Friday, 4 June 2010

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #121 Eviction..



 
Push all you like but I'm staying he decided.


I know I've only lived here for a few months but this is my home and I'm staying.


You were pleased when I moved in, why do you want me out now?


He felt firm hands grip his shoulders, then heard the words........



I'ts a boy!





Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.
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35 comments:

  1. Jeff B4 June 2010 at 07:14

    You should seriously consider submitting a collection of these 55's for publication. You truly have a gift for this venue.

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  2. Bernadine4 June 2010 at 08:22

    I have to agree with Jeff on this one. I think 55 words isn't enough for a post for me. I think I'll end up with 155 or 255. :)

    Enjoy your weekend. ;)

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  3. Anonymous4 June 2010 at 09:55

    Love this. How clever my friend. You are so gifted with this. I concur with Bernadine and Jeff :) Have a wonderful Friday :)

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  4. A Daft Scots Lass4 June 2010 at 11:14

    wow this 55 was so unexpected! Well done. Its beautiful.

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  5. Linda4 June 2010 at 13:56

    You are SO clever! I love your Flash Fiction Fridays as they are always so well written!

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  6. clean and crazy4 June 2010 at 14:51

    wow, what a great 55!! i cannot be so clever, i tried but couldn't, i did have a funny picture though

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  7. Empress Bee (of the high sea)4 June 2010 at 15:34

    awww, what a sweet story this week!

    smiles, bee
    xxoxoxoxoxoxo

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  8. Valerie4 June 2010 at 15:41

    I'm impressed, this 55 has to be one of your most creative efforts.

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  9. buffalodick4 June 2010 at 16:24

    A guy spends 9 months trying to get out, and the rest of his life trying to get back in!

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  10. Ron4 June 2010 at 16:34

    You ROCK, Akelamalu!

    Truly!

    This one was pure genius!

    I LOVED IT!!!!!

    Have a wonderful weekend, m'dear!

    X

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  11. Charlene Amsden4 June 2010 at 17:05

    As usual, this is wonderful!

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  12. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall4 June 2010 at 18:09

    awesome 55.

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  13. Akelamalu4 June 2010 at 18:41

    Aw you're too kind Jeff, thankyou. x

    It's easier than you think Bernadine and thankyou m'dear. x

    Why thankyou Thom, you're so kind. :)

    So glad you liked it Gillian :)

    I'm so pleased you enjoy them Linda x

    I'm sure you could do better than me Clean&Crazy :)

    Glad you enjoyed it Bee :)

    Why thankyou for the praise Valerie :)

    Aint that the truth Buff! LOL


    Aw thanks Ron xx


    You're vert kind Quilly, I thank you. xx


    Cheers Jingle :)

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  14. Brian Miller4 June 2010 at 20:06

    nice. that was just the case with my boy...he did not want to come out...great 55.

    mine is up!

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  15. G-Man4 June 2010 at 20:29

    You really um..Delivered today :P
    I guess I've come to expect brilliance from you weekly...
    And I get it!!
    Excellent 55 Ake My Dear.
    Thanks for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  16. anthonynorth4 June 2010 at 22:47

    Some of them just don't want to leave, do they?
    Nice one :-)

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  17. secret agent woman5 June 2010 at 01:32

    Thank God they have no choice in the matter.

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  18. Spiky Zora Jones5 June 2010 at 01:53

    akelamalu: You amaze me with your wit and smarts. And your use of words...is awesome...it's like a trail...then it BANG it hit me...I cvouldn;t help but smile and giggle.
    heheheh

    later sweetie. have a fab weekend.

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  19. Travis Cody5 June 2010 at 02:44

    LOL! He'll find out soon that there's more fun stuff to do out here!

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  20. Susan at Stony River5 June 2010 at 04:49

    ROFL! Sounds like my kids!

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  21. Akelamalu5 June 2010 at 10:12

    Both mine's were the same Brian!

    LOL you're so funny G-man - just what I 'expected' from you. :)

    NO, they get too comfy Anthony!

    Quite SAW!

    Happy to make you smile Spiky :)

    But before too long he'll be wanting to get back to where he started eh Trav? ;)

    Mine too Susan LOL

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  22. tony5 June 2010 at 13:00

    Bravo! Have A Great Weekend My Friend.

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  23. MarmiteToasty5 June 2010 at 14:15

    I cant believe it....... for the first time in history I KNEW what was happening from line 1 :)

    brilliant..

    x

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  24. Maude Lynn5 June 2010 at 17:31

    What a surprise ending!

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  25. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall5 June 2010 at 18:58

    beautiful ending...
    Happy Saturday!

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  26. lettuce6 June 2010 at 08:03

    ha! i saw this one coming....

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  27. Anonymous6 June 2010 at 09:29

    Your 55's are always my favourite :0)

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  28. Flowerpot6 June 2010 at 11:52

    Brilliant - I think the idea of a 55 collection is great.

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  29. Menina6 June 2010 at 12:20

    You're really good at this! I definitely agree with the collection of 55s...

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  30. Akelamalu6 June 2010 at 15:27

    Cheers Tony :)

    You're sharp Marmie ;)

    That's the way I planned it Mama Zen, glad to hear it worked. :)

    Thanks Jingle :)

    You guessed it too eh Lettuce ?

    Why thankyou Eternally Distracted

    Cheers Flowerpot x

    Well thankyou very much Menina you're very kind.

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  31. Julia Phillips Smith6 June 2010 at 20:38

    The Queen of Twisty Endings! You shall reign forever!

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  32. Cloudia7 June 2010 at 04:23

    Jeff is right!!!!!!

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  33. nitebyrd9 June 2010 at 14:11

    Oh! What a great suprise! You really say a lot with those few words!

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  34. Akelamalu13 June 2010 at 19:01

    Why thankyou Julia :)

    And thankyou too Cloudia x

    I try Nitebyrd ;)

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  35. Misty DawnS18 June 2010 at 16:52

    LOVE this one! One of my favorites that you've done! I agree that you should make a book of these.

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