 140 characters or fewer, including punctuation.

Here's today's picture and my contribution.


Iron man you have to let me go.

They’re coming for you, you won’t stand a chance!

Go now, I’ll find you when it’s safe.

Hey did I tell you I can see right up your nose from here?

140 characters including punctuation and spaces


Elaine said...

That made me smile!

Have a lovely Monday. x

Grandpa said...

Hmmmm...I must say I expected it to be a bit more romantic than that.

Btw, romance is in the air over at The Farm

mrsnesbitt said...

The Iron Man eh? What a poser! lol! Great start to the week Pearl. xx

anthonynorth said...

Now that's a line to break the ice :-)
Enjoyed that.

Akelamalu said...

Happy to make you smile Laney. Hope you have a happy Monday too. x

Sorry if the lack of romance disappointed Grandpa

Definitely a poser Denise ;)

So glad you enjoyed it Anthony

Valerie said...

Laughing socks off here... brilliant.

BECKY said...

Hey, I really liked that! I tend to go the humorous route, too!

Daryl said...

That is a very funny photo and a cleverly worded piece of Microfiction

Jinksy said...

Dentists always give me the same thoughts!

Mama Zen said...

Iron Man! Why didn't I think of that?

CrystalChick said...

Haha, that's so clever. Good job with the Microfictions!

hope said...

I love the twist of this one!

Peggy said...

Loved the end and the way it made me smile. I tend to go on the funny side too!
Have a nice week Akela!

SparkleFarkle said...

I love it when the dramatica takes a turn, "tinned" or otherwise. LOL!

Ron said...

"Hey did I tell you I can see right up your nose from here?"

HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA! Brilliant finale line!

Another brava Microfiction, m'dear!

Have a marvi Monday!


Akelamalu said...

I'm so pleased you enjoyed it Valerie :)

Humour's good Becky :)

Thankyou Daryl x

I know what you mean Jinksy LOL

LOL Iron Man was the first thing that came to mind when I saw the pic Mama Zen

Cheers Crystalchick x

Thanks Hope :)

Glad you enjoyed it Peggy :)

Me too SparkleFarkle :)

Akelamalu said...

Ron you snuck in whilst I was commenting! Glad you enjoyed it honey. x

5thsister said...

LOL...last line was a perfect ending!

gaelikaa said...

The iron man will be able for all that's coming I think. But will she?

jabblog said...

It's sometimes good to change the subject when things get too emotional.

Finding Pam said...

Great FF again. I loved the last line! Wonderful.

Sylvia K said...

Oh, yes! Love that last line! How fun! We can all use a good exit line! Have a great week!


Deb said...

Perfect ending ~ thanks for the giggles!

Akelamalu said...

Why thankyou 5th sister :)

Who knows Gaelikaa? I popped over to read you MM but your comments are switched off. I liked it.

I agree Jabblog ;)

Thanks Pam, glad you enjoyed it.

If only we could think of an exit line when we need it though Sylvia! LOL

Happy to make you smile Deb x

Anonymous said...

very funny!

secret agent woman said...

The dentist's curse.

Trellissimo said...

And not a bogey in sight!

Quilly said...

That "up you nose" thing cracked me up. Once again, I didn't see the last line coming.

Dianne said...

that last line really made me laugh !!

snowelf said...

I was laughing so hard at the first line--great stuff!!! Love it!!!


Akelamalu said...

Glad you think so Ruthlivingstone :)

I'm sure it is SAW ;)

Hopefully not Trellissimo LOL

I'm pleased the twist got you and it made you laugh Quilly :)

I'm so glad it did Dianne x

Thanks Snow, I'm pleased you enjoyed it. x

Anonymous said...

Love this Microfiction. I like the ending, funny.
I did one this week too.
Thanks for the nice comment about my owl.

kaykuala said...

Does it mean he didn't trust her one bit? Is that it?

Pooch said...

Love your final line, and....ewww!