Monday, 11 October 2010

Microfiction Monday #23....

Susan at Stony River hosts this fun theme each Monday, so do pop over and read the others who have signed Mr. Linky. The rules are thus:

Every Monday Susan will post a picture for the subject of your story. Microfiction means the shortest of short stories. Think Aesop's fables, comic strips, or even jokes: complete stories that can be told in under a minute. For this game, the limit is a tweetable 140 characters or fewer, including punctuation and spaces.

Here's today's picture and my contribution.

As Mavis waited for the arriving train to stop,

she suddenly had the horrible feeling

that she’d left her train ticket at home - buggeration!


Gary said...

I love this idea and the microfiction pixie as well.

Poor Mavis.

Anonymous said...

LOL. Too funny. Alas poor Mavis. Wonder how fast she can run? LOL

Anonymous said...

Well, you may not have a novel in there but there is a short story for sure. Well done,

gaelikaa xxx

MorningAJ said...

Hope it won't be too long before the next one then! Poor girl. :)

Diane said...

Bummer! :O)

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Gary :)

Not fast enough Thom ;)

Cheers Gaelikaa

Hopefully not AJ ;)

Quite Diane :)

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

Poor Mavis, hopefully the Railway will let her rebook and refund the old tickets.

Casdok said...

So had she or hadnt she??????!

Peggy said...


My brothers old girlfriend's name was Mavis. I liked her and I liked your story!

anthonynorth said...

Ah, bits of paper are always the main stumbling block ;-)
I like it!

Sylvia K said...

I can so relate to Mavis -- unfortunately! Great one for the day! Enjoy your week!


Valerie said...

How compassionate is the station master, I wonder... grins.

Ron said...

Oh man...don't ya just hate when that happens, Mavis???


FAB Micro Monday, m'dear!

Always enjoyed!

Have a super day!


Pat said...

...And that's why I love ticketless travel!

I experienced this in 1969 when trying to board a plane to fly home to the US from Ireland! The pilot took pity on me, a distraught 21-year-old.

Maggie May said...

All that packing for nothing! She seems to have brought a lot.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

nitebyrd said...

OMG! Haven't we all done that at one time or another? The worst feeling ever!

Prayer Girl said...

"Buggeration!" Now that's a new one on me and I love it. :)



hope said...

Yours and mine are both a bit forgetful today. :)

Spiky Zora Jones said...

akelamalu: I so know the feeling...a sick feeling that makes a person want to shrink to nothing. Luckily my girl had put them in her purse...for safe keeping.

I don't know if I wanted to slap her or kiss her. I chose the latter. cause she just might slap me back....hehehe

loved it babe. xxx

Mama Zen said...

"Buggeration!" I love it! I'm going to say it at first opportunity.

KB said...

Love it. Couldn't think of anything for MM this week but I enjoyed yours.

Finding Pam said...

I know that feeling all too well.

Now before I use it what does buggeration mean?

Quilly said...

Oh, oh -- if Mavis doesn't hurry, she's going to give a whole new meaning to "running to catch a train".

Akelamalu said...

So do I Bill :)

I don't know Casdok ;)

I'm glad you liked Mavis Peggy :)

I so agree with you Anthony!

Me too Sylvia ;)

Not very, I would imagine Valerie :(

Yes it's so annoying Ron!

Oh Pat how wonderful that the pilot bent the rules for you. :)

I think she's going away for a good while Maggie.

It is a terrible feeling for sure Nitebyrd.

Glad you like the word Prayer Girl :)

We were on the same wavelength Hope :)

Oh I've had that sinking feeling too Spiky!

Feel free Mama Zen :)

Glad you enjoyed it KB :)

Well I use Buggeration instead of Oh Bugger Pam, hope that helps you to use it. ;)

I think it's too late for Mavis to think about running Quilly ;)

Ellie said...

LOL. I can't stop laughing. She doesn't look like someone who would use the word buggeration, but that is what makes the story so good! Brilliant.

Sioux Roslawski said...

Everyone has had an experience like that. Great idea.

Cloudia said...

you make me smile, Sis :)

Warm Aloha from Waikiki

Comfort Spiral


Akelamalu said...

I don't think she uses that word very much usually Ellie, only when she's frustrated. ;)

Yes you're right Sioux.

I'm happy to make you smile Cloudia x