Monday, 27 September 2010

Microfiction Monday #21

Susan at Stony River hosts this fun theme each Monday, so do pop over and read the others who have signed Mr. Linky. The rules are thus:

Every Monday Susan will post a picture for the subject of your story. Microfiction means the shortest of short stories. Think Aesop's fables, comic strips, or even jokes: complete stories that can be told in under a minute. For this game, the limit is a tweetable 140 characters or fewer, including punctuation and spaces.
Here's today's picture and my contribution.

Gazing across the water, May wrinkled her brow,

as she watched her shoes float away,

wondering how she’d get across the rocks without them.


Flowerpot said...

Great - and lovely picture!

Valerie said...

Perhaps a kind sailor will swim out and save the day

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

Poor May, I guess next time she will have a better grasp of her shoes.

Ellie said...

Of course! LOL. Great take on the picture.

MorningAJ said...

Now THAT made me laugh. Mum used to make us tie ours together with their shoelaces and hang them round our necks!

David said...

Oh, poor May! Will she ever get back across the rocks? Will the tide return her shoes? This sounds like the beginning of a good story. Witty!

secret agent woman said...


anthonynorth said...

I hope she's got a hardy soul ... I mean sole :-)
Enjoyed that.

Akelamalu said...

Cheers Flowerpot :)

Hopefully Valerie :)

I think it's a lesson learned Bill ;)

Thanks Ellie

I bet May wishes she'd done that with her shoes Morning AJ ;)

All sorts of things could happen David - whatever you fancy. :)

Indeed SAW :)

clean and crazy said...

oh my i have done that before..

Dumdad said...

You didn't put a foot wrong with this tale!

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

she can wave at the boat to get them for her :)

Mama Zen said...

This made me laugh! I can totally picture this happening to me.

Ron said...

AWESOME Microfiction Monday, Akelamalu!

And instantly thought almost the same thing as Anthonynorth...

"I hope she's got a hardy soul ... I mean sole."


Thanks for sharing your brilliance, m'dear!

Have a wonderful Monday...X

Quilly said...

LOL! Too perfect. Lime Kiln State Park is not a place for taking off one's shoes! Poor silly, May!

Madeleine said...

LOL! Poor Mary. I hope she gets rescued by a knight in shining shoes to carry her across those rocks. :O)

Sandi McBride said...

Ah yes, the inevitable floating shoe caper!

Sandi McBride said...

Ah yes, the inevitable floating shoe caper!

Akelamalu said...

I almost did once Clean&Crazy ;)

LOL cheers Dumdad

Oh yes, maybe some kind seaman will pick them up Pryanka :)

I'm sure it's happened to lots of people Mama Zen :)

So pleased you enjoyed it Ron x

It was a silly thing to do Quilly but understandable don't you think? ;)

I hope so too Madeleine

Happens too often Sandi ;)

SouthLakesMom said...

Oh Oh! She may be rockbound for a LONG time! Ah well, at least it's a nice view!

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

you have the CUTEST imagination!!!

smiles, bee

tony said...

A Sole-Full Photo!

Anonymous said...

I'd be yelling at the top of my lungs for someone to help me LOL Love this my friend and very well done :)

Prayer Girl said...

Uh oh - - Poor May. Nice Micro-Fiction.

Mine is up.


Diane said...

Poor gal..... Ouchie!!! :O)

septembermom said...

That could be a conundrum. Well done :)

hope said...

Sounds just like Monday to me. :)

Travis Cody said...

Now when they say to kick of your shoes, they don't really mean to kick them so they end up in the water!

Cloudia said...

I love your spare, rich words!

Aloha from Waikiki

Comfort Spiral

Anonymous said...

Maybe she could 'walk on water' like a few souls before her!!! Wonderful take on this week's picture. Cheers!

Pat said...

This is so funny! I liked the big spaces between the lines of text--It drew out the funny ending. Great one!

Linda said...

Oh dear, May may have some sore feet after getting back across the rocks. I hate it when my shoes take off on a path of their own!

Spiky Zora Jones said...

Akelamalu: You have a way of surprising a reader.

one thing thgough...May's shoes were as big as boats? hehehe.

I liked it sweetie. I can just imagine it, too.

later honey. xx

Sioux Roslawski said...

But she seems as if she is not too unhappy with the prospect of staying there for a while...Nice job!

Akelamalu said...

Especially if she's got sensitive feet Southlakesmom ;)

Why thankyou Bee x

Pardon the pun eh Tony? ;)

Yep, poor May PrayerGirl :)

Ouchie, ouchie Dinae

Indeed it could Septembermom

Monday's can be like that Hope ;)

It is possible to kick them off too far Trav (wink)

Thankyou Cloudia x

She's probably wishing she could sylviamorice LOL

Big spaces are designed to make you read each word - glad it worked Pat.

Ouch sore feet are not something to look forward to are they Linda?? :(

LOL not sure how big May's shoes are but they did float Spiky

I think May is happy just enjoying the view Sioux ;)

Dave said...

Very nice.

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