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Monday, 14 November 2011

Succinctly Yours - A Microfiction Meme #30





Grandma at Grandma's Goulash provides a picture and a word prompt for this Microfiction Meme and the rules are use the photo as inspiration for a story of 140 characters OR 140 words.


Want more challenge? Use the word of the week in your story. This part is optional.


This week's word is SERENE here's the picture and my offering using the picture and word of the week  in 140 characters, including spaces and punctuation.



Little boats, bobbing on calm waters,

suggest a serene existence for the peoples living on the river.

Closer inspection suggests the opposite.

23 comments:

Cloudia said...

yes! well done. concise and incisive, Ake



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Beach Bum said...

Excellent! Great writing!

I wonder where that pictures was taken?

Valerie said...

Far from it, by the look of the picture. I wonder where it is.

secret agent woman said...

Those are some serious fixer-uppers.

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Cloudia x

Cheers Beach. No idea about the pic, Grandma supplies it.

No idea where it is Valerie, though I have seen houses like that on the Chao Phraya river which runs through Bankok.

Definitely SAW! LOL

MorningAJ said...

Highly accurate observation and great interpretation of the photo. Well done.

Mama Zen said...

Exactly!

anthonynorth said...

Ah, there's usually something different below the serenity. Nice one.

Linda said...

It's true that a calm surface can hide a lot of turbulence.

Well done as always m'dear!

Daryl said...

Well done.. and a fascinating photo to look closely at ..

Akelamalu said...

Thankyou AJ, glad you liked it.

Agreed Mama Zen

There is indeed Anthony

Yes calm waters can often hide a lot Linda

Thanks Daryl, yes it is an interesting photo.

Ron said...

EXCELLENT one, m'dear!

And, OMG...."Closer inspection suggests the opposite."

You said it!

Non-serene.

Have a glorious Monday!

X

Empress Bee (of the high sea) said...

wow that's some scary housing!

smiles, bee
xxoxoxooxox

Pooch said...

Soothing water, though it may be filthy beneath the surface, does lend a certain calmness to a harrowing scene.

Well written.

:)

Akelamalu said...

Glad you liked it Ron x

It certainly is Bee!

Strange that, but it does Pooch!

Melanie said...

Love it!! Very well done!

storytreasury said...

Like it! I think those houses warrant a second and even third look.

Kay L. Davies said...

You are so right. Closer inspection is always a good idea, even if it disillusions.

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

Pat said...

So true--from far away, one gets a false impression of serenity. Good use of "serene."

Flowerpot said...

excellent - as ever - and a lovely picture too!

Akelamalu said...

So glad you enjoyed it Melanie :)

Yes, you need to closely at the houses to see just what they're about storytreasury ;)

Closer inspection is always a good idea Kay ;)

From a distance all looks well doesn't it Pat? :0

Thanks Flowerpot x

Maggie May said...

That was very well done. I suppose there is always a different side to everything.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Akelamalu said...

Cheers Maggie. Yes there usually is. :)