Friday, 18 September 2009

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 90 Driving.....



The wheels on his car were spinning on the icy surface.


He hated driving on ice.

Suddenly it was out of control.

He pushed his foot down hard, the car slowed.


As he ground to a halt he heard his mother's voice....


"Jimmy, time for tea now, you can play in your pedal car later".
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42 comments:

  1. Flowerpot18 September 2009 at 08:02

    you were up early Ak! another great flash story and have a good weekend!

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  2. quilly18 September 2009 at 08:13

    LOL! Well done!

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  3. mrsnesbitt18 September 2009 at 08:44

    Well you have me hooked now. I have been reading your Flash 55 contributions for some time now so indeed today I have written my first contribution!

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  4. Gloria18 September 2009 at 12:06

    Brilliant . . Flash Fiction at it's best!!!

    I'm hooked and am going to sign up to follow you.

    I'm new to blogging so hope you'll pop over sometime. I'm sure you'll find something on my blog that you'll like!!

    I'll be back to read some more. See you soon!

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  5. Gloria18 September 2009 at 12:14

    . . . and so good to find a blogger from the UK, the land of my birth!!

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  6. snowelf18 September 2009 at 13:21

    I hope your nerves are feeling better. I cannot believe the gall of that taxi driver! My friend in Canada had almost the exact same thing happen to her when a taxi pulled a u-turn from the curb in front of her as well! ugh!

    I hope things get back to normal quick for you. And tell little Jimmy to be careful on that ice! ;)

    --snow

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  7. buffalodick18 September 2009 at 14:25

    I really thought it was going to be about your accident!

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  8. Daryl18 September 2009 at 14:46

    Ah fun .. I hope Jimmy learns that when driving on ice, one needs to steer into a swerve, pumping the brakes not slamming them or else he'll end up in a crash ...

    Sorry. I could help myself, as soon as I read he pushed his foot down hard, I thought OH NO He'll smash the car!

    Hey is it my fault you write so well I had no ideas it was a TOY car?

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  9. Susan at Stony River18 September 2009 at 15:25

    What fun! We're so often pulled out of our fun by something stressful---it's brilliant to feel his stress and then wow, discover it's playtime. I really enjoyed that!

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  10. Empress Bee (of the high sea)18 September 2009 at 15:30

    that was a good one!

    daughter #1 had one of those when she was little, hers was a red mustang and it got stolen. gosh i had forgotten all about that until now.

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxo

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  11. Dumdad18 September 2009 at 16:58

    Good one!

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  12. anthonynorth18 September 2009 at 18:10

    Nicely done. I do love twisty tales :-)

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  13. Ron18 September 2009 at 18:45

    I don't know HOW you think of these. But m'dear...you are the BOMB!

    You amaze me with your clever wit!

    And thank you for yet another brilliant 55! I so enjoy these!

    Have a great weekend!
    X

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  14. Lulda Casadaga18 September 2009 at 18:49

    I can see where you got your inspiration for this 55...I just read your blog below and I'm glad you are ok. And thank god you had some honest witnesses!! Good luck!

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  15. Maggie May18 September 2009 at 18:58

    That was a good, fun story!
    I just love your Shy Talks comment that you left over at my place! Hilarious!

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  16. g-man18 September 2009 at 20:07

    Fiction or Non-Fiction...
    Ake loves her car tales!
    Excellent 55 My Dear...
    I just had a spa a tea myself...:-)
    Have a Safe Week-End....G

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  17. Dr.John18 September 2009 at 20:40

    I loved it. Yours are always full of misdirection like a magician with words.

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  18. Fandango18 September 2009 at 21:16

    Another sneaky human.
    Good 55
    Thank you for commenting on ours.

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  19. Spiky Zora Jones18 September 2009 at 21:38

    I love your imagination. I want to get in your head and open all the drawers and doors and see all that is akelamalu.

    You are so intriguing as a person and writer.

    thanks honey...I loved it.

    go ahead...say it. 'GOT YAH!' hehehe...yes you did, again.
    ciao honey.

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  20. Anonymous18 September 2009 at 21:49

    How appropriate to do something after that horrid incident you had the other day. You are so clever my friend. I truly don't know how you do it. Just awesome :) Have a wonderful Friday and a great weekend :) Aloha

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  21. San18 September 2009 at 21:51

    You have a way with a turning plot. And in so few words. That's a challenge you manage brilliantly.

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  22. Cloudia18 September 2009 at 22:04

    you got us again!!!!! ;-]


    aloha


    Comfort Spiral

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  23. Cloudia18 September 2009 at 22:05

    oh! hope you & car feel better ;-]

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  24. Dianne18 September 2009 at 23:14

    this one made me smile

    hope you're feeling OK, glad you weren't hurt!

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  25. Linda19 September 2009 at 01:27

    At least he's learning at a young age how to handle a car!

    How are you doing? Feel okay I hope? Any more news from that idiot cabbie??

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  26. Travis Cody19 September 2009 at 02:32

    Heheheheheheee!

    I had a Big Wheel when I was a kid. We didn't live where it snowed, but we did get a lot of rain and that would make lots of mud. And skidding about in the mud on a Big Wheel is FUN!

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  27. Tall Kay19 September 2009 at 04:44

    What a darling blog you have here my dear! How could I have missed this before? Excellent witty 55 and I'll be back soon. Have a GREAT weekend! Tall Karen

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  28. lettuce19 September 2009 at 10:19

    :-)
    this made me smile

    (and also made me wonder if we'll get snow again this winter....)

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  29. Shrinky19 September 2009 at 11:44

    Ah, you do this so well - smile. You had me there (again). Bravo!

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  30. Akelamalu19 September 2009 at 13:13

    I was up early Flowerpot, but I had scheduled this to post at 6 a.m. anyway. :)

    Thanks Quilly :)

    Oh that's great Mrs. N, I look forward to reading yours. :)

    Welcome Gloria, nice to meet you. I'm pleased you enjoyed my 55 and look forward to your future visits.

    I'm fine thanks Snowelf, just a tad annoyed at the taxi driver but I will let that go. :)

    Aha, gotcha Buff! ;)

    Got you too eh Daryl? LOL

    Thanks Susan, I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

    Oh your daughter must have been upset when her car got stolen Bee :(

    Cheers Dumdad :)

    I like twisty tales too Anthony :)

    Aw thanks Ron, you're very kind. x

    I actually wrote this 55 a while ago, before my accident Lulda - maybe it was premonition! :0

    I'm pleased my comment brought a smile to your face Maggie :)

    I hope this is the last of the car tales G-man! ;)

    Why thankyou Dr. John, you're very kind. x

    Sneaky? Me Fandango? LOL

    Haha I got you too Spiky! Glad you like it hon.

    As I told Lulda I wrote this a while ago Thom but it seemed appropriate to post it after what happened earlier in the week. :)

    Oh thankyou San I'm pleased you enjoyed it. :)

    I'm feeling fine thanks Cloudia and the car will be fixed next week. :)

    I'm happy to make you smile Dianne and thankyou. x

    Yes he's learning young Linda. Not heard from the cabbie but don't expect to, the insurance company are dealing with it. :)

    I bet your Mum loved it when you got all muddy Trav - NOT! LOL

    Welcome Tall Kay and thanks, I'm so pleased you like it here. :)

    Thanks Lettuce. I hope we don't get snow while I still have to drive to work. Come January it can snow all it likes! LOL

    Thanks Shrinky I like it when my twists work. :)

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  31. Maude Lynn20 September 2009 at 14:29

    Awww, this is cute!

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  32. Anndi20 September 2009 at 15:40

    I lost control of my ride-on once... it was a giant plastic ketchup bottle with wheels. I wonder what it would have looked like had I injured myself and bled.

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  33. Akelamalu20 September 2009 at 17:39

    Thanks Mama Zen :)

    It would have scared your mother half to death Andi! LOL

    Cheers Valerie :)

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  34. Caron21 September 2009 at 01:53

    What a good ending!

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  35. Connie T.21 September 2009 at 03:59

    This is cute.

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  36. MarmiteToasty21 September 2009 at 07:48

    Oneday, I might just guess the end..... but NOT this time... again LOL

    x

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  37. Sandi McBride21 September 2009 at 14:06

    LOVED IT!!! L O V E D I T !!!
    Sandi

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  38. secret agent woman21 September 2009 at 19:48

    This flashed me back to watching my sons drive around the yeard ina tiny electric jeep when they were little boys.

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  39. Real Live Lesbian21 September 2009 at 20:16

    You always rock the socks off of the 55!

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  40. A Lady's Life23 September 2009 at 04:22

    Well this is how you learn. My son is going for his real license now and his friend doesn't know the gas pedal from the brake. So we are taking him to drive the electric cars at the nursery so he gets a chance to learn and maybe try out the gas cars on the go cart car racing strip nearby. The kids used to love it when they went for birthday parties.Life is good. :)

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  41. A Lady's Life23 September 2009 at 04:22

    Well this is how you learn. My son is going for his real license now and his friend doesn't know the gas pedal from the brake. So we are taking him to drive the electric cars at the nursery so he gets a chance to learn and maybe try out the gas cars on the go cart car racing strip nearby. The kids used to love it when they went for birthday parties.Life is good. :)

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  42. Akelamalu24 September 2009 at 18:01

    Thankyou dsmcaron :)

    Cheers Connie :)

    LOL got you again eh Marmie?

    I'm pleased you loved it Sandi x

    I'm glad it brought back nice memories for you SAW x

    Aw thanks RLL x

    That's a great idea with the cars ALL!

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