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Monday, 26 July 2010

Microfiction Monday #13


Susan at Stony River hosts this fun theme each Monday, so do pop over and read the others who have signed Mr. Linky. The rules are thus:



Every Monday Susan will post a picture for the subject of your story. Microfiction means the shortest of short stories. Think Aesop's fables, comic strips, or even jokes: complete stories that can be told in under a minute. For this game, the limit is a tweetable 140 characters or fewer, including punctuation and spaces.


Here's today's picture and my contribution.






Daniel was worried about his girlfriend.



Since the bang on the head she was seeing stars



but even worse, kept going on about wanting a baby!

35 comments:

mrsnesbitt said...

Love it! My Monday project is based on a close up photo!

MorningAJ said...

Oh poor Daniel. Let's hope she gets over the concussion before she has FIVE babies!

SouthLakesMom said...

Oh my! I hope she and Daniel have a serious talk about this before . . .

Julia Smith said...

But they're so cute...

Eternally Distracted said...

Only you could've done that with that picture - You are too funny!!

Valerie said...

Well I've heard of five star status ...

Good one, once again.

BECKY said...

Hey, I loved this one!! Very good!!

anthonynorth said...

Oh dear. Broodiness. No good at all :-)
Enjoyed that.

Sylvia K said...

Oh, I love it! Really funny take for the day! Watch what you wish for! Have a great week!

Sylvia

Peggy said...

Alela;

O.M._goodness!
Daniel better take precautions if he's not ready!
Good take this week my friend.

RNSANE said...

I just love what we are coming up with - yours is terrific.

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Mrs N

I think that's what Daniel is hoping too Morning AJ ;)

I'm sure they will South Lakes Mom!

I know Julia ;)

Aw thanks Eternally Distracted, so pleased you enjoyed it.


Cheers Valerie :)


Thankyou Becky :)


That's exactly what Daniel was thinking Anthony!


Glad you liked it Sylvia :)


Yes he'd better Peggy! ;)

I love the different takes on the picture too RNSane. Glad you enjoyed mine. :)

gaelikaa said...

I admire how you manage this - I thought flash fiction was hard, but this is something else altogether...

Ron said...

applause...applause...applause!

Loved that final line!

You've done it again, m'dear!

Sheer brilliance!

Thank you for sharing.

Happy Monday...X

swputh said...

In 3 lines u managed to say a lot...
Brilliance...

Ellie said...

So funny! Loved it!

Have a great week x

Mama Badger said...

He'd better bonk her on the head again to see if it clears up!

John's comments said...

Hit his own head and he may see babies and want stars! I've gone for science for today's 140

sylviamorice said...

LOL....maybe she'll stop if she bangs her head again! Great job this week--made me laugh.

Pat said...

It's time for Daniel to have a serious talk with his girlfriend!

Great take on this week's picture.

hope said...

This one made me smile! Thank you.

Quilly said...

Yeah, the word "baby" makes a lot of guys worry1

Jingle said...

creative one!

Maggie May said...

Surprising what a bang on the head will do! Ouch!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Akelamalu said...

gaelikaa I'm glad you enjoyed it, it's easier than you think honestly. :)

Aw thanks Ron you're a doll. x

Why thankyou so much swputh, how kind you are. :)

I'm so pleased you liked it Ellie

He's probably already thought of that solution Mama Badger LOL

I wonder if he's thought of that solution John? :0

Daniel's probably hoping just that sylviamorice!

I think he will be doing just that Pat! ;)

I'm happy to make you smile Hope x

I wonder why Quilly? ;)

Cheers Jingle :)

A bang on the head can cause all sorts of problems Maggie and not just for the recipient! ;)

g-man said...

Great Job Ake...

Linda said...

And hear I thought that you were going to say that she had been seeing stars while sitting outside naked!

secret agent woman said...

I named the last baby I miscarried "Meteor" because it's life was as fleeting as a shooting star - this illustration reminds me of that.

Susan at Stony River said...

Well, if he didn't want those little stars, he shouldn't have hit her so hard!

I hope it clears up for them both soon LOL

Mama Zen said...

What a hilarious take on the picture!

Akelamalu said...

Cheers G-man x

Well that could have happened Linda ;)

I'm so sorry for your loss SAW. What a lovely way to remember your baby - as a shooting star. x

I don't think he hit her Susan but he's certainly regretting her getting a bang on the head! LOL

Thanks Mama Zen :)

Mimi Lenox said...

Oh the lanes your mind travels, Akelamalu...

Travis Cody said...

Either you want them or you don't...there's no middle ground on this one.

Gledwood said...

Wah wah waaah!!

Akelamalu said...

I know Mimi, worrying isn't it? ;)

That's true Trav!

Wa Gleds!