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Friday, 4 June 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #121 Eviction..



 
Push all you like but I'm staying he decided.


I know I've only lived here for a few months but this is my home and I'm staying.


You were pleased when I moved in, why do you want me out now?


He felt firm hands grip his shoulders, then heard the words........



I'ts a boy!





Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.

35 comments:

Jeff B said...

You should seriously consider submitting a collection of these 55's for publication. You truly have a gift for this venue.

Bernadine said...

I have to agree with Jeff on this one. I think 55 words isn't enough for a post for me. I think I'll end up with 155 or 255. :)

Enjoy your weekend. ;)

Thom said...

Love this. How clever my friend. You are so gifted with this. I concur with Bernadine and Jeff :) Have a wonderful Friday :)

Gillian said...

wow this 55 was so unexpected! Well done. Its beautiful.

Linda said...

You are SO clever! I love your Flash Fiction Fridays as they are always so well written!

clean and crazy said...

wow, what a great 55!! i cannot be so clever, i tried but couldn't, i did have a funny picture though

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

awww, what a sweet story this week!

smiles, bee
xxoxoxoxoxoxo

Valerie said...

I'm impressed, this 55 has to be one of your most creative efforts.

buffalodick said...

A guy spends 9 months trying to get out, and the rest of his life trying to get back in!

Ron said...

You ROCK, Akelamalu!

Truly!

This one was pure genius!

I LOVED IT!!!!!

Have a wonderful weekend, m'dear!

X

Quilly said...

As usual, this is wonderful!

Jingle said...

awesome 55.

Akelamalu said...

Aw you're too kind Jeff, thankyou. x

It's easier than you think Bernadine and thankyou m'dear. x

Why thankyou Thom, you're so kind. :)

So glad you liked it Gillian :)

I'm so pleased you enjoy them Linda x

I'm sure you could do better than me Clean&Crazy :)

Glad you enjoyed it Bee :)

Why thankyou for the praise Valerie :)

Aint that the truth Buff! LOL


Aw thanks Ron xx


You're vert kind Quilly, I thank you. xx


Cheers Jingle :)

Brian Miller said...

nice. that was just the case with my boy...he did not want to come out...great 55.

mine is up!

G-Man said...

You really um..Delivered today :P
I guess I've come to expect brilliance from you weekly...
And I get it!!
Excellent 55 Ake My Dear.
Thanks for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

anthonynorth said...

Some of them just don't want to leave, do they?
Nice one :-)

secret agent woman said...

Thank God they have no choice in the matter.

Spiky Zora Jones said...

akelamalu: You amaze me with your wit and smarts. And your use of words...is awesome...it's like a trail...then it BANG it hit me...I cvouldn;t help but smile and giggle.
heheheh

later sweetie. have a fab weekend.

Travis Cody said...

LOL! He'll find out soon that there's more fun stuff to do out here!

Susan at Stony River said...

ROFL! Sounds like my kids!

Akelamalu said...

Both mine's were the same Brian!

LOL you're so funny G-man - just what I 'expected' from you. :)

NO, they get too comfy Anthony!

Quite SAW!

Happy to make you smile Spiky :)

But before too long he'll be wanting to get back to where he started eh Trav? ;)

Mine too Susan LOL

tony said...

Bravo! Have A Great Weekend My Friend.

MarmiteToasty said...

I cant believe it....... for the first time in history I KNEW what was happening from line 1 :)

brilliant..

x

Mama Zen said...

What a surprise ending!

Jingle said...

beautiful ending...
Happy Saturday!

lettuce said...

ha! i saw this one coming....

Eternally Distracted said...

Your 55's are always my favourite :0)

Flowerpot said...

Brilliant - I think the idea of a 55 collection is great.

Menina said...

You're really good at this! I definitely agree with the collection of 55s...

Akelamalu said...

Cheers Tony :)

You're sharp Marmie ;)

That's the way I planned it Mama Zen, glad to hear it worked. :)

Thanks Jingle :)

You guessed it too eh Lettuce ?

Why thankyou Eternally Distracted

Cheers Flowerpot x

Well thankyou very much Menina you're very kind.

Julia Smith said...

The Queen of Twisty Endings! You shall reign forever!

Cloudia said...

Jeff is right!!!!!!

nitebyrd said...

Oh! What a great suprise! You really say a lot with those few words!

Akelamalu said...

Why thankyou Julia :)

And thankyou too Cloudia x

I try Nitebyrd ;)

Misty Dawn said...

LOVE this one! One of my favorites that you've done! I agree that you should make a book of these.