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Friday, 7 January 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #147 Bedlam......


He dreaded this moment.

He knew what would happen.

The surge, as they found the entrance unblocked.

It was dangerous.

He wished there was another way to do it,

but there wasn't.

He had to unlock the doors

and watch as the hoard rushed in.

It was always Bedlam on first day of the sales.


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28 comments:

Valerie said...

Oooo I'm getting better at guessing... it was the word surge that provided the clue. Very good 55.

MorningAJ said...

Oh that's good. And it's why I never go shopping in January!

anthonynorth said...

Ahhh! Sales. Scary times :-)

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

oh that's the truth!

smiles, bee
xoxoxoxoxoxo

tony said...

It's A Jungle Out There!

clean and crazy said...

yeah and you should see black friday in the states

Crystal Jigsaw said...

Brilliant! A reason why I avoid the sales - bedlum isn't my idea of a good time!!

CJ xx

Ron said...

Oh, what a grrrreat Flash 55, Akelamalu!

You had me wondering all the way what the ending was going to be!!!!

BRILLIANT!

And one that I (being in retail) can so identify with. There's nothing as scary as the first day of a big sale!!!

Have a great weekend, m'dear!

X

gautami tripathy said...

Sales! I avoid those!

Here is mine:
curtain of pebbled path

Akelamalu said...

Aha I think you've been there Valerie! ;)

Me neither AJ!

Yes they are Anthony :0

Indeedy Bee!

It certainly is Tony!

I can imagine Clean&Crazy :)

Mine neither CrystalJigsaw!

I really thought you might guess this one Ron being in the business. :)

Me too guatami!

Monkey Man said...

I love the dark and sinister start that explodes into day to day reality. Excellent 55.

My 55 is HERE .

moondustwriter said...

Very clever - day after a holiday is Bedlam

great 55

smiles

cheshire wife said...

We did it once and never again!

joanny said...

So True -- the day the morning sales start, always amazed me -- to watch the frenzy from a safe distance. When I was a young one, I remember it was the crushing pushing moment when the doors were being opened that a few poor souls lost their lives being pushed through the plate glass doors, Then they went to tempered glass,

nice 55er,,,

cheers,
joanny

Quilly said...

Yeah, and this behavior is why I think mankind is devolving rather than evolving.

Spiky Zora Jones said...

akelamalu: I saw some of those sales surges. hehehe.

you had it right all the way. hehehe.

have a fabulous weekend sweetie. xxx

g-man said...

Fools rush in, where Angels fear to tread.
Loved your post-holiday post!
I hope that you escaped unscathed!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Julia Smith said...

LOL! My mom got caught in one of those when she was a department manager at a store in the 80's. She was actually scared for a few moments. She stood in front of a merchandise display at the top of an escalator, and yelled at the mob to "Go around! Go around!"

Akelamalu said...

Why thankyou Monkey Man that's exactly the effect I was aiming for. :)

It definitely is Moondustwriter

I've never done it, too dangerous for me CheshireWife

At least it's not 'as' dangerous now with the tempered glass Joanny

You're right Quilly

Thanks Spiky x

I don't go to the sales on the first day G-man, I value my life too much. ;)

I can imagine your Mom's fear being caught up in that mayhem Julia :0

Linda said...

Yep, and the reason I never going shopping if it can be at all avoided!

secret agent woman said...

I do not envy those in retail.

secret agent woman said...

I do not envy those in retail.

Travis Cody said...

What some will endure for a bargain.

Akelamalu said...

I quite enjoy shopping Linda but I certainly wouldn't go to the first day of the sales! LOL

Me neither SAW

I know, they're crazy Trav!

Maggie May said...

No way would I race to the sales like that!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Dianne said...

you really did capture the mood of a typical sale

Dumdad said...

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sylviamorice said...

Haha--your last line made me laugh. Thanks for the chuckle. I can just imagine someone saying that!
Have a great week. Cheers!