Friday, 22 April 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #161 The Climb....


"It's a long way up, he said, but we need water so we have no choice."


"I'll come with you" she said.


They had almost reached the top when he tripped, managing to drag her down and banging his head quite badly.


"Where's the vinegar and brown paper Jill?" said Jack, when they got home.




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26 comments:

  1. MorningAJ22 April 2011 at 07:59

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  2. MorningAJ22 April 2011 at 08:02

    Oh I like that! You know I did something similar with Cinderella recently? I didn't do it quite so succinctly though!
    Well done.


    (I hope the link works this time - excuse the previous deletion.)

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  3. Anonymous22 April 2011 at 08:20

    WOOT!!! I love this. Very well done :) You are so good at this.

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  4. Valerie22 April 2011 at 08:22

    Yes! Brilliant, and for once I got it before the last line. I must try having more early nights!!

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  5. anthonynorth22 April 2011 at 10:14

    An excellent retelling. Enjoyed it.

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  6. Commander Zaius22 April 2011 at 10:14

    Great story!

    Always wondered about the true nature of that relationship.

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  7. Brian Miller22 April 2011 at 11:41

    ha. nice rewrite...darn busted crowns...

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  8. Anonymous22 April 2011 at 11:45

    Another crowning glory from you!

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  9. Sandi McBride22 April 2011 at 12:55

    Your ability to concentrate must be amazing! Don't know that I could consistantly come up with such nuggets of gold as these yet you come thru everytime!
    hugs
    Sandi
    ps
    longing to be there for the wedding!!!

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  10. G-Man22 April 2011 at 13:26

    So this was a true story?
    Ha! I knew it!
    Loved your 55 My Friend.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Easter!!! Galen...;-)

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  11. Empress Bee (of the high sea)22 April 2011 at 13:37

    good one!

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxooxox

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  12. Ron22 April 2011 at 15:34

    Applause...applause....applause!

    You're cleverness astounds me!

    Brava! I give you 10 big stars for this!

    Have a lovely weekend, m'dear!

    X

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  13. hope22 April 2011 at 17:28

    Uh-huh. Trip the woman up and then blame her for their lack of goods. Maybe she doesn't know Jack. ;)

    Fun one!

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  14. Linda22 April 2011 at 17:39

    Very well done! As always of course!

    Have a lovely Easter weekend enjoying your beautiful garden!

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  15. secret agent woman23 April 2011 at 02:47

    Vinegar and brown paper?

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  16. Gledwood23 April 2011 at 02:48

    isn't vinegar and brown paper used for cleaning a window? ... or is that newspaper?

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  17. Travis Cody23 April 2011 at 02:55

    Great take on Jack and Jill!

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  18. Akelamalu23 April 2011 at 09:58

    The link doesn't work AJ but I can search through your posts to find it so no worries.

    Glad you enjoyed it Thom and thanks. x

    You must be getting used to my writing Valerie ;)

    Thankyou Anthony :)

    Cheers Beach Bum, I think they were just good friends. ;)

    Glad you liked it Brian

    Haha like the pun and the praise Dumdad ;)

    Aw thanks Sandi. I'll be watching the wedding on the TV,don't fancy the crowds in London.

    Maybe based on a true story G, you never know. ;)

    Thanks Bee x

    So pleased you enjoyed it Ron xx

    Typical man eh Hope? ;)

    Hope you have a lovely weekend too Linda and thanks. x

    Yeah, as in the nursery rhyme SAW?

    That's newspaper Gleds LOL

    Ah you got it Trav :)

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  19. Maggie May23 April 2011 at 20:22

    This was one occasion when I GUESSED the ending. Yhay!
    Happy Easter.
    maggie X

    Nuts in May

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  20. Dianne24 April 2011 at 03:09

    I knew at the first line it would be Jack and Jill
    with a twist of course
    well done

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  21. Spiky Zora Jones24 April 2011 at 08:29

    akelamalu: ahahahaha...hehehe. I do stuff like that without banging my head. :) I love how you tell a story.

    Loved the story honey. hehehe.
    Hope your Easter is starting wonderfully. HAPPY EASTER. :)

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  22. Julia Phillips Smith24 April 2011 at 16:36

    LOL! A fresh spin - you totally had me until the vinegar and brown paper part.

    Happy Easter, Akelamalu!

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  23. G-Man24 April 2011 at 19:30

    Pearlie Mae...
    Happy Easter!!!

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  24. Shanae Branham26 April 2011 at 01:26

    Very interesting 55. I am glad I finally had the time to come over and see yours. Cheers.

    Click here to check my 55 out

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  25. Charlene Amsden26 April 2011 at 05:12

    I saw this one coming as soon as he tripped. That Jack is so clumsy!

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  26. Mimi Lenox26 April 2011 at 14:33

    I am never ever ever able to guess what you're going to say. And THAT is what makes it brilliant.
    Loved this one.
    You are the Queen of 55.

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