Friday, 10 September 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #132 Rats.....

Annie heard the scratching coming from the loft.

"Rats" she thought, "from the empty house down the street".

There were no dividing walls in the roof space of her terrace of houses.

Climbing through the hatch with the bait, Annie flashed the torch,

then stared in amazement at.........

the family that had taken up residence!

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


Quilly said...

One wonders how they got up there and what they used for facilities. I think I would have rather found rats! This story was scary!

A Daft Scots Lass said...

I thoroughly enjoyed this.

Anonymous said... Ben LOL Very suspenseful. I sure do hope that we might find out who it is :) Great 55. Have a wonderful Friday :)

Valerie said...

Bordering on possibilities! You have a real talent for writing these 55s,

MorningAJ said...

Think I'd sooner have the rats!
Excellent 55 this week!

mrsnesbitt said...

Wonderful - and probable! Have a great weekend.

clean and crazy said...

what a clever twist

Akelamalu said...

I know it is scary Quilly!

Glad you enjoyed it Scots Lass

Thanks Thom :)

It definitely is a possibility Valerie :(

Oooh I'm not so sure about that Morning AJ!

That's the worrying thing Mrs N - the probably bit!

Akelamalu said...

Thanks Clean&Crazy :)

G-Man said...

Just Bigger Rats!!
Welcome Home Ake...
Missed you Deary..
Excellent 55 as usual.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

not rats, squatters!

smiles, bee

Akelamalu said...

LOL you got it G! I missed you to hon. x

Squatters indeed Bee!

Mike Golch said...

squatters not rats.I wonder wich is worse??

anthonynorth said...

And it certainly happens.
Nice one.

Brian Miller said...

oh...this one begs more than 55 words...why are they there...why are they hiding...very nice 55...

Maggie May said...

She was brave going up there in the first place!
Good twist!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Ron said...


That twist of an ending had me in CHILLS!

I know I've said this before, but I have to say it again. You are BRILLIANT, Akelamalu! You're cleverness blows me away!


Have a beautiful weekend, m'dear!


Finding Pam said...

I enjoyed this Flash 55. You are so great at this.

Mama Zen said...

Well, I didn't see that coming!

Akelamalu said...

I'm not sure which is worse Mike

Indeed it does Anthony!

My guess is that they're illegals Brian, what do you think?

She was brave Maggie, the thought of rats wouldn't have got me up a ladder to have a look! LOL

Aw thanks Ron, I'm so pleased you enjoy my 55s. x

Why thankyou Pam, you're very kind. x

I so love it when a twist works Mama Zen thankyou. :)

Eric Alder said...

Oh no! GIANT rats! (LOL!)

A funny 55, Akelamalu!
Have a great weekend!

(Fact: Hawaii didn't have any rats until they arrived on cargo ships)

Dumdad said...

You got me again. Brilliant!

Mona said...

Wow! Human rats are even more dangerous! I hope these are friendly rats! ;)

Travis Cody said...


KB said...

Yikes! Where there's one rat, there's usually many more not far away.

Have a great weekend.

My 55 is here.

secret agent woman said...

Uh oh!

lettuce said...

eeek! now would that be better or worse than finding bats or wasps living there?

Akelamalu said...

Rats brough the Bubonic plague to England too Eric!

Ah, that's what I like to hear Dumdad :)

They're desperate rats Mona I think.

Well indeed Trav

That's true KB, that's what's so scary!

Uh ho SAW

I'm not sure which is worse Lettuce!

CrystalChick said...

Great FF!
We've got a squirrel in the attic. Or maybe more than one by now. That'll teach us not to put nuts out for the little creatures, they want to move in now and get more goodies! Agrrhh.

Dianne said...

in this current economy this becomes so believable
wonderful story telling as always
Hope sends a hug

Jingle said...

rats try to play like cats...
fun 55.

my 55

Happy Belated Friday!

Akelamalu said...

Oh squirrels can cause so much damage I hear CrystalChick - I hope that doesn't happen in your case. :(

That is sadly true Dianne. I enjoyed the hug from Hope. x

Yes they do Jingle

Shrinky said...

Hey, don't jest - this truly DID actually once happen to me - straight up! My first ever one bedroom flat I bought - not a family, but this weirdo I barely knew, he snuck up to my loft, and took up residence in there (God knows for how long, before I discovered him)! Shudder..

Akelamalu said...

OMG Shrinky that's too scary!!!