Friday, 11 April 2008

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 22 Robbery

Robbery


“Hand over the cash and don’t make a fuss”.


“What? You can’t do this” she said


“Just put the money in the bag and hand it over”


“You don’t frighten me” she snapped


“You’re gonna get hurt if you don’t do it!”


“Go away and leave us alone.”







“Mummy, Johnny’s spoiling our game of shop!”




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32 comments:

  1. Pam11 April 2008 at 06:50

    ha ha...that's a good one. another great job on the 55. i just read galen's and barman's not too long ago...very good ones as well. i'm intimidated lol

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  2. Flowerpot11 April 2008 at 08:42

    another excellent one Ak. how do you do it?!

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  3. buffalodick11 April 2008 at 12:25

    That is part of the game these days....

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  4. G-Man11 April 2008 at 12:33

    I love your multi-media 55's Ake..
    You always do such a great job!!
    I LOVE your whimsy as well...
    have a GREAT Week-End sweetie...G
    xox

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  5. the mother of this lot11 April 2008 at 13:17

    Yep, you got me again with this one! Award over here for you.

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  6. James Goodman11 April 2008 at 13:18

    lol, I must admit... i thought that was going in a totally different direction. Nicely done. :D

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  7. la bellina mammina11 April 2008 at 13:30

    unexpected...love it!

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  8. Empress Bee (of the high sea)11 April 2008 at 13:57

    wow, that is pretty powerful stuff there honey!

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

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  9. Dianne11 April 2008 at 14:04

    an ominous start and a sweet finish - I love it!

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  10. Laura Jane Williams11 April 2008 at 14:05

    Phew. I thought were were in for an unhappy ending for a moment there! x

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  11. Suburbia11 April 2008 at 14:28

    Sounds so familiar, my waring factions are home for the holidays....bless them!

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  12. Akelamalu11 April 2008 at 16:17

    No need to feel intimidated Ciara, just go for it!

    I'm not sure how I do it Flowerpot? #)

    Yep It is Buffalo :(

    Why thank you g-manx

    LOL I'll be right over MOTL

    Just as I hoped James :)

    Thanks Bella x

    Aw thanks Bee x

    That was the idea Dianne, thanks hon.

    It was a relief to me too GIM ;)

    I remember it well Suburbia :0

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  13. Linda11 April 2008 at 16:50

    Glad to see that there was a good ending to this one - I wasn't sure where it was going exactly!

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  14. Unknown11 April 2008 at 17:05

    Nice. {:-)

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  15. storyteller11 April 2008 at 18:39

    How fun to see how you handle the topic each week! Your ‘take’ and ‘delivery’ consistently surprise and delight!
    Hugs and blessings,

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  16. Dumdad11 April 2008 at 18:42

    Damn, I didn't see it coming - again!

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  17. Gledwood11 April 2008 at 19:19

    did you hear about the 50something year old grandmother in New York who was doing armed robberies and saying "sorry" to the poor traumatized gun-toted-at bank tellers...

    ... she only got caught by going over a toll bridge and getting busted by some b*****d seeing her "wanted" poster..!

    many thanks for your message at mine:... have a charmin' weekend!!

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  18. Akelamalu11 April 2008 at 19:34

    Not so happy for Johnny when Mum caught up with him Linda!

    Thanks Nick :)

    Thank you Storyteller you're very kind. :)

    LOL you will, eventually Dumdad. :)

    An armed robber with a conscience Gleds? That's novel! You're welcome m'dear and I hope you have a good weekend too. x

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  19. maryt/theteach11 April 2008 at 19:50

    Very funny, Akelamalu! You crack me up! Thanks for visiting me! :D

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  20. snowelf11 April 2008 at 21:17

    Akelamalu!! Are you sure you're not at my house?!! :P This totally made me laugh cause I can relate and you know how much I love plot twists!! :)

    Have a great weekend!

    --snow

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  21. Donnetta12 April 2008 at 02:45

    That was too cute! I enjoyed the pictures, too. Come see my 55. It's up!
    Donnetta

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  22. jillie12 April 2008 at 02:51

    What a great 55! Thanks for stopping by. Love the blog and the pictures of your family on the side are awesome!

    Have a good wknd ;o)

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  23. Ron12 April 2008 at 04:08

    Ok, dear lady...can I just tell you AGAIN how BRILLIANT you are with these things!!!

    This CRACKED me up!!!

    I don't know...but I sense an e-book being published!!!

    You GO, girl!

    Happy Weekend Akelamalu!

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  24. Anonymous12 April 2008 at 04:18

    Fun - I love your twists at teh end of these.

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  25. Akelamalu12 April 2008 at 09:14

    Glad you liked it Teach :)

    It was drawn from experience Snowelf! :)

    Thanks Donnetta, I'll be right over.

    Why thankyou Jillie and thanks for dropping by.

    An E-book Ron? Well you never know! ;) Thanks.

    Cheers Citizen x

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  26. Cha Cha12 April 2008 at 19:47

    I always love reading yours with all the pictures.

    You make the 55's so much fun.

    This one was hilarious.

    I miss pretending like a little kid.

    It's probably why I still do it way too often.

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  27. Misty DawnS12 April 2008 at 23:21

    Ahahaha a surprise fun ending! Love it!

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  28. ~ej13 April 2008 at 01:51

    lol, i love these, and your surprise endings!! :)

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  29. Travis Cody13 April 2008 at 04:25

    You always put a good twist on these. Well done!

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  30. Akelamalu13 April 2008 at 11:29

    I get to pretend all the time Strumpet - with our grandchildren! :)

    Glad you enjoyed it Misty x

    Thanks Elena :)

    Cheers Trav x

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  31. Cath14 April 2008 at 00:49

    You DO tell a good tale with a nice twist at the end. I am still astounded at how you manage it in 55 words!

    From a very wordy person.

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  32. Akelamalu14 April 2008 at 20:27

    LOL thanks Cath :)

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