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Friday, 25 June 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #124 Superstitious....



Charlie was very superstitious.


No new shoes on the table or broken mirrors for him.


The thought of putting an umbrella up in the house


or not greeting a magpie horrified him.


Hence his dismay when a black cat ran across his path


as he made his getaway from the bank job he'd just pulled.


Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.

26 comments:

A Daft Scots Lass said...

great twist

mrsnesbitt said...

As ever - a twist in the tail! Hmmmm now I must have a think!

A Lady's Life said...

Oh Oh I don't like where this is headed. lol

mrsnesbitt said...

I have succumbed! (sp????)

Gledwood said...

:-)
oooer!

jinksy said...

I thought black cats were lucky?

Valerie said...

Another brilliant gem. Love the twist at the end.

Thom said...

Love your new theme my friend. It's real nice. And your story is just wonderful. :) Makes me think of the Stevie Wonder song Superstition :) So clever. :)

Dumdad said...

Good one!

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

uh oh, he's toast! ha ha ha

smiles, bee
xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Finding Pam said...

I think it is good luck to own a black cat since we have one. Ha!

I enjoyed the twist at the end and in only 55 words. You are talented.

buffalodick said...

Won't be any black cats in prison!

Ron said...

BRAVA, Akelamalu!

You are soooooooooooo fabulous with these!

That ending was BRILLIANT!

Applause, applause, applause!

Have a great weekend, m'dear!

X

Sally said...

That's funny!

I've written again btw. That's two in two months....maybe eventually I'll get back there....

anthonynorth said...

Nice one. He could do with a little bad luck, I think.

g-man said...

Keep driving Charlie....
Only Petrol stops.!!
Loved it Pearlie...You Rock!
Excellent 55 My Talented Friend.
Thanks for your love and support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Jingle said...

cute and fun!

Linda said...

Oh dear, I wonder what sort of bad luck befell the guy? Excellent twist as always!

Mama Zen said...

Great twist at the end!

Eternally Distracted said...

You do it every time!!! I love your 55's the best ;)

secret agent woman said...

Greeting a magpie? That's one I've never heard of. I wonder if I should start saying hello to the blackbirds.

MorningAJ said...

Oh that's clever! What a great idea. Of course - if you had another 55 words you could discuss that in some parts of the UK the luck depends on which way the cat was going! (left to right is good - right to left is bad....)

Keep up the good work

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Scots Lass

Cheers Mrs N and I'm so glad you've joined in. :)

Neither did Charlie Lady's Life ;)

Ooooer indeed Gleds ;)

Not in Charlie's case Jinksy LOL

Why thankyou Valerie :)

So glad you like the new template and the 55 Thom x

Cheers Dumdad :)

He sure is Bee LOL

Your black cat is lucky for you Pam. Glad you like it. :)

Haha, no there won't Buff!

Thankyou Ron, so pleased you enjoyed it. x

Ah you're back Sally :)

I think he's about to get some Anthony LOL

My pleasure G-man x

Thanks Jingle :)

A stretch in prison I think Linda LOL

Cheers Mama Zen :)

Why thankyou kindly Eternally Distracted :)

You could try SAW ;)

Pleased you enjoyed it Morning AJ :)

Travis Cody said...

Superstitious bank robber...love it!

Julia Smith said...

You realize that you keep surprising us, even when we're already expecting a twist. It's no small feat.

Misty Dawn said...

As always - I love it! You really should make a book of these!