Friday, 22 October 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 138 Gotcha...


He sat watching, waiting.


He'd made a mental note of how long they'd been there.


There were four of them, he'd get them before they knew what had happened.


Checking his watch, he moved quickly.


He only had a couple of minutes to


slap parking tickets on the cars that had run out of time.




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31 comments:

  1. Good one. I think they slap ticket on them before they expire.

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  2. Clever one, this. I was expecting a more gruesome scene...you got me there!

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  3. Another surprise ending, you're so good at this. I was on tenterhooks wondering what was going to happen ... smiles.

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  4. i think he left me a few notes before...under my windshield wiper...

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  5. They really do issue those tickets quickly, don't they? Great 55!

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  6. I don't know how you do it, but your endings ALWAYS get me!!!

    "slap parking tickets on the cars that had run out of time."

    BRILLIANT!

    And I'll be thinking of this post the next time I see a meter maid giving a ticket - HA!

    Have a great weekend, m' dear!

    X

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  7. So cleverly done .. I was suspecting he was an exterminator ...

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  8. As far as revenue-generating schemes go (and that's EXACTLY what this is, make no mistake), parking tickets are even more egregious than speeding tickets.

    At least with speeding tickets there's a modicum of moral authority because somebody could get in a wreck. Who's life is endangered if somebody has their car parked five minutes longer?

    Funny 55, Akelamalu!

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  9. I thought they had to wait until they expired Connie?

    Hehe, yes horror fiction Anthony LOL

    Ah the twist worked Grandpa :)

    Thanks Valerie I'm glad you enjoyed it.

    I've never had a parking ticket AJ, thankfully. ;)

    Ah you've been caught then Brian? :(

    They do indeed Belinda!

    Haha got you again eh Ron? Thanks hon. x

    Got you too eh Daryl?

    I so agree with you Eric!

    Cheers Casdok :)

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  10. I knew the bastards layed in wait for you!
    Loved this Ake...
    Excellent 55 My Dear.
    You Rock The Empire!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...g

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  11. I swear they write the tickets before the meter expires and slap them on at the exact same time the red flag snaps up.

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  12. That is typical, isn't it. getting ready to pounce.
    Maggie X

    Nuts in May

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  13. I can SO see a parking officer doing this sort of thing! I swear they get some evil pleasure out of writing tickets!

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  14. No doubt, one of those cars is mine!

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  15. LOL...Oh I've met that dude before as well. Only once mind you and once was enough. Very well done. Have a great Friday :)

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  16. I got threatened with a ticket once for putting coins in an expired meter...because it wasn't mine. :)

    Seems being nice can cost you, unless you can explain kindness to strangers. Happy weekend!

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  17. You never, never, never disappoint!! :)

    I also just got done soaking in all of your pics from your trip... I love that staircase...so gorgeous. Glad you had such a great time!!

    Also I wish you well on being able to extend your membership!! Hopefully all goes well.

    --snow

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  18. that basta@d. They must be on commission somehow, or just plain mean!

    awesome 55.

    xo

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  19. akelamalu: Ah hahaha. I once ran out of a restaurant in Glendale to put money in the parking meter so I wouldn;t geta ticket and a lady was there waiting for it to click to a Red...violation.

    whew...I wanted to stick my tongue out at her. but I didn't. I'm an adult...sort of. :)

    good 55 babe. xxx

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  20. so they do that sort of thing in the UK too, they are the most hated breed of workers around, sometimes I pop money in some ones meter just because....

    nice 55er,

    cheers,
    joanny
    http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

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  21. Hunting is hunting :)



    Aloha from Hawaii, Dear Ake

    Comfort Spiral

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  22. Laying in wait is their game G-man

    I think you're right Quilly!

    Yes typical Maggie!

    I agree Linda some of them are sadistic. :(

    Oh you've been caught eh MamaZen?

    Once is more than enough Thom and Cheshire Wife!

    That's terrible Hope, being threatened with a ticket for helping someone! :0

    Thanks Snowelf and I'm pleased you enjoyed all the photos.


    Sometimes I wonder if they ARE on commission Jannie.


    Oh you should have stuck your tongue out at her Spiky. I'm glad you got there before she got you! ;)


    Yep, they do it here too Joanny. That's so good of you helping other people defy the traffic wardens. :)

    But it's so mean Cloudia!

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  23. those parking people are out in force in my town, one minute late and seventy bucks! the city has no money so the cops are all trying to bring it in!

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxo

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  24. I do believe the same man is stalking me.

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  25. I believe I've encountered that very man!

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  27. That's the annoying part Bee, it's just a money making exercise isn't it? :(

    You're probably right KB


    I think they're clones SAW!

    OKey Dokey Scots Lass :)

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