Friday, 28 March 2008

Friday 55 Flash Fiction # 20 Temper, Temper

Temper, temper



She scrubbed furiously at the toilet, careful to get right under the rim.
Dislodged gunge dribbling into the bowl.





“Damn, damn, damn” she fumed
Cleaning was the only way to assuage her anger.
It calmed her frayed nerves.






“That’ll show him” she said






As she rinsed his toothbrush and put it back in the holder.




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38 comments:

  1. Pam28 March 2008 at 09:13

    hmmm arseholes who get a bit of their own crap back at em (literally). GROSS! LOL another great job @ the 55! xo

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  2. Flowerpot28 March 2008 at 09:40

    I've heard of people doign that! I'd have to be REALLY mad!!!

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  3. Laura Jane Williams28 March 2008 at 11:50

    Oooooh, that is SO MEAN! But brilliant.

    G.I.M x

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  4. buffalodick28 March 2008 at 11:55

    Not nice! However, being a guy- I'm pretty sure he didn't even notice...

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  5. Empress Bee (of the high sea)28 March 2008 at 13:24

    oh too funny! great writing!

    smiles, bee
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxo

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  6. Akelamalu28 March 2008 at 15:00

    Very mean, but sweet Ciara!

    I've never been quite that mad Flowerpot. :)

    Welcome GIM, glad you liked it. :)

    LOL I think you may be right there Buffalo! :)

    Thanks Bee x

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  7. James Goodman28 March 2008 at 15:18

    EEWWW!!! That's too funny. Great 55. Mine's up if you care to take a gander. :D

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  8. lime28 March 2008 at 15:50

    mwahahahahahahaha!!!! one should never anger the one responsible for the cleaning!

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  9. Akelamalu28 March 2008 at 17:45

    Cheer James, I enjoyed your's too!

    Definitely not Lime ((wink))

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  10. Lori28 March 2008 at 18:18

    OMG! We wrote on the same subject! lol I like it!

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  11. Linda28 March 2008 at 18:50

    Absolutely perfect!!!

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  12. CG28 March 2008 at 18:53

    I once used an old toothbrush of hubby's to clean scrum from round my taps. Absentmindedly I forgot to put it back with my cleaning supplies; imagine my horror the next day when i saw him using it!! But he survived....

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  13. Dumdad28 March 2008 at 19:00

    Hmmm, I'd better check my toothbrush! Another good 55.

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  14. the rotten correspondent28 March 2008 at 19:59

    HA! And did your heroine feel better after that??

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  15. bindhiya28 March 2008 at 20:53

    Another Great #55!

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  16. ~ej28 March 2008 at 21:05

    lol, funny ;)

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  17. Jeff B28 March 2008 at 23:18

    That received a full on belly laugh from me. Nice 55

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  18. Anndi28 March 2008 at 23:37

    That'll teach him to aim properly!

    hehehe!

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  19. G-Man28 March 2008 at 23:43

    AKE...!!!
    EEEEwww
    That 55 reminded me of a Seinfeld episode..
    And I LOVED that one too!!
    hehehe
    Great Job sweetie, thanks for playing, and have a great week-end...G
    xox

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  20. Real Live Lesbian28 March 2008 at 23:54

    That made me laugh out loud! Great job!

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  21. Travis Cody29 March 2008 at 00:26

    Ew!

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  22. storyteller29 March 2008 at 00:41

    Hahahahahahahahha!!! Ohmygosh that’s incredible!!! LOL
    Hugs and blessings,

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  23. barman29 March 2008 at 01:49

    Amazing and disgusting and I am sure whomever the target is, they deserved it. The sad thing is it probably will not be noticed. Very good 55.

    Excuse me while I hide my toothbrush...

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  24. Ron29 March 2008 at 03:29

    You absolutley kill me with these, Akelamalu!!!!

    BRILLIANT, dear lady.

    I laughed my high-knee off!!!

    It serves him right!!

    Enjoy your weekend, my friend!

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  25. x29 March 2008 at 06:48

    hahaha. poor hubby. hehe.

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  26. Akelamalu29 March 2008 at 10:07

    Great minds think alike eh Lori? :)

    Thanks Linda x

    Oh you didn't CG? Tell me you didn't!

    I'm sure you haven't done anything to warrant Mrs D to use your toothbrush in such a way Dumdad? ;)

    Sure she did RC! :)

    Thanks Bindi x

    We shouldn't laugh Elena (she says sniggering behind her hand)!

    I bet you're checking your toothbrush right now though Jeff! :)

    Quite Anndi!

    Of course I would never do anything like that G-man! ;)

    Welcome RLL, glad you enjoyed it. :)

    Ew is right Trav makes you feel sick eh?

    Thanks Storyteller x

    I'm sure he deserved it too Barman but you wouldn't do anything to deserve such revenge would you honey? :)

    Ah Cheers Ron xxx

    Yes poor hubby Acey LOL

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  27. the mother of this lot29 March 2008 at 14:01

    This is so real it sounds like it could have been written from experience....you've not have you?

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  28. Akelamalu29 March 2008 at 16:22

    LOL no I haven't MOTL, thought I've felt like it a time or two! :)

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  29. Odat29 March 2008 at 21:28

    Very, very good!!!! Caught me off guard..which is the best kind!
    Peace

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  30. Anonymous30 March 2008 at 05:17

    Yikes! Hopes that's not autobiographical!

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  31. S30 March 2008 at 07:39

    LOL that is hilarious, and also disgusting!
    Dislodged gunge? ACK ACK ACK!

    At least you rinsed it after!

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  32. Akelamalu30 March 2008 at 11:11

    Glad you enjoyed it rebicmel :)

    Thanks Odat x

    No, no, I would never do anything like that Citizen! ;)

    Of course she rinsed it Susie what sort of a gal do you think she is? ((wink))

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  33. Daryl30 March 2008 at 15:13

    Clever .. but that's what I think whenever I read one of your posts!

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  34. Akelamalu30 March 2008 at 18:00

    Why thank you Daryl, how kind of you. :)

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  35. smarmoofus31 March 2008 at 01:37

    Absolutely BRILLIANT! Disgusting, and perfect. *admire* Great job!

    -smarmoofus

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  36. Akelamalu31 March 2008 at 12:55

    Why thank you Smarmoofus I'm please you enjoyed it. xx

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  37. Jo Beaufoix3 April 2008 at 10:51

    Hee hee, very apt for your revenge piece later on. ;D

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  38. Akelamalu3 April 2008 at 15:03

    That's what I thought Jo!

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