Friday, 20 July 2012

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #200 Surprise....






He opened the door.

"Can I help you?" he enquired.

"I hope so" said the young man.

His face paled as he read the contents of the envelope that he'd been handed.

His past had come back to haunt him.

He'd never thought this would happen when he donated his sperm, twenty one years ago.




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22 comments:

  1. Jenny Woolf20 July 2012 at 09:07

    Brilliant, as usual. You have a gift for thinking up a clever plot.

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  2. Valerie20 July 2012 at 09:54

    Oh Wow! You never know what's round the corner waiting to change your life...lol.

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  3. MorningAJ20 July 2012 at 10:14

    Well, he should have thought about that shouldn't he?

    Nice 55

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  4. Flowerpot20 July 2012 at 10:40

    I can remember an elderly friend saying exactly this years ago! Blog update over at mine x

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  5. Anonymous20 July 2012 at 10:57

    Oh that's fabulous!!

    CJ x

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  6. katie eggeman20 July 2012 at 11:14

    Oops! Haunting him....It couldn't be good news!

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  7. Secret Agent Woman20 July 2012 at 14:41

    Uh oh!

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  8. Melanie20 July 2012 at 15:24

    DAMN! That's gonna leave a mark!! Excellent!!!

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  9. Ron20 July 2012 at 15:34

    Clever as usual, m'dear!

    You always get me with your surprise endings!

    Faaaabulous!

    Have a great weekend....X

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  10. Akelamalu20 July 2012 at 16:22

    Why thankyou Jenny :)

    You certainly don't Valerie!

    He was young and broke at the time AJ ;)

    Really Flowerpot? WOW!

    Thanks CJ x

    Not good news for him Bankerchick!

    Yeah SAW!

    It is indeed Melanie ;)

    Glad you enjoyed it Ron x

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  11. Maude Lynn20 July 2012 at 17:31

    Yikes! You do the best 55s, Ake!

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  12. Bubba20 July 2012 at 19:11

    Sounds more like a random distribution than a donation. LOL!

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  13. Linc20 July 2012 at 19:49

    Surprise indeed! Very well done.

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  14. G-Man20 July 2012 at 20:40

    It all depends where the donating was done at...:-)
    Very dramatic Ake...
    But as always...Loved It!!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick ASS Week-End...G

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  15. Gledwood20 July 2012 at 22:04

    O bloody hell! That can't happen in real life, can it?

    Did you know in America you actually get paid for donating BLOOD (as well as sperm)... some poor people donate so much they end up passing out on the streets..!!

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  16. Lorraine20 July 2012 at 22:43

    where do you even get the ideas, let alone the gems you come up with - amazing

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  17. Commander Zaius20 July 2012 at 22:48

    Excellent writing!

    Yeah, that would be scary but I can understand why a kid would go looking for his sperm donor father.

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  18. Brian Miller20 July 2012 at 23:30

    oh my...i would hope not as well...uncomfortable for sure!

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  19. A Lady's Life21 July 2012 at 05:29

    Oh bummer !

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  20. Akelamalu21 July 2012 at 12:41

    Why thankyou Mama Zen, how kind of you. x

    I guess it does Eric

    Thanks Linc

    That's true G-man, glad you liked it. x

    Well according to Flowerpot (above) it can Gleds! I knew about blood donors being paid in the US.

    I think I must have a warped mind Lorraine ;)

    I can understand them looking too Beach.

    A surprise certainly Brian

    Yeah Lady's Life

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  21. Dianne22 July 2012 at 12:06

    well done
    this would be a great start to a movie

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  22. Akelamalu23 July 2012 at 09:56

    Oh yes I can see how that would pan out Dianne!

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