Friday, 30 April 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #116 Online Friend

Jamie needed someone to talk to, he was lonely.

At school they all called him a Geek.

He was fascinated with his new online friend.

They enjoyed the same things - stamp collecting, reading, computer games.

They arranged to meet at McDonalds.

"He didn't say, in the chatroom, that he was an old man" thought Jamie.

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Quilly said...

Oh dear. I hope Jaime made it home safely after that encounter.

clean and crazy said...

yewww, funny 55!!

Anonymous said...

Of course it's an old man, who else collects stamps? :P

Anonymous said...

ACK...I hope he just keeps to stamp collecting, reading and computer games when he meets Jamie. Let's hope so :) Great 55. Have a wonderful Friday :)

Dumdad said...


Gledwood said...


Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

ah, the dreaded old man in the chat room!

smiles, bee

John's comments said...

dangerous times... Gone for a poem this week based on the Etheree form created about twenty years ago by an Arkansas poet named Etheree Taylor Armstrong It normally consists of ten lines of unmetered and unrhymed verse, the first line having one syllable, each succeeding line adding a syllable. I added an extra row for the word count and the punch line. See what I mean here.

Akelamalu said...

Ah you saw the meaning behind my 55 Quilly!

Oops, it wasn't supposed to be funny Clean&Crazy :0

I don't think he really collects stamps MomsJournal

Unfortunately I think he has other things in mind Thom.

Bad more like Dumdad :(

! Gleds

You got it Bee

Very dangerous times John

anthonynorth said...

A close shave there.

Ron said...

OMG....this was a good one, Akelamalu!!!!

That ending was like, Oooooooo!

You are soooo great with these, m'dear! You always keep us guessing!

Have a great weekend, m'dear!


Brian Miller said...

creepy the other direction, do not look back...whew!

my 55 is up!

Enchanted Oak said...

Hello, dear, from California. You did well, creating a frightful situation in so few words. Our poor vulnerable children.
My 55 is up as well.

Daryl said...


Akelamalu said...

Definitely Anthony!

That was definitely the reaction I was after Ron and thanks m'dear. x

I do hope Jamie does a runner Brian :(

Thankyou Enchanted Oak and thanks for dropping by and commenting. :)

Cheers Daryl x

Linda said...

Which is the biggest problem with on-line "friends" - you never know who they really are or what they're really after sometimes. Hopefully Jamie told his parents where he was going and what he was doing though I'm afraid he might not have.

Jingle said...

loved it,
online dating or befriending is like that, it ends up a joke!

Jingle said...

very impressive 55.
enjoyed it very much!

buffalodick said...

Good little parable to remember..

steveroni said...

Yesss, the "bad guys" have made it difficult for us old Peeps to be friendly. So we live with that, of course.

This is why I always introduce myself on chat as a 14-year-old (I'm 76) and that way I get to meet lots of Peeps my age, but they always seem like--well, SICK--grin!

What's "chat"? (another grin!)

G-Man said...

Just like people do not realize that I'm actually a 29 year old Illegal alien Mother of eight from Costa Rica!
Excellent 55 Ake..
You Rock baby!
Thanks for visiting, thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End!!

Spiky Zora Jones said...

akelamalu: I know I'll always get surprised when I read your 55. And you never disappoint.

a good one sweetie.

have a great weekend honey.

I'm going to a concert...woohoo!

Mama Zen said...

Scary, scary, scary!

Lulda Casadaga said...

Watch out for those predators...inciteful 55! :0

Travis said...

I like how you leave the ending open to interpretation. I think 100% of the comments before me immediately thought "predator". But I went the other direction. You didn't specifically say that the old man was a predator, or that Jamie was afraid.

So perhaps the old man and Jamie settled into a pleasant grandfatherly relationship.

I like the story.

Anonymous said...

Nice story!^^

Anonymous said...

Well done you for bringing this topic to light again... it is scarily true for some young people :0(

lettuce said...


its awful how such possibly very positive innocent things automatically bring the worst to mind

Shrinky said...

A chill just ran up my spine..

Akelamalu said...

That's a parent/grandparent's biggest fear isn't it Linda? One doesn't know until maybe it's too late! :(

Glad you liked it Jingle

It is Buff

Yes, it's always the case that the bad guys bring everyone under suspicion steveronie :(

One can be anything online G-man! ;)

Thanks Spiky and I look forward to hearing about the concert x

It is scary Mama Zen :(

Certainly we have to warn our kids that they're out there Lulda

No I didn't say the old man is a predator and it's nice that you thought maybe he wasn't Trav but, unfortunately, an adult not revealing their age online when talking to children is very suspicious, don't you think? I'm glad you liked the story.

Thanks Sashindoubutsu.

It's very frightening isn't it Eternally Distracted :0

Unfortunately yes it does Lettuce :(

Mine too, when I wrote it Shrinky :(

sheri... said...

and who says all your friends have to be the same age??? there is much to learn if jaime's mom is okay with this ;) i really enjoyed this great 55!

evalinn said...

Great 55. And scary too!

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Wonderful 55!
How could I have missed this?
Have a blessed Sunday!

secret agent woman said...

This i the fear of every parent who has children who go on-line.

Akelamalu said...

Well they don't Sheri but I'm not sure Jamie has told him Mum!

It is scary Evalinn - there are some evil people out there!

Glad you like it Shakira :)

Exactly SAW!

who said...

sorry I missed your flash fiction. The thoughts in quotes were hilarious.

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