Friday, 7 January 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #147 Bedlam......


He dreaded this moment.

He knew what would happen.

The surge, as they found the entrance unblocked.

It was dangerous.

He wished there was another way to do it,

but there wasn't.

He had to unlock the doors

and watch as the hoard rushed in.

It was always Bedlam on first day of the sales.


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27 comments:

  1. Valerie7 January 2011 at 09:30

    Oooo I'm getting better at guessing... it was the word surge that provided the clue. Very good 55.

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  2. MorningAJ7 January 2011 at 10:50

    Oh that's good. And it's why I never go shopping in January!

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  3. anthonynorth7 January 2011 at 11:14

    Ahhh! Sales. Scary times :-)

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  4. Empress Bee (of the high sea)7 January 2011 at 12:02

    oh that's the truth!

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxo

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  5. tony7 January 2011 at 13:09

    It's A Jungle Out There!

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  6. clean and crazy7 January 2011 at 13:18

    yeah and you should see black friday in the states

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  7. Anonymous7 January 2011 at 14:43

    Brilliant! A reason why I avoid the sales - bedlum isn't my idea of a good time!!

    CJ xx

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  8. Ron7 January 2011 at 16:40

    Oh, what a grrrreat Flash 55, Akelamalu!

    You had me wondering all the way what the ending was going to be!!!!

    BRILLIANT!

    And one that I (being in retail) can so identify with. There's nothing as scary as the first day of a big sale!!!

    Have a great weekend, m'dear!

    X

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  9. gautami tripathy7 January 2011 at 16:55

    Sales! I avoid those!

    Here is mine:
    curtain of pebbled path

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  10. Akelamalu7 January 2011 at 16:59

    Aha I think you've been there Valerie! ;)

    Me neither AJ!

    Yes they are Anthony :0

    Indeedy Bee!

    It certainly is Tony!

    I can imagine Clean&Crazy :)

    Mine neither CrystalJigsaw!

    I really thought you might guess this one Ron being in the business. :)

    Me too guatami!

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  11. Monkey Man7 January 2011 at 18:14

    I love the dark and sinister start that explodes into day to day reality. Excellent 55.

    My 55 is HERE .

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  12. moondustwriter7 January 2011 at 18:40

    Very clever - day after a holiday is Bedlam

    great 55

    smiles

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  13. cheshire wife7 January 2011 at 20:26

    We did it once and never again!

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  14. joanna7 January 2011 at 21:37

    So True -- the day the morning sales start, always amazed me -- to watch the frenzy from a safe distance. When I was a young one, I remember it was the crushing pushing moment when the doors were being opened that a few poor souls lost their lives being pushed through the plate glass doors, Then they went to tempered glass,

    nice 55er,,,

    cheers,
    joanny

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  15. Charlene Amsden7 January 2011 at 22:46

    Yeah, and this behavior is why I think mankind is devolving rather than evolving.

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  16. Spiky Zora Jones7 January 2011 at 23:00

    akelamalu: I saw some of those sales surges. hehehe.

    you had it right all the way. hehehe.

    have a fabulous weekend sweetie. xxx

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  17. g-man8 January 2011 at 00:59

    Fools rush in, where Angels fear to tread.
    Loved your post-holiday post!
    I hope that you escaped unscathed!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  18. Julia Phillips Smith8 January 2011 at 02:33

    LOL! My mom got caught in one of those when she was a department manager at a store in the 80's. She was actually scared for a few moments. She stood in front of a merchandise display at the top of an escalator, and yelled at the mob to "Go around! Go around!"

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  19. Akelamalu8 January 2011 at 11:16

    Why thankyou Monkey Man that's exactly the effect I was aiming for. :)

    It definitely is Moondustwriter

    I've never done it, too dangerous for me CheshireWife

    At least it's not 'as' dangerous now with the tempered glass Joanny

    You're right Quilly

    Thanks Spiky x

    I don't go to the sales on the first day G-man, I value my life too much. ;)

    I can imagine your Mom's fear being caught up in that mayhem Julia :0

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  20. Linda8 January 2011 at 22:59

    Yep, and the reason I never going shopping if it can be at all avoided!

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  21. secret agent woman8 January 2011 at 23:11

    I do not envy those in retail.

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  22. secret agent woman8 January 2011 at 23:11

    I do not envy those in retail.

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  23. Travis Cody9 January 2011 at 02:54

    What some will endure for a bargain.

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  24. Akelamalu9 January 2011 at 16:02

    I quite enjoy shopping Linda but I certainly wouldn't go to the first day of the sales! LOL

    Me neither SAW

    I know, they're crazy Trav!

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  25. Maggie May9 January 2011 at 16:24

    No way would I race to the sales like that!
    Maggie X

    Nuts in May

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  26. Dianne9 January 2011 at 17:14

    you really did capture the mood of a typical sale

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  27. Anonymous10 January 2011 at 18:17

    Haha--your last line made me laugh. Thanks for the chuckle. I can just imagine someone saying that!
    Have a great week. Cheers!

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