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Friday, 17 August 2012

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #204 Birth-day......






Driving like a maniac, he weaved in and out of the traffic.

Honking the horn, overtaking, tailgating, even running a red light,

taking chances he wouldn't normally take.

He had to get to the hospital,

be there for the birth of his first child.

Only two minutes away.....

Jan screamed "Stop now, the baby's coming!"


Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.

16 comments:

Beach Bum said...

That is a situation I would not wish on my worst enemy. Great writting though, I could sense the tension and worry.

Valerie said...

Gosh, I thought Jan was already IN the hospital. Brilliant piece, Pearl. Well done.

Brian Miller said...

had that happen to a friend...her husband pulled into a walmart...and she made him move the car somewhere else as she did not want a walmart baby...lol

Akelamalu said...

It seems to be happening more and more here these days Beach! :0

That's exactly what I wanted you to think Valerie, thanks. :)

LOL I can understand that Brian!

hope said...

Yep, you got me. :)

Have a wonderful weekend!

G-Man said...

Pearlie Mae...
Wheres a cop when you need one eh?
Loved your Dialated to Nine 55..:P
Thanks for playing, as always thanks for your GREAT support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Ron said...

"Only two minutes away.....

Jan screamed "Stop now, the baby's coming!"

OMG...hope they got there in time!!

As Valerie shared, I thought Jan was already IN the hospital!

Great one, m'dear!

You can convey so much in so little words!

Have a great weekend....X

cheshire wife said...

So is that a thumbs down to Dad's driving from the baby?

Mama Zen said...

Clever twist!

˙·٠•●❤Sh@KiR@ ❤●•٠·˙ said...

Woohooo...I never see that coming! Great twist and all done in 55! Kudos to you!
Mine is here
Have you a ROCKING WEEKEND!!!
hugs
shakira

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Hope, glad the twist worked. :)

Cops are only around when you least need them G-man LOL

I think the baby was delivered in the car Ron! The twist go you too eh? :)

I think he went over too many speed bumps Cheshire Wife LOL

Thanks Mama Zen x

PattiKen said...

Poor guy. He probably passed out and missed the whole thing.

Akelamalu said...

Glad you enjoyed the twist Shakira :)

More than likely PattiKen LOL

Dianne said...

excellent sense of emergency!!

MorningAJ said...

Oh dear! Don't kids like that end up being called after a policeman who stops to help? Hope all's well!

bobbybegood1 said...

I must be LOST IN SPACE to forget about your lovely blog, Akelamalu. Arghhhhh! How could I forget? I'll tell you how I forgot. I thought your blog was another blog I visit. I didn't see the butterfly. I just assumed you changed or something. Well, you know what they say when you assume (you make an ass out of u and me - get it) Fabulous story. I would love to partake, but I must get my writing skills up to par. In the words of Arnold, "I'll be back." Cheers!!