Friday, 28 January 2011

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #149 Nuisance...



He flitted about the room, pausing every now and then to ingest some food.


He knew it irritated people, his constant to-ing and fro-ing but that was how he was.


Eventually, he knew, they would get pissed off with him and he would have to go.


Dispatched, swatted with a rolled up newspaper - dratted fly!



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27 comments:

  1. Valerie28 January 2011 at 09:22

    OMG that was great and totally unexpected.

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  2. Grandpa28 January 2011 at 09:31

    And I thought 'he' was the husband! You got me there Akelamalu...LOL

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  3. Shrinky28 January 2011 at 10:20

    Aww, poor little fly (giggle), I've never tried to see it from his prespective before! Another beaut, m'dear, well done for raising a smile.

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  4. Bubba28 January 2011 at 13:24

    (Another butterFLY has landed! LOL!)

    Nice 55, with a twist!

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  5. Daryl28 January 2011 at 13:43

    Well done .. made me giggle

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  6. Brian Miller28 January 2011 at 14:38

    buzzzzzzzzzz twack! smiles. cute 55..

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  7. anthonynorth28 January 2011 at 15:06

    So annoying aren't they. Nice one.

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  8. Empress Bee (of the high sea)28 January 2011 at 15:09

    oh that one got me! ha ha ha good one!

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxo

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  9. Ron28 January 2011 at 16:01

    OMG! OMG! OMG! that ending TOTAL surprised me!!!!

    You are soooooooooooo clever!

    Brava, m'dear! Another outstanding Flash 55! You ROCK!

    Have a wonderful weekend....X

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  10. Commander Zaius28 January 2011 at 17:02

    Excellent story! But unlike some of you other characters I felt no sympathy for the fly.

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  11. Belinda Munoz28 January 2011 at 19:31

    He had to have known it was coming.

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  12. cheshire wife28 January 2011 at 20:36

    The condemned man ate a healthy breakfast or whatever meal it was.

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  13. hope28 January 2011 at 23:15

    I love this one! Never has a fly had such character. ;)

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  14. G-Man29 January 2011 at 01:03

    Swatted and dispatched flies are the best!
    Loved your 55 Ake!
    Thanks for playing, thanks for flittering about, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  15. Akelamalu29 January 2011 at 10:58

    Thanks Valerie :)

    Haha I'm glad the twist got you Grandpa ;)

    Well flies must have feelings too eh Shrinky? ;)

    Nice pun Eric ;)

    I'm happy if you're happy Daryl x

    Precisely Brian LOL

    They are indeed Anthony

    LOL got you too eh Bee?

    Ah the surprise worked Ron. Glad you enjoyed it hon. x

    I'm with you on this BeachBum, dirty horrible things flies!

    I bet he did Belinda ;)

    I dread to think what he'd landed on Cheshire Wife! :0

    So pleased you enjoyed it Hope :)

    Yes they are G-man!

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  16. Odat29 January 2011 at 14:53

    Aha!!! Didn't expect that...very good!

    Peace

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  17. Cloudia29 January 2011 at 18:30

    You still got it!


    Aloha from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral

    ><}}(°>

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  18. Travis Cody29 January 2011 at 19:55

    Indeed. There's only so much tolerance for a fly before it gets swatted.

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  19. Charlene Amsden29 January 2011 at 21:34

    Ha! Too funny. At first I thought you were writing about a begging dog -- or my sister who loves to snatch food off other people's plates!

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  20. Maude Lynn30 January 2011 at 01:59

    Got him!

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  21. Raven30 January 2011 at 04:14

    Yes...dratted flies. Loved it.

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  22. Always Write30 January 2011 at 04:26

    Love the way you wrote about this particular pesky fly

    very nice

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  23. secret agent woman30 January 2011 at 13:14

    In a weird way, that actually made me feel sorry for flies!

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  24. Akelamalu30 January 2011 at 15:52

    Glad you enjoyed it Odat

    Cheers Cloudia x

    You're so right Trav!

    Ah the punchline got you eh Quilly? :)

    Swat! Mama Zen LOL

    Glad you liked it Raven

    Thanks Always Write, pleased you enjoyed it.

    No way SAW, you're kidding me. LOL

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  25. Linda30 January 2011 at 23:53

    Ah, I managed to guess that one this time! Very well done!

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  26. Anonymous31 January 2011 at 04:52

    I always find that the second that newspaper comes out the fly disappears - I reckon they learn to run away from certain items when they are in fly school :)

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  27. Akelamalu5 February 2011 at 11:44

    Well done Linda

    I think you're right S,D&BS LOL

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