Friday, 29 October 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #139 Accident.....



Her whole being screamed "NO"!


as she watched the rescue team take her husband from the wrecked car.


He was still alive, she heard someone shout.


She hovered as close as she could get, then heard someone say


"Too late, she's gone"


as she turned to see her broken body being lifted into the ambulance.



Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.
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35 comments:

  1. Connie T.29 October 2010 at 08:13

    I like this 55 a lot. I will write one. I have not done one for a while, so off I go to do it.

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  2. Valerie29 October 2010 at 09:03

    You excelled yourself with this one, I love it. You've just decided me on which story to post next, or at least quite soon.

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  3. anthonynorth29 October 2010 at 09:07

    Great twist. Excellent.

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  4. MorningAJ29 October 2010 at 09:07

    That's lovely but very sad.
    Very well written.

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  5. Hootin Anni29 October 2010 at 10:09

    Sad!!!! But great work.

    Artsy-Fartsy is my Friday Post Just scroll down below the 'artsy' part. hehehehehe

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  6. tony29 October 2010 at 10:54

    Sad Words: Great Writing.

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  7. Grandpa29 October 2010 at 11:41

    I'm not sure if I got this one - the hubby has been 2 xing her right?

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  8. Brian Miller29 October 2010 at 12:07

    oh no! gotta be a scary moment looking down at your dead self..nice 55.

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  9. snowelf29 October 2010 at 15:01

    oooo, spooky!

    --snow

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  10. Akelamalu29 October 2010 at 15:57

    Oh good luck Connie, I'll pop by to read it.

    I'm glad to be of inspiration to you Valerie, glad you liked it.

    Why thankyou Anthony :)

    Yes it is a little sad, glad you enjoyed it AJ

    Cheers Hootin'Anni :)

    Thanks Tony :)

    No Grandpa, they were in an accident together and she died he didn't.

    I think OOB experiences must be very scary Brian!

    Well it is Halloween weekend Snow x

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  11. Empress Bee (of the high sea)29 October 2010 at 15:58

    oh no, she's gone? poor little thing...

    hugs, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxo

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  12. Ron29 October 2010 at 16:00

    OMG, this totally surprised me at the end!

    EXCELLENT twist, m'dear! Never saw it coming!

    BRAVA!

    Have a great weekend!

    X

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  13. aims29 October 2010 at 17:11

    Something I always dread.

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  14. secret agent woman29 October 2010 at 17:15

    The poor husband.

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  15. Bubba29 October 2010 at 17:22

    "I see dead people."

    Creepy 55, Akelamalu!

    Happy Halloween!

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  16. Cloudia29 October 2010 at 20:00

    Chilling, Ake!



    Aloha from Honolulu

    Comfort Spiral

    ><}}(°>

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  17. G-Man29 October 2010 at 20:51

    Google the song DOA by Bloodrock!

    Grusomely delicious Ake..
    Loved your 55.
    Thank you so much for playing today, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  18. PattiKen29 October 2010 at 20:58

    This is really chilling. It would make a great beginning for a longer story.

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  19. Maggie May29 October 2010 at 22:44

    That was sad but strangely, I guessed the ending. I don't usually manage to do that with your stories.
    Maggie X

    Nuts in May

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  20. Spiky Zora Jones30 October 2010 at 01:33

    Now that's a Halloween story...BOO!!!

    I like it a lot...I'm gonna tellit tonight when we're carving jack-o lanterns. :)

    honey...I've been trying to get into your blog. but it stops me and locks up. I tried again before leaving for home...and on the second try...I'm in. the NET is wacky lately.

    have a great weekend. xxx

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  21. lettuce30 October 2010 at 10:40

    oh really clever!

    have a great weekend

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  22. Akelamalu30 October 2010 at 11:57

    Yes, she's gone Bee :(

    I love it when the twist works Ron, thanks m'dear. x

    I dread it too Aims

    He's got to live with what happened sadly SAW :(

    You got it Eric

    Indeed it is Cloudia

    Glad you liked it G-man

    It could be expanded for sure Pattiken

    Sorry the twist didn't work for you this week Maggie but I'm glad you enjoyed it anyway.

    I'm sorry you've having problems getting on my blog Spiky. Hope the story goes down well tonight.

    Why thankyou Lettuce x

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  23. Jo Beaufoix30 October 2010 at 12:53

    Oh that was a spine chilling one lovely. (Hope you're ok. Sorry it's been a while. x)

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  24. hope30 October 2010 at 16:52

    Okay, you win the spooky prize! ;0

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  25. Charlene Amsden30 October 2010 at 19:25

    Very, very well done! Excellent story.

    I totally forgot my 55 this week -- not surprising since I had so much trouble keeping the days straight!

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  26. Travis Cody30 October 2010 at 20:21

    Very sad.

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  27. Jannie Funster31 October 2010 at 02:10

    Wow, you just never know, do you. Your number could be up any time.

    Enjoy life and the ones we love while we have them.

    xo

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  28. Susan at Stony River31 October 2010 at 02:27

    Oh wow -- how excellent! (in a chilling sort of way --) I always love your 55s.

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  29. Annie31 October 2010 at 10:35

    oooo...goosepimples!

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  30. Akelamalu31 October 2010 at 16:02

    Thanks Jo and it's good to see you. :)

    Why thankyou Hope :)

    LOL I can understand how you forgot your 55 Quilly with the mix up!

    Yes it is sad Trav

    You got it, exactly Jannie

    Aw thanks Susan, how kind. x

    It is a goosepimply story isn't it Annie

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  31. Linda31 October 2010 at 17:31

    Perfect for the Halloween season - this one gave me a shiver!

    Happy Halloween, m'dear!

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  32. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall31 October 2010 at 19:50

    smart 55.
    keep it up.

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  33. Pat1 November 2010 at 17:13

    Ominous and sinister story--I love it. I like the big spzces between yhe lines--It adds to the suspense!

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  34. Pat1 November 2010 at 17:14

    OOps...Two typos in my comment! The second sentence should say: I like the big spaces between the lines...

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  35. Akelamalu7 November 2010 at 12:40

    Cheers Linda :)

    Thanks Jingle :)

    I guessed what you meant Pat, glad you enjoyed it.

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