Charlie was very superstitious.
No new shoes on the table or broken mirrors for him.
The thought of putting an umbrella up in the house
or not greeting a magpie horrified him.
Hence his dismay when a black cat ran across his path
as he made his getaway from the bank job he'd just pulled.
Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.
great twist
ReplyDeleteAs ever - a twist in the tail! Hmmmm now I must have a think!
ReplyDeleteOh Oh I don't like where this is headed. lol
ReplyDeleteI have succumbed! (sp????)
ReplyDelete:-)
ReplyDeleteoooer!
I thought black cats were lucky?
ReplyDeleteAnother brilliant gem. Love the twist at the end.
ReplyDeleteLove your new theme my friend. It's real nice. And your story is just wonderful. :) Makes me think of the Stevie Wonder song Superstition :) So clever. :)
ReplyDeleteGood one!
ReplyDeleteuh oh, he's toast! ha ha ha
ReplyDeletesmiles, bee
xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
I think it is good luck to own a black cat since we have one. Ha!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the twist at the end and in only 55 words. You are talented.
Won't be any black cats in prison!
ReplyDeleteBRAVA, Akelamalu!
ReplyDeleteYou are soooooooooooo fabulous with these!
That ending was BRILLIANT!
Applause, applause, applause!
Have a great weekend, m'dear!
X
That's funny!
ReplyDeleteI've written again btw. That's two in two months....maybe eventually I'll get back there....
Nice one. He could do with a little bad luck, I think.
ReplyDeleteKeep driving Charlie....
ReplyDeleteOnly Petrol stops.!!
Loved it Pearlie...You Rock!
Excellent 55 My Talented Friend.
Thanks for your love and support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
cute and fun!
ReplyDeleteOh dear, I wonder what sort of bad luck befell the guy? Excellent twist as always!
ReplyDeleteGreat twist at the end!
ReplyDeleteYou do it every time!!! I love your 55's the best ;)
ReplyDeleteGreeting a magpie? That's one I've never heard of. I wonder if I should start saying hello to the blackbirds.
ReplyDeleteOh that's clever! What a great idea. Of course - if you had another 55 words you could discuss that in some parts of the UK the luck depends on which way the cat was going! (left to right is good - right to left is bad....)
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work
Thanks Scots Lass
ReplyDeleteCheers Mrs N and I'm so glad you've joined in. :)
Neither did Charlie Lady's Life ;)
Ooooer indeed Gleds ;)
Not in Charlie's case Jinksy LOL
Why thankyou Valerie :)
So glad you like the new template and the 55 Thom x
Cheers Dumdad :)
He sure is Bee LOL
Your black cat is lucky for you Pam. Glad you like it. :)
Haha, no there won't Buff!
Thankyou Ron, so pleased you enjoyed it. x
Ah you're back Sally :)
I think he's about to get some Anthony LOL
My pleasure G-man x
Thanks Jingle :)
A stretch in prison I think Linda LOL
Cheers Mama Zen :)
Why thankyou kindly Eternally Distracted :)
You could try SAW ;)
Pleased you enjoyed it Morning AJ :)
Superstitious bank robber...love it!
ReplyDeleteYou realize that you keep surprising us, even when we're already expecting a twist. It's no small feat.
ReplyDeleteAs always - I love it! You really should make a book of these!
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