Friday, 11 April 2008

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 22 Robbery


“Hand over the cash and don’t make a fuss”.

“What? You can’t do this” she said

“Just put the money in the bag and hand it over”

“You don’t frighten me” she snapped

“You’re gonna get hurt if you don’t do it!”

“Go away and leave us alone.”

“Mummy, Johnny’s spoiling our game of shop!”

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ciara said...

ha ha...that's a good one. another great job on the 55. i just read galen's and barman's not too long ago...very good ones as well. i'm intimidated lol

Flowerpot said...

another excellent one Ak. how do you do it?!

buffalodickdy said...

That is part of the game these days....

G-Man said...

I love your multi-media 55's Ake..
You always do such a great job!!
I LOVE your whimsy as well...
have a GREAT Week-End sweetie...G

the mother of this lot said...

Yep, you got me again with this one! Award over here for you.

James Goodman-Horror Writer said...

lol, I must admit... i thought that was going in a totally different direction. Nicely done. :D

la bellina mammina said... it!

Empress Bee (of the High Sea) said...

wow, that is pretty powerful stuff there honey!

smiles, bee

Dianne said...

an ominous start and a sweet finish - I love it!

girl with the mask said...

Phew. I thought were were in for an unhappy ending for a moment there! x

Suburbia said...

Sounds so familiar, my waring factions are home for the holidays....bless them!

Akelamalu said...

No need to feel intimidated Ciara, just go for it!

I'm not sure how I do it Flowerpot? #)

Yep It is Buffalo :(

Why thank you g-manx

LOL I'll be right over MOTL

Just as I hoped James :)

Thanks Bella x

Aw thanks Bee x

That was the idea Dianne, thanks hon.

It was a relief to me too GIM ;)

I remember it well Suburbia :0

Linda said...

Glad to see that there was a good ending to this one - I wasn't sure where it was going exactly!

Sometimes Saintly Nick said...

Nice. {:-)

storyteller said...

How fun to see how you handle the topic each week! Your ‘take’ and ‘delivery’ consistently surprise and delight!
Hugs and blessings,

Dumdad said...

Damn, I didn't see it coming - again!

Gledwood said...

did you hear about the 50something year old grandmother in New York who was doing armed robberies and saying "sorry" to the poor traumatized gun-toted-at bank tellers...

... she only got caught by going over a toll bridge and getting busted by some b*****d seeing her "wanted" poster..!

many thanks for your message at mine:... have a charmin' weekend!!

Akelamalu said...

Not so happy for Johnny when Mum caught up with him Linda!

Thanks Nick :)

Thank you Storyteller you're very kind. :)

LOL you will, eventually Dumdad. :)

An armed robber with a conscience Gleds? That's novel! You're welcome m'dear and I hope you have a good weekend too. x

the teach said...

Very funny, Akelamalu! You crack me up! Thanks for visiting me! :D

snowelf said...

Akelamalu!! Are you sure you're not at my house?!! :P This totally made me laugh cause I can relate and you know how much I love plot twists!! :)

Have a great weekend!


Donnetta Lee said...

That was too cute! I enjoyed the pictures, too. Come see my 55. It's up!

jillie said...

What a great 55! Thanks for stopping by. Love the blog and the pictures of your family on the side are awesome!

Have a good wknd ;o)

Ron said...

Ok, dear lady...can I just tell you AGAIN how BRILLIANT you are with these things!!!

This CRACKED me up!!!

I don't know...but I sense an e-book being published!!!

You GO, girl!

Happy Weekend Akelamalu!

Anonymous said...

Fun - I love your twists at teh end of these.

Akelamalu said...

Glad you liked it Teach :)

It was drawn from experience Snowelf! :)

Thanks Donnetta, I'll be right over.

Why thankyou Jillie and thanks for dropping by.

An E-book Ron? Well you never know! ;) Thanks.

Cheers Citizen x

Strumpet said...

I always love reading yours with all the pictures.

You make the 55's so much fun.

This one was hilarious.

I miss pretending like a little kid.

It's probably why I still do it way too often.

Misty Dawn said...

Ahahaha a surprise fun ending! Love it!

elena jane said...

lol, i love these, and your surprise endings!! :)

Travis said...

You always put a good twist on these. Well done!

Akelamalu said...

I get to pretend all the time Strumpet - with our grandchildren! :)

Glad you enjoyed it Misty x

Thanks Elena :)

Cheers Trav x

CrazyCath said...

You DO tell a good tale with a nice twist at the end. I am still astounded at how you manage it in 55 words!

From a very wordy person.

Akelamalu said...

LOL thanks Cath :)

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