Friday, 17 April 2009

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 71 Ex Smoker

Ex Smoker

Fred was desperate to give up smoking.

Health was important, not the cost, he was rich.

The hypnotist promised startling results.

Ten sessions at £10 each.

Surprisingly it really worked, Fred had been an ex smoker for ten years when he died.
Fred's family couldn't understand why he'd left all his money to the hypnotist.

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Cloudia said...

Oh, Akelamalu!
Short but. . . TART!
Aloha ;-)

Thom said...

You are so clever. That was awesome. Who would have thought? Happy hypnotist!

MarmiteToasty said...

Brilliant....... you have such a mind..


Dumdad said...

Another mesmerising tale from you!

Nessa said...

Those must have been ten really good years.

Connie said...

Nice twist on the end. I liked it.

Akelamalu said...

Short but TART - I like that Clouida :)

Happy and crafty hypnotist Thom!

Glad you liked it Marmie xx

How kind, thanks Dumdad :)

They were Nessa - I know from experience having given up smoking 11 years ago!

I'm pleased you liked the twist Connie :)

Dr.John said...

I love your surprise endings. I model mine after yours, of course.

Hootin' Anni said...

Okay, I'd like to meet the hypnotist...wonder if he still has Fred's fortune...or at least part of it. I need to find me a rich friend. LOL

My 55 is posted...scroll below my Friday's show n tell meme. Happy weekend to you.

Prayer Girl said...

Thanks for "popping over" to my blog and thanks for the kind comment.

I loved your 55 words. I do wonder how in the world you manage to get pictures interspersed with text. I only know how to insert pictures at the top. (I'm still quite a novice.)

I read your Wednesday blog, Portrait Of Words # 8, and was fascinated by the idea of using pictures as a format for creative writing.

Prayer Girl

CrystalChick said...

That's clever! My hubs went to a hypnotist and it worked for him as well. Hope he doesn't leave her all our money. Oh wait, what money????

p.s. Tonight and tomorrow I'm taking the Reiki I class!!!

Linda said...

I LOVE the twist on this one! That was one very smart hypnotist!!

Flowerpot said...

very good Ak. Reminds me of when I gave up smoking - WITHOUT a hypnotist I hasten to add!

jadey said...

LOL I love it. Great post. Have a great weekend. My 55 is up.

Salute said...

Great post. Short and sweet.

buffalodick said...

Under hypnosis, he was told to leave him the money... :)

Daryl said...

LOL .. that was great ...

Akelamalu said...

I'm honoured Dr. John that you model your surprise endings on mine. :)

I told MWM if I married again it would be for money, having done the love thing Anni! ((wink))

It's easy to put the photos in anywhere you want them Prayer Girl, email me and I'll try to help you. I hope reading my POW will spur you on to try the challenged yourself next month.

Spend that money now Crystalchick!!! ;)
I'm so excited for you doing your Reiki course, you will love it. :)

That was a very crafty hypnotist Linda!

I gave up smoking cold turkey too Flowerpot. :)

Thanks Jadey I'm pleased you enjoyed it. I'll be over to read yours later.

Cheers Salute :)

Correct Buff!

Thanks Daryl x

Strumpet said...

I gave it up four years ago.

However....I sure could use a hypnotist to help with some other things in my cleaning my apartment...

Ron said...

OMG...this is HYSTERICAL!!!!

I'm laughing my TUSH off!!


You are one CLEVER lady!!!!

BRAVA Akelamalu!

Thanks for the wonderful Friday afternoon giggle!

Have a great weekend, dear lady!


Akelamalu said...

Good for you Strumpet! I've never been to a hypnotist - I'm scurred!

I love that you enjoy my musings Ron - oh most faithful of readers. xx

clean and crazy said...

how very sweet. my grandmother tried to quit smoking with a hypnotherapist, he hypnotized her into believing she didn't smoke anymore, so I got her money back!! Thanks for stopping by, love the song and your little butterflies re so awesome.

g-man said...

Buff is sharp as a tack eh?

Excellent 55 Ake!! As always..

Thanks a bunch for always giving us a quality piece of reading fun.
Have a Great Week-End...G

Mike Golch said...

Great posting,I hope that you are having a great day today!

lime said...

quite the show of gratitude, eh? nicely done.

Mona said...

hahaha! that was a double hypnosis I guess! :D

Anonymous said...

Funny. The hypnotists are a sneaky lot.

Travis said...

Sneaky hypnotist!

Eaton Bennett said...

Well now, the hypnotist did a good job on Fred...:))

Shadow said...

wow. good one. can i have the hypnotists number? hubby's trying to give up. on second thought, never mind...

Mojo said...

This reminds me of one of those silly childhood songs my son used to sing. I don't remember the whole thing but it ran along the lines of:
"Mumps", said the doctor
"Measles", said the nurse
"Nothing" said the lady
With the alligator purse
Miss Suzie smacked the doctor
Miss Suzie smacked the nurse
Miss Suzie paid the lady
With the alligator purse.

Okay, so maybe it's not the same.

Anonymous said...

hahahaha very clever. ;)

Emmie said...

haha too funny! Well funny for the hypnotist.. not for the poor hypnotised man and his family!

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