Friday, 9 September 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #176 Alone...






The baby clung to his dead mother.   

Surrounded by the mutilated bodies of his family,

hacked, dismembered, bloody.

The gang had come at dawn with guns and machetes, sparing none.

He lay silently, they hadn't seen him, he was spared.

Much later......

the ranger picked up the orphaned gorilla and put him in the truck.




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29 comments:

  1. Valerie9 September 2011 at 08:27

    Well thought out.
    I hate violence of any kind, yet the world seems full of it.

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  2. Michelle9 September 2011 at 08:35

    That was excellent. I started out thinking war (coming from Mimi's via blogblast for Peace too!) and then the twist.

    Perfect. :-)

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  3. A Daft Scots Lass9 September 2011 at 09:46

    Very well written!

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  4. Kirstin9 September 2011 at 10:46

    Brilliant mini story (and sad :( )

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  5. G-Man9 September 2011 at 12:18

    A story I'm sure that was repeated MANY times and still goes on.
    Excellent 55 Ake...
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  6. G-Man9 September 2011 at 12:21

    ....Did you forget to stop by?

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  7. Daydreamer9 September 2011 at 13:10

    Isn't that dreadful. We humans aren't at all civillised, even now.

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  8. Melanie9 September 2011 at 14:46

    So sad...well written

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  9. Linda9 September 2011 at 15:05

    Indeed well written but definitely very sad.

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  10. Akelamalu9 September 2011 at 15:19

    I agree with you Valerie :(

    Thanks Michelle :)

    Cheers Scot's Lass x

    Thankyou Kirstin

    I know and it's so sad G-man. I didn't forget to visit you hon, I'm just late today. x

    You're right, there are some humans that shouldn't be allowed to call themselves that Daydreamertoo.

    Thanks Melanie

    Very sad, but unfortunately it does happen Linda. Thanks hon. x

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  11. Ron9 September 2011 at 16:08

    OMG...this ripped my heart out.

    And like you shared...it's sad, but unfortunately it DOES happen.

    So, thank you for sharing this, m'dear.

    Brilliantly expressed.

    Have a wonderful weekend......X

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  12. Akelamalu9 September 2011 at 16:11

    Reports of it happening ripped my heart out too Ron. x

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  13. Empress Bee (of the high sea)9 September 2011 at 17:03

    oh my word! how awful for the poor little thing! what a trauma!

    hugs, bee
    xoxoxoxoox

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  14. Brian Miller9 September 2011 at 18:01

    dang...thanks for shedding light on this atrocity...ugh. nicely penned...

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  15. Travis Cody10 September 2011 at 01:38

    That's so sad.

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  16. secret agent woman10 September 2011 at 01:58

    So very sad what people will do to to other living creatures, human and non-human.

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  17. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry10 September 2011 at 03:04

    love it.

    glad that the baby survived.

    :)

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  18. A Daft Scots Lass10 September 2011 at 09:04

    you have an award!!!

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  19. Commander Zaius10 September 2011 at 12:39

    Great job!

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  20. Akelamalu10 September 2011 at 12:44

    The saddest thing is it actually happens Bee :(

    Thanks Brian

    Yes it is Trav

    Unbelievable isn't it SAW. :(

    Me too Morning

    Thanks Scots Lass

    Cheers Beach

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  21. gautami tripathy10 September 2011 at 13:23

    Sad. But glad that the baby survived..

    noting it all down

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  22. Anonymous10 September 2011 at 16:50

    On top form. Again!

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  23. Alice10 September 2011 at 17:22

    hi, here is a crumb trail to my new 'space'

    luv 'alice' (fff)

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  24. Maude Lynn10 September 2011 at 17:55

    That is so sad!

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  25. snowelf11 September 2011 at 16:45

    Poor baby monkey, :( But hopefully he is placed somewhere where he is adopted and loved and happy. ;) Excellent 55. Really really good this week! :)

    --snow

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  26. Akelamalu12 September 2011 at 17:46

    I'm glad the baby survived too gautami

    Why thankyou Dumdad

    Thanks Alice

    I know Mama Zen, but it happens apparently. :(

    Thankyou Snow,I'm sure he was looked after.

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  27. Lorraine13 September 2011 at 08:40

    shocking, heart wrenching and so much said in so few words. The twist at the end makes it no less tragic. Yet another incredible piece of writing.

    You should put them all together in a book.

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  28. MorningAJ13 September 2011 at 12:49

    That's really good. So few people think about the great apes and the horrors that they undergo in the wild. (not that I'm suggesting we lock them up in zoos either.)
    Great 55.

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  29. Akelamalu16 September 2011 at 18:51

    Thankyou for your kind words Lorraine, it's so sad that this actually happens.

    Thanks AJ, the great apes aren't safe anywhere these days.

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