Friday, 18 March 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #156 The Big Race.......




He'd been looking forward to the big race.

The most important one on the calendar.

He'd practiced daily for months.

Round and round the track,

becoming faster and faster with each lap.

He was fit.

He was keen.

He was ready.

There was only one thing would stop him from winning today....

an overweight jockey.



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27 comments:

  1. anthonynorth18 March 2011 at 10:02

    Ah, there's many of them nowadays ;-)
    Nice one.

    You'll find mine here.

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  2. A Daft Scots Lass18 March 2011 at 10:04

    awesome mine in here

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  3. Brian Miller18 March 2011 at 10:38

    oh that will weigh you down...and give you a pain in the back...ha. nice 55.

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  4. Valerie18 March 2011 at 11:22

    Poor horse to be treated so cruelly by a weighty rider.

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  5. Empress Bee (of the high sea)18 March 2011 at 12:54

    oh no! i hope he gets a skinny one!

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxo

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  6. MorningAJ18 March 2011 at 13:02

    Cheltenham Festival gets in the blood doesn't it?

    Good 55!

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  7. G-Man18 March 2011 at 14:20

    And just how many 'Stones' is too fat?
    I just Love Equine 55's.
    You Rock Ake!!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  8. Commander Zaius18 March 2011 at 14:27

    Awesome!
    I can see the frustration in the horse standing in the starting gate groaning under the weight.

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  9. gautami tripathy18 March 2011 at 14:41

    Good one!

    lost in a maze

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  10. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall18 March 2011 at 15:12

    love it instantly,

    perfect 55 for a laugh,
    the last two lines hit home..

    cheers,
    your 55 rocks.

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  11. Daryl18 March 2011 at 16:08

    Laughter, applause .. envy of your cleverness and brevity

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  12. Ron18 March 2011 at 16:20

    "There was only one thing would stop him from winning today....

    an overweight jockey"

    Bwhahhahahaahhahahaha! That TOTALLY caught me off-guard!

    YOU. ARE. BRILLIANT!

    Brava to another Flash 55, m'dear!

    Happy weekend!

    X

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  13. Akelamalu18 March 2011 at 17:05

    I think you're right Anthony ;)

    Cheers Scots Lass

    LOL that's true Brian!

    Indeed Valerie

    I do too Bee ;)

    Yes it does AJ :)

    Not sure what the limit is G but the poor horse will know.

    Me too Beach Bum :0

    Thanks Gautami :)

    So pleased you liked it Jingle :)

    Aw thank you Daryl x

    Glad you enjoyed this one Ron x

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  14. Linda18 March 2011 at 17:41

    Oh no, NOT the dreaded overweight jockey crushing the winning horse's dreams under his thighs!

    Good one as always, my dear!

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  15. Cloudia18 March 2011 at 19:21

    Love the punch line!




    Warm Aloha to you
    from Honolulu!


    Comfort Spiral

    ><}}(°>

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  16. Belinda Munoz18 March 2011 at 20:19

    I liked the weighty twist!

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  17. Dianne18 March 2011 at 21:49

    fat jockey!!
    brilliant and hilarious

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  18. Jannie Funster18 March 2011 at 22:11

    Ahhhh, love it!!

    Brilliant take on a horse ready and rarin' to race.

    xo

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  19. Travis Cody18 March 2011 at 23:39

    I've always wondered if a horse has any thoughts about having to race. I'd like to think they are happy about doing it.

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  20. Maude Lynn19 March 2011 at 00:25

    Poor guy!

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  21. Akelamalu19 March 2011 at 10:51

    You got it Linda, great analogy!

    Cheers Cloudia

    Ah thanks Belinda :)

    Thanks Dianne glad you like it.


    I'm pleased you enjoyed it Jannie :)

    That's always crossed my mind too Trav

    Hopefully he got a lightweight rider Mama Zen

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  22. Maggie May19 March 2011 at 16:01

    Oh poor thing!
    Must admit that I wasn't expecting that ending but might have known that you'd give it a twist! Cos you usually do!
    Maggie X

    Nuts in May

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  23. Anonymous19 March 2011 at 19:57

    Absolutely stupendous :)

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  24. Spiky Zora Jones19 March 2011 at 21:44

    I commented her yesterday and it was eaten up by the blog-monster.
    :(

    it;s true huh...a horse has to be swift and an overweight jockey with a nick-name like...Big Jim is even worse. hehehe.

    fab sweetie, as always. xxx

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  25. Sandra20 March 2011 at 04:26

    At least he had a good excuse! Mine is bad knees!

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  26. Lorraine20 March 2011 at 18:59

    I wish I was a s good as you at doing something like that is so few words. Poor horse. It happens too much too.

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  27. secret agent woman21 March 2011 at 01:37

    I was close - I was picturing a greyhound!

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