Friday, 20 June 2008

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 32 Watching

Watching


She was here again, that made twice this week.

He followed her, at a discrete distance, watching her every move.


He was entranced, she was beautiful.


He would speak to her today, he was determined.


As she removed the scarf and put in her pocket he said



“I’m Security madam, have you paid for that?”


Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.





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19 comments:

  1. Pam20 June 2008 at 07:03

    wow, very clever! another good 55. mine will be self posting sposedly at midnight u.s. pacific time lol sometimes it doesn't post until after midnight :-/

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  2. x20 June 2008 at 08:54

    nice twist, ake! i like this 1. it's brilliant. hehe.

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  3. Anonymous20 June 2008 at 11:05

    Ha ha! Another good one. You have a kanck for these.

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  4. G-Man20 June 2008 at 12:11

    Was that chick Winona Ryder?
    Excellent 55 Ake, as usual!!
    Thanks for playing, and have a great week-end...G
    xox

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  5. buffalodick20 June 2008 at 12:27

    Nice twist, as usual! Enjoy your week-end!

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  6. Ron20 June 2008 at 15:08

    You ALWAYS keep me guessing until that finally punchline.?.?.?.?

    Another awesome Friday 55, Akelamalu!!

    Have great weekend, dear lady!

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  7. Linda20 June 2008 at 15:17

    You are just SO good at these - I love 'em!!

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  8. Akelamalu20 June 2008 at 17:33

    Thanks Ciara I will be over later to read yours. :)

    Glad you liked it Acey x

    How kind of you Citizen :)

    LOL possibly g-man!

    Cheers Buff< you too :)

    So glad you like them Ron x

    Aw thanks Linda :)

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  9. Akelamalu20 June 2008 at 17:33

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  10. Empress Bee (of the high sea)20 June 2008 at 17:40

    well that was a surprise ending! ha ha ha

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

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  11. Laura Jane Williams20 June 2008 at 17:42

    It is always the beautiful women that are the trouble!

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  12. Mike Golch20 June 2008 at 19:21

    Hey Love,this is a good one as always. that's my story,and i'm sticking to it.
    i hope that you have a great weekend. Big Time Hugs and God's blessing heading your way!

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  13. Mona20 June 2008 at 19:31

    Reminds me of the movie Bodyguard !

    There is still a chance of a lot to happen! I am not losing hope!
    LOL! :D

    I love to think that it was Wynona Ryder! I think she is one of the most beautiful woman around!

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  14. smarmoofus20 June 2008 at 21:31

    Wheeee! I love your twists! Nice job, akelamalu!

    -smarmoofus

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  15. the mother of this lot21 June 2008 at 01:39

    I hope these 55's aren't written from personal experience!!

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  16. Travis Cody21 June 2008 at 03:50

    Ruh roh! Crime doesn't pay!

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  17. Akelamalu21 June 2008 at 11:12

    It was a surprise to her as well Bee! LOL

    You think so GIM? :)

    Thanks Mike :)

    Ah yes, maybe she was just doing some research for a film Mona! ;)

    Glad you liked it Smarmoofus x

    No, none of them are from personal experience MOTL:)

    Not unless you get away with it Trav

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  18. la bellina mammina22 June 2008 at 09:28

    BRILLIANT Akela! One of the best!

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  19. Akelamalu22 June 2008 at 10:18

    Thanks Bella xx

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