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Friday, 28 May 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #120 Missing Person......



"Come Home Jeannie" Colin pleaded to his missing wife, on the television appeal.


"If you know where Jeannie is please ring this number."


She'd been missing for months and he hadn't heard a thing.


"It must be awful for that poor man" said Ben


"I don't know what I'd do if you disappeared."


Jeannie smiled.





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32 comments:

jinksy said...

I'd call this succint smugness! :)

Gillian said...

oooooo dark and twisted.

I love it!

Elaine said...

Great one, Ak!

Thom said...

That twisted jeannie. Did she live in a bottle by chance? ROFLMAO!!! Well done my friend. Have a great weekend :)

secret agent woman said...

Ha ha ha. Ben better keep an eye on her!

Dianne said...

ahhhh Jeannie isn't missing at all!! she's up to something
good stuff lady :)

clean and crazy said...

awesome 55, i thought he killed her!! they will think that soon!!

clean and crazy said...

awesome 55, i thought he killed her!! they will think that soon!!

Daryl said...

Another super twist

Dumdad said...

Nice one!

Menina said...

this made me scoff! At first I assumed Jeannie has escaped from him, but maybe she is the one hurting him...

Very good.

buffalodick said...

I think I got it...

Valerie said...

Oooo that's wicked.... and brilliant.

Ron said...

OMG...that twist at the end was BRILLIANT!!!!

BRAVA, m'dear!

You never cease to amaze me!

Hope you're having a wondeful time on your trip!

Enjoy your weekend....X

Quilly said...

Oh my goodness -- that first man must have been horrid to live with for Jeannie to take such pleasure in his suffering. Either that, or Jeannie is horrid and the first man should be rejoicing that she's gone!

nitebyrd said...

Oh! Wicked story, Akelamalu. I LOVE it!

Jingle said...

very impressive 55.
love the idea and the set up!

Susan at Stony River said...

I LIKE that one!
:-D

Cloudia said...

Oh that smile!



Aloha from Hawaii, Sis

Comfort Spiral

snowelf said...

Hehehehehe I LOVE it. :)

I also love that your health is good and you're feeling so splendid. Enjoy Scottland!!

--snow

Linda said...

Apparently Jeannie isn't missing at all - she knows right where she is!

MarmiteToasty said...

Brilliant week in and week out LOL

x

Travis Cody said...

Now that's nice and twisty!

Spiky Zora Jones said...

akelamalu: wha hahahaha. that's it, it fun and funny and has a tint of naughty. I think Rod sterling could have done a Twightlight Zone episode.

boo!

I like it honey.

later sweets

lettuce said...

ha@!

Bob Mac said...

for a lancy lass you're not half bad. all joking aside , I loved this post

Mama Zen said...

I REALLY like this one, Ake!

Eternally Distracted said...

I thought I got it and then I read the comments and now I'm confused!!

Joy DeTete said...

Awesome story!

Akelamalu said...

Me too Jinksy

Jeannie is very dark and very twisted Gillian ;)

Thanks Laney x

I think she just wanted to make her hubby suffer Thom ;)

He should but he doesn't know her well enough SAW!

You got it Dianne - Jeannie is only missing to her husband. ;)


I think that's what Jeannie is hoping Clean&Crazy!


Cheers Daryl :)

Thanks Dumdad :)


Well spotted Menina!


I'm sure you did Buff :)


Jeannie is the wicked one Valerie LOL


I love you Ron, you're so appreciative. x We had a great time hon.


It could be either of those reasons Quilly - you choose.


Glad you enjoyed it Nitebyrd :)


Pleased you liked it Jingle


Thanks Susan :)

Yes indeed, that smile says it all Cloudia!


Oh thankyou Snowelf - on all counts. x


She certainly does Linda!


You're too kind Marmie, thanks chuck. x


I try Trav ;)

I thought you'd like it Spiky x

Happy to make you smile Lettuce :)

Us Lancy lasses aren't just pretty faces you know BobMac! LOL

Glad you liked it Mama Zen :)

It's whatever you read into it Eternally Distracted ;)

Cheers Joy :)

Jingle said...

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vote if not done so,
or take the award...

Misty Dawn said...

You seriously need to compile these in a book! They are so much fun to read!