Friday, 22 October 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 138 Gotcha...

He sat watching, waiting.

He'd made a mental note of how long they'd been there.

There were four of them, he'd get them before they knew what had happened.

Checking his watch, he moved quickly.

He only had a couple of minutes to

slap parking tickets on the cars that had run out of time.

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Anonymous said...

Good one. I think they slap ticket on them before they expire.

anthonynorth said...

Ah, horror fiction. Scary ;-)

Grandpa said...

Clever one, this. I was expecting a more gruesome got me there!

Valerie said...

Another surprise ending, you're so good at this. I was on tenterhooks wondering what was going to happen ... smiles.

MorningAJ said...

I think I've encountered him!

Brian Miller said...

i think he left me a few notes before...under my windshield wiper...

Belinda Munoz said...

They really do issue those tickets quickly, don't they? Great 55!

Ron said...

I don't know how you do it, but your endings ALWAYS get me!!!

"slap parking tickets on the cars that had run out of time."


And I'll be thinking of this post the next time I see a meter maid giving a ticket - HA!

Have a great weekend, m' dear!


Daryl said...

So cleverly done .. I was suspecting he was an exterminator ...

Eric Alder said...

As far as revenue-generating schemes go (and that's EXACTLY what this is, make no mistake), parking tickets are even more egregious than speeding tickets.

At least with speeding tickets there's a modicum of moral authority because somebody could get in a wreck. Who's life is endangered if somebody has their car parked five minutes longer?

Funny 55, Akelamalu!

Casdok said...


Akelamalu said...

I thought they had to wait until they expired Connie?

Hehe, yes horror fiction Anthony LOL

Ah the twist worked Grandpa :)

Thanks Valerie I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I've never had a parking ticket AJ, thankfully. ;)

Ah you've been caught then Brian? :(

They do indeed Belinda!

Haha got you again eh Ron? Thanks hon. x

Got you too eh Daryl?

I so agree with you Eric!

Cheers Casdok :)

G-Man said...

I knew the bastards layed in wait for you!
Loved this Ake...
Excellent 55 My Dear.
You Rock The Empire!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...g

Quilly said...

I swear they write the tickets before the meter expires and slap them on at the exact same time the red flag snaps up.

Maggie May said...

That is typical, isn't it. getting ready to pounce.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Linda said...

I can SO see a parking officer doing this sort of thing! I swear they get some evil pleasure out of writing tickets!

Mama Zen said...

No doubt, one of those cars is mine!

Anonymous said...

LOL...Oh I've met that dude before as well. Only once mind you and once was enough. Very well done. Have a great Friday :)

Cheshire Wife said...

They got me once. Never again!

hope said...

I got threatened with a ticket once for putting coins in an expired meter...because it wasn't mine. :)

Seems being nice can cost you, unless you can explain kindness to strangers. Happy weekend!

snowelf said...

You never, never, never disappoint!! :)

I also just got done soaking in all of your pics from your trip... I love that gorgeous. Glad you had such a great time!!

Also I wish you well on being able to extend your membership!! Hopefully all goes well.


Jannie Funster said...

that basta@d. They must be on commission somehow, or just plain mean!

awesome 55.


Spiky Zora Jones said...

akelamalu: Ah hahaha. I once ran out of a restaurant in Glendale to put money in the parking meter so I wouldn;t geta ticket and a lady was there waiting for it to click to a Red...violation.

whew...I wanted to stick my tongue out at her. but I didn't. I'm an adult...sort of. :)

good 55 babe. xxx

joanny said...

so they do that sort of thing in the UK too, they are the most hated breed of workers around, sometimes I pop money in some ones meter just because....

nice 55er,


Cloudia said...

Hunting is hunting :)

Aloha from Hawaii, Dear Ake

Comfort Spiral


Akelamalu said...

Laying in wait is their game G-man

I think you're right Quilly!

Yes typical Maggie!

I agree Linda some of them are sadistic. :(

Oh you've been caught eh MamaZen?

Once is more than enough Thom and Cheshire Wife!

That's terrible Hope, being threatened with a ticket for helping someone! :0

Thanks Snowelf and I'm pleased you enjoyed all the photos.

Sometimes I wonder if they ARE on commission Jannie.

Oh you should have stuck your tongue out at her Spiky. I'm glad you got there before she got you! ;)

Yep, they do it here too Joanny. That's so good of you helping other people defy the traffic wardens. :)

But it's so mean Cloudia!

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

those parking people are out in force in my town, one minute late and seventy bucks! the city has no money so the cops are all trying to bring it in!

smiles, bee

KB said...

I do believe the same man is stalking me.

secret agent woman said...

I believe I've encountered that very man!

A Daft Scots Lass said...

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Akelamalu said...

That's the annoying part Bee, it's just a money making exercise isn't it? :(

You're probably right KB

I think they're clones SAW!

OKey Dokey Scots Lass :)