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Friday, 16 April 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #114 Poor....



Isaac was desperate, he had bills.


He'd sold most of his possessions, only his father's gold watch remained.



The antique dealer offered him £3000, it was a rare piece.


"No", he couldn't part with it.


They never found Isaac's killer.


Why would anyone want to hurt a defenceless old man with no money people asked.



Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.

36 comments:

Dumdad said...

Good one! Got me again.

tony said...

So No body Ended Up Doing Time?

ann said...

oh poor Isaac

tony - haha

Brian Miller said...

yikes...and then he had nothing...tight 55...perhaps the watch stopped as well...

anthonynorth said...

It happens too often. Far too often.

Linda said...

Which is very sad but very true sometimes. The poor guy.

Finding Pam said...

Poor Isaac. Great story!

Ron said...

Ooooooo....this one gave me chills!

OUTSTANDING!

It totally amazes me how you can tell a story in just 55 words?!!?

And a GREAT story, at that!

Thanks for sharing, m'dear!

Have a great weekend!
X

P.S. loved Tony's comment!

Travis said...

Some greedy bastard, most likely. Poor Isaac!

John's comments said...

Yes it was an open and shut case...in gold I understand! Late for me, this week, what with work demanding I do what I'm paid to do. I mean, what a cheek. My 55 story here

Quilly said...

Grrr ... I am certain things like this happen.

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Dumdad

Good one Tony! LOL

Poor Isaac indeed Ann :(

I hope the watch never worked again Brian

It does indeed Anthony.

Unfortunately yes it does Linda :(

Thanks Pam

Aw thanks Ron, I'm pleased you liked it.

Maybe the antique dealer Trav

Ah yes, work commitments must come first John

I think they do Quilly :(

buffalodick said...

"Trust in Allah, but tie up your camel"...

Monkey Man said...

As Brian states - Tight. An excellent tale. My 55 is HERE .

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

What a great tale with just 55!
Poor chap.
love it.

Mine is here
Have you a great weekend!
hugs
shakira

secret agent woman said...

Oh, that's sad!

Dulce said...

Oh Ake!
This is vruel, and sad... hopefully just fiction... of course flash fiction Friday

Great 55
10/10!

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

glad this is fiction!

smiles, bee
xoxoxoxooxoxo

Thom said...

I'm suspicious of the antique dealer myself. Poor Isaac. Very well done as usual my friend. :) Have a great weekend :)

Shrinky said...

Shit, he killed his dad?? Wonderfully warped!

clean and crazy said...

the antique dealer did it right? great 55!!

Spiky Zora Jones said...

Akelamalu: Oh yeah. I likey lots. This one would make a fabulous short film...it has an Alfred Hitchcock feel to it.

nice sweetie. xxx

Ji said...

tiny but powerful,
reminds me of a atom, kidding!
cool 55,
Happy Friday!

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g-man said...

Dang Ake...
You got a bit of the macabre in you!!!
Excellent 55 My Dear..
Thanks for this enigmatic tale.
You Rock The Empire!!!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Bernadine said...

Good writing here.

I would have a bit of a problem with writing stories with just 55 words. I would just go way over it.

Have a fab weekend. :)

hope said...

Greed is a terrible thing.

Sad but well told.

Bob Mac said...

who's going to tackle a Karate expert packing an AK, course they're going to pick on an old man.

Akelamalu said...

Buff???

Thanks MonkeyMan :)

Cheers Shakira

Yes it is sad Dulce and it is fiction.

Me too Bee

Ah you got it Thom!

No he didn't Shrinky - the antique dealer killed Isaac!

YOu think so Spiky? Thanks hon. x

Cheers Ji

Sometimes I cannot control my macabre side G-man ;)

Yep, you got it Clean & Crazy :)

It's a lot easier than you think Bernadine, you should give it a try. :)

It is indeed Hope!

Indeed BobMac

PattiKen said...

Oh, poor Isaac.

My 55 is up here.

buffalodick said...

Be careful with your valued possessions...

evalinn said...

Scary story! Great 55. Hope you´ve had a good weekend!

Cloudia said...

Masterful, Ake!

Aloha from Waikiki


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Akelamalu said...

Yes, poor Isaac indeed Pattiken :(

Yes you're right Buff, one needs to be careful with possessions.

Thanks Evalinn :)

Cheers Cloudia x

Thankyou Ji, how kind.

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