Friday, 16 November 2007

Friday 55 Flash Fiction #1 The Last Kiss

This is my first attempt at 55 Flash Fiction - I hope you like it, let me know what you think.


The last kiss.


Kiss me she said, just one last time.
He kissed her tenderly.




I’m too young to die.
You will remember to bring me flowers every week won’t you?



And you won’t forget me ever?





Don’t be silly darling, he said,
The tooth will be out before you know it and then you can come home!

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38 comments:

  1. Queenie16 November 2007 at 09:31

    Well done you, great 55.

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  2. buffalodick16 November 2007 at 12:14

    When I started reading it, I thought "Oh Brother, girlie mush!" Then the turn came and I chuckled! Very good!

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  3. Unknown16 November 2007 at 13:40

    What a great little play on words and feelings. I like this.
    Thank YOU.

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  4. Empress Bee (of the high sea)16 November 2007 at 13:53

    i don't know what it is. is it a meme or something?

    smiles, bee

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  5. RUTH16 November 2007 at 15:00

    That's brilliant. Having a bit of a phobia about dentists I understand this only too well :o)
    Rx

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  6. Akelamalu16 November 2007 at 16:20

    Thanks Queenie x

    Glad you liked it Buffalo :)

    Oh Cheers Dave. :)

    No really a Meme Bee. You have to write a story in exactly 55 words which much have at least one character.

    Aw thanks for the encouragementRuth x

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  7. Mona16 November 2007 at 17:16

    LOL! That was so funny! I really loved the twist in the end!

    Wonderful 55. Welcome to the world of 55ves!

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  8. Anonymous16 November 2007 at 17:16

    great debut 55

    I only ever got round to doing
    the one... it's a bit like the
    writing prompts I should use,
    but since I never know what day
    of the week it is!!!!!

    have a great weekend

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  9. Akelamalu16 November 2007 at 17:40

    Oh thankyou Mona, that means a lot after having read yours! Thanks for droping by. x

    Cheers Ann, I'm flattered. :)

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  10. barman16 November 2007 at 17:44

    Very well done. I think you will find the hardest thing is finding something to write about. After that, it is pretty easy. I think you are a natural.

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  11. Pam16 November 2007 at 17:50

    well you are lot braver than i am! great 55. it kind of reminded me of new planet. http://new-planet.blogspot.com he just had an extraction done lol

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  12. Akelamalu16 November 2007 at 18:04

    Why thankyou barman, how nice of you and thanks for dropping by x

    Cheers Ciara I'll take a look at new planet. x

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  13. Charles16 November 2007 at 18:36

    :) I like your 55. Great start, you'll do these well, I can tell.

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  14. Akelamalu16 November 2007 at 18:50

    You're too kind Charles but I thank you. :)

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  15. Sophia16 November 2007 at 18:56

    That's great...and for your first time! Very very great! :)

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  16. Unknown16 November 2007 at 19:07

    Great debut 55 Akela, well done you!

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  17. Akelamalu16 November 2007 at 19:24

    Thankyou Sophia and Pauline :)

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  18. lime16 November 2007 at 19:39

    lol, nicely done! terrific first entry!

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  19. Akelamalu16 November 2007 at 19:52

    Thank you kindly Lime :)

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  20. Mother of Invention16 November 2007 at 20:36

    I've never heard of or seen these! I wonder who makes them all up? Anyway, this is a neat one!

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  21. Akelamalu16 November 2007 at 20:38

    Glad you like it MOI :)

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  22. G-Man17 November 2007 at 00:34

    Any friend of Queenies and Ann, is a friend of mine!! Great 55, please keep playing!!...Galen

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  23. Neoma17 November 2007 at 07:17

    haha....I think I get the idea of flash fiction, and I think you did a great job. It was funny too......gave me a chuckle.

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  24. Dumdad17 November 2007 at 08:50

    Neat sting in the tail. I enjoyed this.

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  25. Elaine Denning17 November 2007 at 10:00

    I hate the dentist.

    That was a great 55...especially as it had a twist at the end. Well done :)

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  26. Akelamalu17 November 2007 at 10:18

    Welcome G-Man thanks for dropping by. I will try again next week! :)

    Glad you had a laugh Nea :)

    Thanks dumdad x

    Me too Miss U glad you enjoyed the twist. xx

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  27. katie eggeman17 November 2007 at 17:45

    Well this looks like fun!

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  28. Akelamalu17 November 2007 at 17:50

    It is Bankerchick, might you have a go?

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  29. Unknown17 November 2007 at 23:10

    First-rate job: romantic, intense, heartrending—and hilarious!

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  30. S18 November 2007 at 00:41

    Ohhhhh man can I ever relate to this 55, LOL! But then by now you have already read my 55 and you know why.
    Hilarious!
    Welcome to 55 Flash Fiction Friday!

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  31. Travis Cody18 November 2007 at 01:56

    Nice little twist. I liked it.

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  32. Lo Kelween18 November 2007 at 03:10

    ha, you made me feel romantic for a while and suddenly, it ended like this...good job done..ahha :)

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  33. Akelamalu18 November 2007 at 10:33

    Thankyou saintly nick, glad you enjoyed it. :)

    LOL great minds think alike eh Susie! I'm hooked now! :)

    Thanks Travis x

    Exactly the response I was hoping for Elween, glad you enjoyed it. x

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  34. Ron18 November 2007 at 19:29

    Bravo Akelamalu!!!!

    Clever and ingenous of you!

    (clap,clap,clap)

    This is too cool!

    Ciao,
    Ron

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  35. Mimi Lenox19 November 2007 at 04:16

    Didn't see that coming. The mark of a great writer. Well done. Keep at it.

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  36. Akelamalu19 November 2007 at 15:37

    Thanks for the applause Ron, you're very kind. x

    Why thank you Mimi that's praise indeed coming from one of the best writers in the blogosphere! xx

    Glad you had a laugh cg :)

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  37. Jo Beaufoix21 November 2007 at 19:47

    Hee hee.
    Typical man.

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  38. Akelamalu21 November 2007 at 20:34

    Quite Jo :)

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