Friday, 10 September 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #132 Rats.....


Annie heard the scratching coming from the loft.


"Rats" she thought, "from the empty house down the street".


There were no dividing walls in the roof space of her terrace of houses.


Climbing through the hatch with the bait, Annie flashed the torch,


then stared in amazement at.........


the family that had taken up residence!


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34 comments:

  1. Charlene Amsden10 September 2010 at 07:09

    One wonders how they got up there and what they used for facilities. I think I would have rather found rats! This story was scary!

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  2. A Daft Scots Lass10 September 2010 at 08:46

    I thoroughly enjoyed this.

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  3. Anonymous10 September 2010 at 08:55

    Drats...no Ben LOL Very suspenseful. I sure do hope that we might find out who it is :) Great 55. Have a wonderful Friday :)

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  4. Valerie10 September 2010 at 09:02

    Bordering on possibilities! You have a real talent for writing these 55s,

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  5. MorningAJ10 September 2010 at 10:47

    Think I'd sooner have the rats!
    Excellent 55 this week!

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  6. mrsnesbitt10 September 2010 at 13:20

    Wonderful - and probable! Have a great weekend.
    Dxx

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  7. clean and crazy10 September 2010 at 14:07

    what a clever twist

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  8. Akelamalu10 September 2010 at 14:15

    I know it is scary Quilly!

    Glad you enjoyed it Scots Lass

    Thanks Thom :)

    It definitely is a possibility Valerie :(

    Oooh I'm not so sure about that Morning AJ!

    That's the worrying thing Mrs N - the probably bit!

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  9. Akelamalu10 September 2010 at 14:15

    Thanks Clean&Crazy :)

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  10. G-Man10 September 2010 at 14:19

    Just Bigger Rats!!
    Welcome Home Ake...
    Missed you Deary..
    Excellent 55 as usual.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  11. Empress Bee (of the high sea)10 September 2010 at 14:36

    not rats, squatters!


    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxo

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  12. Akelamalu10 September 2010 at 15:23

    LOL you got it G! I missed you to hon. x

    Squatters indeed Bee!

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  13. Mike Golch10 September 2010 at 15:30

    squatters not rats.I wonder wich is worse??

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  14. anthonynorth10 September 2010 at 15:37

    And it certainly happens.
    Nice one.

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  15. Brian Miller10 September 2010 at 15:49

    oh...this one begs more than 55 words...why are they there...why are they hiding...very nice 55...

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  16. Maggie May10 September 2010 at 15:57

    She was brave going up there in the first place!
    Good twist!
    Maggie X

    Nuts in May

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  17. Ron10 September 2010 at 16:00

    OH. MY. GOD.

    That twist of an ending had me in CHILLS!

    I know I've said this before, but I have to say it again. You are BRILLIANT, Akelamalu! You're cleverness blows me away!

    BRAVA!

    Have a beautiful weekend, m'dear!

    X

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  18. Finding Pam10 September 2010 at 17:19

    I enjoyed this Flash 55. You are so great at this.

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  19. Maude Lynn10 September 2010 at 17:40

    Well, I didn't see that coming!

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  20. Akelamalu10 September 2010 at 18:39

    I'm not sure which is worse Mike

    Indeed it does Anthony!

    My guess is that they're illegals Brian, what do you think?

    She was brave Maggie, the thought of rats wouldn't have got me up a ladder to have a look! LOL

    Aw thanks Ron, I'm so pleased you enjoy my 55s. x

    Why thankyou Pam, you're very kind. x

    I so love it when a twist works Mama Zen thankyou. :)

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  21. Bubba10 September 2010 at 19:05

    Oh no! GIANT rats! (LOL!)

    A funny 55, Akelamalu!
    Have a great weekend!

    (Fact: Hawaii didn't have any rats until they arrived on cargo ships)

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  22. Dumdad10 September 2010 at 19:19

    You got me again. Brilliant!

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  23. Mona10 September 2010 at 19:52

    Wow! Human rats are even more dangerous! I hope these are friendly rats! ;)

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  24. Travis Cody11 September 2010 at 02:12

    Well!

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  25. KB11 September 2010 at 03:30

    Yikes! Where there's one rat, there's usually many more not far away.

    Have a great weekend.

    My 55 is here.

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  26. secret agent woman11 September 2010 at 05:18

    Uh oh!

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  27. lettuce11 September 2010 at 10:21

    eeek! now would that be better or worse than finding bats or wasps living there?

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  28. Akelamalu11 September 2010 at 10:49

    Rats brough the Bubonic plague to England too Eric!


    Ah, that's what I like to hear Dumdad :)


    They're desperate rats Mona I think.


    Well indeed Trav


    That's true KB, that's what's so scary!


    Uh ho SAW


    I'm not sure which is worse Lettuce!

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  29. CrystalChick11 September 2010 at 16:34

    Great FF!
    We've got a squirrel in the attic. Or maybe more than one by now. That'll teach us not to put nuts out for the little creatures, they want to move in now and get more goodies! Agrrhh.

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  30. Dianne11 September 2010 at 22:18

    in this current economy this becomes so believable
    wonderful story telling as always
    Hope sends a hug

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  31. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall11 September 2010 at 22:46

    wow,
    rats try to play like cats...
    fun 55.


    my 55


    Happy Belated Friday!

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  32. Akelamalu12 September 2010 at 12:39

    Oh squirrels can cause so much damage I hear CrystalChick - I hope that doesn't happen in your case. :(

    That is sadly true Dianne. I enjoyed the hug from Hope. x

    Yes they do Jingle

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  33. Shrinky12 September 2010 at 12:58

    Hey, don't jest - this truly DID actually once happen to me - straight up! My first ever one bedroom flat I bought - not a family, but this weirdo I barely knew, he snuck up to my loft, and took up residence in there (God knows for how long, before I discovered him)! Shudder..

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  34. Akelamalu12 September 2010 at 14:40

    OMG Shrinky that's too scary!!!

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