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Friday, 28 January 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #149 Nuisance...



He flitted about the room, pausing every now and then to ingest some food.


He knew it irritated people, his constant to-ing and fro-ing but that was how he was.


Eventually, he knew, they would get pissed off with him and he would have to go.


Dispatched, swatted with a rolled up newspaper - dratted fly!



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27 comments:

Valerie said...

OMG that was great and totally unexpected.

Grandpa said...

And I thought 'he' was the husband! You got me there Akelamalu...LOL

Shrinky said...

Aww, poor little fly (giggle), I've never tried to see it from his prespective before! Another beaut, m'dear, well done for raising a smile.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

(Another butterFLY has landed! LOL!)

Nice 55, with a twist!

Daryl said...

Well done .. made me giggle

Brian Miller said...

buzzzzzzzzzz twack! smiles. cute 55..

anthonynorth said...

So annoying aren't they. Nice one.

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

oh that one got me! ha ha ha good one!

smiles, bee
xoxoxoxoxoxo

Ron said...

OMG! OMG! OMG! that ending TOTAL surprised me!!!!

You are soooooooooooo clever!

Brava, m'dear! Another outstanding Flash 55! You ROCK!

Have a wonderful weekend....X

Beach Bum said...

Excellent story! But unlike some of you other characters I felt no sympathy for the fly.

Belinda Munoz said...

He had to have known it was coming.

cheshire wife said...

The condemned man ate a healthy breakfast or whatever meal it was.

hope said...

I love this one! Never has a fly had such character. ;)

G-Man said...

Swatted and dispatched flies are the best!
Loved your 55 Ake!
Thanks for playing, thanks for flittering about, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Valerie :)

Haha I'm glad the twist got you Grandpa ;)

Well flies must have feelings too eh Shrinky? ;)

Nice pun Eric ;)

I'm happy if you're happy Daryl x

Precisely Brian LOL

They are indeed Anthony

LOL got you too eh Bee?

Ah the surprise worked Ron. Glad you enjoyed it hon. x

I'm with you on this BeachBum, dirty horrible things flies!

I bet he did Belinda ;)

I dread to think what he'd landed on Cheshire Wife! :0

So pleased you enjoyed it Hope :)

Yes they are G-man!

Odat said...

Aha!!! Didn't expect that...very good!

Peace

Cloudia said...

You still got it!


Aloha from Honolulu
Comfort Spiral

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Travis Cody said...

Indeed. There's only so much tolerance for a fly before it gets swatted.

Quilly said...

Ha! Too funny. At first I thought you were writing about a begging dog -- or my sister who loves to snatch food off other people's plates!

Mama Zen said...

Got him!

Raven said...

Yes...dratted flies. Loved it.

Always Write said...

Love the way you wrote about this particular pesky fly

very nice

secret agent woman said...

In a weird way, that actually made me feel sorry for flies!

Akelamalu said...

Glad you enjoyed it Odat

Cheers Cloudia x

You're so right Trav!

Ah the punchline got you eh Quilly? :)

Swat! Mama Zen LOL

Glad you liked it Raven

Thanks Always Write, pleased you enjoyed it.

No way SAW, you're kidding me. LOL

Linda said...

Ah, I managed to guess that one this time! Very well done!

Sex, Drugs and Bacon Sandwiches said...

I always find that the second that newspaper comes out the fly disappears - I reckon they learn to run away from certain items when they are in fly school :)

Akelamalu said...

Well done Linda

I think you're right S,D&BS LOL