Friday, 20 April 2012

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #198 Brave.....






The tension was unbearable,

standing in a slowly diminishing line.

Others wending their way back, having completed their mission.

Some smiling, some grimacing, one thing in common.

He stood stonefaced, giving nothing away, shaking inside.

He was in the army, he couldn't run

but he was terrified of needles and had to have his shots.




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17 comments:

  1. Melanie20 April 2012 at 08:12

    Can you blame him? Those tiny little needles are like little demons waiting to.stab you...right?:)

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  2. Commander Zaius20 April 2012 at 08:17

    Been there, done that, and it was just like you described.

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  3. MorningAJ20 April 2012 at 09:23

    I agree. I'm not sure that I'd like to face the other things he'll have to do in the army - but I hate needles!

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  4. Shrinky20 April 2012 at 09:33

    Ha! Reminds me of when my hubby-to-be fainted, when we went to get our jabs for our honeymoon destination!

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  5. Akelamalu20 April 2012 at 11:10

    Needles don't bother me Melanie but my eldest son faints at the thought! LOL

    I can imagine Beach ;)

    I agree AJ he's got far worse things to face!

    LOL but he went through with it Shrinky - and the vacinations too! ;)

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  6. Flowerpot20 April 2012 at 11:45

    brilliant, I know lots of men like that!!

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  7. Anonymous20 April 2012 at 11:53

    "shots" like it. Not a fan of needles myself!

    CJ x

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  8. Akelamalu20 April 2012 at 12:24

    Me too Flowerpot LOL

    I really don't mind needles CJ

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  9. Daryl20 April 2012 at 13:47

    Good one .. I hope he got a lolly or a sticker for being brave ;)

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  10. Valerie20 April 2012 at 14:11

    I should have been in the queue with him, we could have suffered together...lol.

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  11. Empress Bee (of the high sea)20 April 2012 at 14:16

    oh too funny!

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoox

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  12. Ron20 April 2012 at 16:27

    "He was in the army, he couldn't run

    but he was terrified of needles and had to have his shot"

    HA! Excellent finish!

    It's funny because I'm not fond of getting an injection, but I don't mind having my blood drawn. Isn't that weird?

    Have a great weekend, m'dear!

    X

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  13. Akelamalu20 April 2012 at 16:40

    I'm sure he did Daryl ;)

    You don't like needles either eh Valerie :)

    Thanks Bee

    Indeed Dumdad!


    That is rather strange Ron, cos both involve needles!

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  14. Maude Lynn21 April 2012 at 02:30

    Poor guy!

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  15. Maggie May22 April 2012 at 16:16

    Oh.... get a grip, man!!!! LOL!
    Maggie X

    Nuts in May

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  16. Secret Agent Woman22 April 2012 at 23:52

    And I am right there with him!

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  17. Secret Agent Woman22 April 2012 at 23:52

    And I am right there with him!

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