Friday, 15 August 2008

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #39 Round in Circles.....

Round In Circles


Round and round in a circle,
Moving slowly, pursuing each other.
Some joining, others leaving.
An array of colours, most different, some alike, diverse.
Wondering where they're from,
Where they've been,
Where they're going.
Some standing, some lying down,
Some smart, mostly jaded.
Being met and disappearing.
I'm sitting watching -
luggage on an airport carousel.


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27 comments:

  1. Pam15 August 2008 at 08:13

    i love this 55! except i find most on the carousels here are black LOL but i do love seeing the colorful ones.

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  2. Mojo15 August 2008 at 11:45

    Nicely played! You think you know where thing's are going until you find "some lying down", then you wonder... until the last. Well done!
    - Mojo

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  3. snowelf15 August 2008 at 12:10

    This is wonderful!! I had NO idea. Where do you come up with your inspiration?! (And adding to the color, my luggage is purple and it's super easy to spot.)

    Happy Friday!! :)

    --snow

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  4. buffalodick15 August 2008 at 12:26

    I have long believed there must be a better way than that damn carosel...

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  5. G-Man15 August 2008 at 12:38

    Oh haven't we all been there?
    Great twist as always Ake, you are such a skillful writer. I'm so glad that Nick is coming along OK!
    Have a Great Week-End....G

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  6. Mona15 August 2008 at 13:54

    Nice twist :) I did not see that coming!

    My head reels when I watch the conveyor belt move that way!

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  7. RiverPoet15 August 2008 at 13:55

    I was thinking "Olympic Village" and you were thinking "airport." Nice! Ah, the power of the imagery in poetry.

    Peace - D

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  8. GEWELS15 August 2008 at 14:11

    You are always so clever at these.

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  9. Sandi McBride15 August 2008 at 15:18

    Very well done! I was trying to figure out what it was that you were describing...absolutely perfect!
    hugs
    Sandi

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  10. Flowerpot15 August 2008 at 17:20

    well done Ak. You have a real knack for this!

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  11. Linda15 August 2008 at 17:41

    The last time I was at the airport with my youngest, I remember thinking that luggage had gotten pretty dull as most of it was dark colors and nondescript. But I still love this poem and am totally impressed at your ability to write exactly 55 words!

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  12. Akelamalu15 August 2008 at 19:25

    I'm always intrigued by the different luggage Ciara, especially the ones full of labels!

    Thanks Mojo I'm so pleased you liked it. :)

    Snowelf our luggage is bright YELLOW with a red strap around with our name on it - can't miss it and a great talking point!

    There probably is Buff, but I have inside information that the guys that unload the luggage from a plane are on a time bonus to get the luggage from the plane to the carousel so they just throw one bag on then sit back and you have to wait!


    Aw thanks g-man on both counts. x


    Oh yes Missy if only luggage could tell a tale!


    All the luggage blends into one doesn't it Mona, unless it's bright yellow like mine!


    I never though Olympics at all Riverpoet but now you mention it I can see it!


    Thanks Gewels xx


    Oh you're very kind Sandi thankyou. xx

    Cheers Flowerpot :)


    I saw some wonderful coloured luggage on this last holiday Linda, I thought mine was bright but some certainly outshone it!

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  13. Unknown15 August 2008 at 21:05

    Wow! Sounds mesmerizing to me!

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  14. San15 August 2008 at 22:45

    You had me fooled, Pearl. Evocative piece.

    "Being met and disappearing." I believe that's my favorite line.

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  15. Jo Beaufoix16 August 2008 at 00:03

    I loved that Akela. Catching up as usual. Have a fab time with lovely Queenie by the way. :D

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  16. Donnetta16 August 2008 at 02:43

    I HATE picking up the luggage! Mine always has colored yarn on the handle. Trick I learned from mother in law. Very clever, "A". Surprised me.
    Donnetta

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  17. Deb16 August 2008 at 03:31

    Well done. I thought at first that you were describing a carousel. I had an 'AH HA' moment when I got to the end. Very clever!

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  18. storyteller16 August 2008 at 03:45

    Clever piece … and as you so often do … surprised me at the end ;--)
    Hugs and blessings,

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  19. KB16 August 2008 at 06:18

    You surprised me at the end. I love surprises and this 55.

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  20. Akelamalu16 August 2008 at 11:16

    Thanks Nick :)

    I'm so please you enjoyed it San :)

    I'll do my best Jo and thanks. x

    There's always the thought that your case will be missing, isn't there Donnetta? :(

    Ah you're quick Deb :)

    I'm happy it had the element of surprise Storyteller :)

    Cheers KB :)

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  21. Travis Cody16 August 2008 at 19:26

    That made me LOL! It was totally unexpected. I was thinking butterflies or fireflies or something.

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  22. Akelamalu17 August 2008 at 08:05

    LOL I'm always thrilled when folk are surprised at the end Trav, that's exactly what I aim for. :)

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  23. LisaPizza17 August 2008 at 11:14

    I am ready to watch the vacation slide show and hear the antidotes about the rigors of travel post-9/11 and the complaints about diminishing services on airplanes. Thanks for taking me to one of my favorite places ~ to the airport!

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  24. Anonymous18 August 2008 at 02:27

    This perfectly captures the expereince of waiting for your bags to make their way to you.

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  25. Akelamalu18 August 2008 at 14:28

    You like airports Lisapizza????

    Thanks Citizen :)

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  26. Ron19 August 2008 at 01:48

    OMG, Akelamalu....this 55 is brilliant!

    I never know where your words are taking me, and then I'm ALWAYS suprised by the endings!!

    Bravo....AGAIN!

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  27. Akelamalu19 August 2008 at 10:32

    Pleased you liked it Ron x

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