Friday, 9 April 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #113 Locked Away...

The boy was scared

The cupboard door was tight shut, he couldn't get out.

Sitting in the dark, wishing he'd done as he he'd been told,

He heard his father approaching.

The door opened.

"I know, I shouldn't have been searching for my present, then I wouldn't have locked myself in"
he told his father.

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Quilly said...

Kids. You just never know what they're going to do next!

Anonymous said...

LOL...sounds like the balloon boy LOL. Well done. my friend. Kids will be kids. Mine is up HERE. Have a great Friday my friend :)

Brian Miller said...

this one hits a little close to home for me...errr...smiles. fun 55.

mine is up!

Hootin' Anni said...

Oh my....giggles. Does this bring back memories of our kids long ago, or what?


Here is my Flash 55 for the week. [scroll down below my Show n Tell feature]

Have a wonderful Friday.

Maha said...

it was a very nice read. But since I am a 14 year-old, I kinda approached it more with the child's perspective rather than the dad. I know that sneaking out and stuff can be dangerous, but if we scrupulously follow the rules, then we are gonna be adults the moments we are born! Also, when a parent tells us something and we just obey, we feel the whole thing is unfair, but if we go there, do what we want and something bad goes on, we are NEVER gonna repeat it again. But, sometimes it can get outta hand, and then the safest thing would be to just follow the orders.
My 55 is up!

anthonynorth said...

Ah, the impatience of kids.

lime said...

oh experience is a harsh teacher isn't it?

clean and crazy said...

wow i think being locked in was punishment enough!! great 55 is this a real story from a memory?

PattiKen said...

Kids will always be inquisitive, which is not always a bad thing. It's a challenge to keep them safe without squelching their curiosity.

Ron said...

Oh, how cute Akelamalu!

And what's really funny is that little boy sounded just like me when I was a kid - HA!

Thanks for sharing another FAB Flash 55, m' dear!


Enjoy your weekend....X

g-man said...

If you ask me it served the little Bugger right!
Excellent 55 Ake!
Loved your story.
Thanks for visiting, thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

secret agent woman said...

The lure was just too great - I can't blame the little guy.

Linda said...

Sometimes a kid's just gotta do what a kid's just gotta do! Glad that he wasn't in trouble, though!

Akelamalu said...

No you don't Quilly! LOL

Yep kids will be kids Thom :)

Did that happen to you Brian?

My kids did the same thing Anni

You talk a lot of sense for a 15 year old Maha! :)

Oh yes, they don't like to wait do they Anthony? LOl

It certainly is Lime

I think so too Clean & Crazy :)

You're right Pattiken :)

I can imagine you doing something like that Ron, you naughty boy! LOL

LOL aw he was only a 'little' boy G-man ;)

His curiosity got the better of him SAW ;)

No he didn't get in trouble Linda but I think it taught him a lesson. :)

Vodka Logic said...

yep i used to snoop but never got caught... cute

my 55 is up

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

good one again!

smiles, bee

hope said...

Funny, I never wanted to know what was in a gift until it was time to open.

And my friends all thought that was odd. ;) Nicely done!

buffalodick said...

I'm a gift guesser from way back, and it has worked against me...

evalinn said...

That cute! Nice 55. :-)

Cloudia said...


Aloha from Waikiki

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Travis said...

LOL! Over this last weekend, one of the cats in the house got shut in a closet. We left the door open, and cats being cats...

Akelamalu said...

Ah you were lucky Vodka logic :)

Thanks Bee x

I was always curious but I never sneaked a look Hope :)

It takes all the excitment out of it Buff doesn't it?

Thanks Evalinn :)

Glad you liked it Cloudia x

I bet there was some yowling in your house Trav LOL

Misty Dawn said...

I actually did this when I was little. My little dog and I crawled into a kitchen cupboard and got locked in. My parents heard me calling for "Daddy", but they couldn't see me anywhere. They finally found me sitting in the cupboard with my dog in my lap.

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